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Review of chapter "Five People He Lost" from Blackett
Review:
You can't help but love Tony. It is a fact. He can annoy at times but he is..well wonderful.
Review By [Blackett] • Date [28 Oct 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Five People He Lost" from (Moderator)Demona
Review:
This piece was just so sad, especially the parts about his parents because they weren't parents - not at all. They were people that had created him but they definitely weren't parents.

I think you have got such a fantastic grasp on Tony. Seriously. You've managed to get deep inside the head of this character and by doing so, everything that you write feels so real, so genuine.

I can't imagine how much of an awful childhood you have to have to believe it is easier to go through life without getting close to people. I know you don't get hurt but you also don't feel, don't experience life. And it makes me want to strangle Tony's parents for being so dumb, dense, and asshole-ish to him. How can you treat a kid like that??

Kate! Oh Kate!! It still hurts to watch some of the old episodes and see her running around, verbally sparring with Gibbs and Tony and then to go back and watch the new episodes with Ziva.

Tony's loss of Gibbs was just... That episode was so painful to watch and then to read your commentary/thoughts on it with Tony's pov - wow.

And then the end! He lost himself! *wails* That was the hardest part to read. And to come to that realization within yourself - to know that you have lost yourself! I can't imagine...not at all.

EDITING STUFF:
When the director approached me several weeks about the possibility of doing some undercover work that was to be considered eyes-only, I jumped at the chance.
** I think you need to add 'later' after 'several weeks'

By the time my cover was blown along with my car, I was broken.
**I think you many want to put a comma after 'blown' because the 'along with my car' part isn't necessary to the sentence and can be read without it. You know?

PS - I was watching an older episode of NCIS last night (where Cait was still alive) and it made me smile. Cause Tony was soooo young looking. And he has this amazing huge smile. And then I was thinking about him and Xander *snicker* though that isn't really canon, but you've kinda made it that way for me.
Comments from author:
I really, really like Tony. There's so much to him that's left unsaid. And Michael Weatherly does such a great job with the expressions on his face that even when Tony is saying something, the expression can take it a completely different way.

All the little things that's been dropped about the family just add up to a not so stellar childhood for Tony. There's the fact that he always says father instead of dad. Even in Season Five, when La Grenouille asked him if his father was a good man, Tony got this 'look' and said 'he was'. Since we can figure that Tony's dad isn't dead (he sent him a powersander early on for a birthday present) then why did he use the past tense in replying...?

Then there's the whole left in Hawaii, being the poo-boy at the Civil War reenactments, being dressed like a sailor until he was ten by his mom, having a fear of vampires because of how his mom decorated his room with a canopy bed... the list goes on and on... And the way he said 'usually' when answering Jeffrey's question about 'did your dad ever hit you?'... well... if he was 'usually' too drunk to do anything, then what did he do the times not covered by usually?

I think Tony had a better working relationship with Kate than he does with Ziva. With Kate, they teased, but I think Kate knew he was capable. With Ziva, the teasing is in a different light. And I think that Ziva doesn't really trust anyone (except maybe Gibbs).

And I really think he needs some head straightening done after that whole undercover thing. I mean, how could anyone go as long as he did being two people and not come out of it 100% normal?

PS: and Tony and Xander sitting in a tree, K-I-S-S-I-N-G... ;-)
Review By [(Moderator)Demona] • Date [24 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five People He Lost" from FiveOfFive
Review:
1) So funny and sweet, I really liked Gibbs POV, and that he actually missed having Tony around

2) I've often thought that Tony didn't get enough credit for being a good guy, it was great getting to see that side of him

3) *manic laughter* I'm surprised there are only five! I loved the "I think I saw this in a movie" line, and that Gibbs immediately understood why he'd written the letter, and that they watch old Cary Grant movies together

4) I'd always wondered if Tony had noticed the missing Silver Star. I'm blown away by how well you understand all of the characters and what drives them

5) It's nice to see Tony getting some love, he tries not to but he really needs his team

6) And now I'm crying. This one is probably my favorite, 1 or 3 would be the next closest. I love the way you portray Tony, the reasons behind all of his joking. How wrecked he was by Gibbs leaving, and how even though Gibbs is the one who left him vulnerable, he's still the only person Tony can go to. You have an amazing ability to capture the essence of these characters and I can only sit back in awe, and find whatever else you've written and check it out.
Comments from author:
(1) You just know that Gibbs likes Tony around even if he doesn't show. And you know Tony likes being around Gibbs even if he doesn't show it. They are good for each other whether as friends or lovers.

(2) Yeah... many don't like Tony because they only look at the way he acts. They don't pay attention to what he does when he's not acting.

(3) I had many, many more ways for her to almost kill him. I wanted to have a driving mishap in there, but the others wrote easier. I may flesh that letter bit out to a full blown fic one day.

(4) Over at NFA there was discussion as to when the Silver Star was put in his collection because the last time we saw it, there was only the NCIS awards for each year that Tony would have been working there. That's what spawned this fic actually. I wanted to write when the other medals appeared in the collection and figured it happened when Gibbs moved Tony's stuff out of his desk.

(5) Tony love is good. :-)

(6) *hands out tissue* I kinda feel that no matter what is going on between them, if Tony really, really needed him, Gibbs would be there or Tony would go to him. And I know that Tony had to be screwed up by the way Gibbs left. I have a follow up piece to this one in the works titled, How Do You Solve A Problem Like DiNozzo. It's going to be from Gibbs' view point and be five times he helped Tony out. The first will start with Baltimore and the last will be what happens at the end of this fic when Tony walks down the steps.
Review By [FiveOfFive] • Date [8 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Helpful Moments" from (Moderator)Demona
Review:
1) *snicker* This one just takes us on a whole array of emotions from start to finish. Tony's defensive mechanisms are strong - they keep the weak-spirited away from him. I hurt for him - I wish he could have had a better childhood, a better way of being raised, but then he wouldn't be the same Tony that we know and love. And yay for Abby interferring and sending McGee in to rescue him. And I'm glad that McGee offered and that Tony ultimately accepted.

2) Yay for McGee showing up to entertain and comfort Tony after he was released from the hosptial. Going home to an empty apartment, after a life-threatening experience, isn't the best situation. I'm glad that McGee saw fit to join Tony in his home.

3) Bless McGee for sticking around, telling Tony he isn't toostupid, and then changing the subject when Tony didn't even try to seque smoothly. I heart McGee!

4) Yay for Tony coming up with a strategy all on his own. Gibbs' method works for Gibbs, but it doesn't mean it is the only way to do things, and it certainly didn't work for Tony. I'm so happy that he came up with his own idea and was able to get the guy in custody.

5) That was such a well-done internal thought process for that scene. The whole time I was watching that scene I just felt completely awful for Tony. He had lost so much, so much more than anyone really deserved to ever lose. And then he had to choose. And I know, as does he, that he chose right. And I'm glad that McGee played a part in that.
Review By [(Moderator)Demona] • Date [27 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Four He Gained And One He Lost" from (Moderator)Demona
Review:
Seriously, you always make me feel so bad for Tony. So, he attends the first ceremony and Gibbs gets an award and doesn't even bother to show up to get it. I really liked how you had Gibbs just blow Tony's outstretched hand off and then have Gibbs announce they were going to the range and that DiNozzo should hurry the hell up and come on!

And yay, Tony finally working it out get the award on Gibbs' behalf, only to have his speech cut off by the Director. Boo! Boo on the Director!

The ending was kinda bittersweet. Tony had the idea to give away a medal, and Gibbs had already gone in a gotten a better medal to give to the Marine. And Tony isn't a dumb agent, but Gibbs - he is just one step ahead - and has many, many years experience on Tony and the rest of the team.

Another great set! You rock!!
Review By [(Moderator)Demona] • Date [27 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Ways She Almost Killed Him" from (Moderator)Demona
Review:
I'm going to review these time by time: :)

1) Oh poor Tony. Yes, it wouldn't have killed him, but I'm pretty damn sure he thought the world was ending when scalding coffee ended up in his lap!! Oh noes!! And then Ziva's sneaky little comment at the end was perfect. Great characterization :)

2) Oh Ziva. I'm sure, had she known about Tony's history/past she would have tried hard not to utter those words to him. But alas, she did and the damage was swift and immediate that would linger. Oh Gibbs, I'm so happy that you arrived to save the day. Keep a close eye on Tony, his brain isn't always in the right place. And just as much as I loved the fact that he arrived with pain pills and company, it hurt (just right) that Tony added the pills to the list that could end his pain.

3) Careless, careless Ziva. She could have killed Tony. Thank god for McGee!

4) Oh Gibbs *tackles and loves on him* Tough love for Tony - that is how Gibbs handles him - but could you imagine it any other way. Gibbs knows more about Tony than Tony thinks. I'm glad Gibbs gave Tony the time to explain before attacking him. And bad, bad meddling, snooping Ziva. *hugs Gibbs for the ending*

5) And Ziva - gotta love her tormenting Tony while he's stuck in the hosptial on pain pills. And she shot him! Shot him!

I've said it before and I'll keep saying it - I heart your NCIS muse.
Comments from author:
(1) No, death wouldn't have occurred, but I bet it hurt like a bitch... Wonder how embarrassed Tony was when Ducky offered to check to make sure everything was okay? I mean Ducky did check things out for McGee when he had poison ivy down there.

(2) Yeah, I like to think Ziva knew it would hurt Tony to find out the others had been invited and he hadn't. That she was trying to get her foot in the door with Gibbs and everyone and the only way she saw to do that was to get Tony out of the picture for a bit. Poor Tony.

(3) Definitely careless and yay for McGee!

(4) Yeah, I think Ziva just saw it and thought it would be fun to see Gibbs reaction. I also don't think she looked at dates and they wouldn't have told her anything anyway. I don't think she realizes how deep their relationship is (father/son/friend in this regard) and that reading the things Tony wrote would hurt Gibbs' feelings, cause Gibbs likes to think that Tony knows he loves him even if he doesn't tell him. Gibbs picked up the dates right away and of course had to go comfort himself AND Tony that night for the old hurt being dragged out.

(5) Shoot the hostage! It's that Sandra Bullock movie. Speed. :-)
Review By [(Moderator)Demona] • Date [3 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Times He Cared" from junnights
Review:
Love it:) just want 'nother chapter:) hehe
Comments from author:
Glad you liked! Leave me a 5 things prompt if you want... Can't guarntee I can do it, but I'll see.
Review By [junnights] • Date [25 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Times He Cared" from (Moderator)Demona
Review:
Awww more NCIS-ness!!!! Yay!!!

And you expanded your writing range and used McGee! *snuggles McGee*

I like this. The insecure, newbie vibe that you have McGee give off is spot-on for his character. And his inital reaction to Tony and his opinion of the man being a moron and not capable of handling his post was so honest and real. Tony comes off as a moron, but the guy didn't get where he is without having something besides his good looks and snappy wit to get by.

And I like how, despite McGee being a newbie, Tony helps him through the issues he has.

Great job!
Comments from author:
I really think it would have taken time for McGee to really understand Tony and I think he is still working on it. Early on there was a scene between McGee and Abby and he was complaining about how much Tony teased him and Abby was like, "that means he like you." (or something like that)

Tony is always there to help his team even when he's being a complete jerk. It's like a split personality or stems from his father issues I'm fairly certain Tony has.

And look, I didn't kill McGee in this one! :-)
Review By [(Moderator)Demona] • Date [25 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Things Tony Left Behind" from (Moderator)Demona
Review:
Aww, I just adore the fact that Gibbs let Tony live in his house when Tony needed a place. And it doesn't surprise me that Tony left shit everywhere. The "five" items that Tony left behind were wonderful and great little insights into his character. And then Gibbs seeing what was left behind and reflecting personally on it was great.

I just heart your NCIS kick :)
Comments from author:
I like how they did that in the show. There was part where Tony was asking around to find someone to stay and Gibbs early on said, "remember last time?" and Tony was like, "I was younger then, less mature..."

Then at the end of the episode Tony was getting ready to leave the scene and he didn't have anywhere to go and Gibbs was just like, "the door's unlocked," and Tony was like, "I know."

You just know that Tony would leave things lying around screwing with Gibbs most likely well ordered house. But underneath, Gibbs is a softy when it comes to Tony. :-)

I heart my kick too. :-)
Review By [(Moderator)Demona] • Date [25 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Times He Cared" from cflat
Review:
Good story. Nice McGee POV. There aren't many of that out there.
Comments from author:
There are McGee fans/fics around though I tend to lean towards Tony then Gibbs and Abby.

Glad you liked it!
Review By [cflat] • Date [24 Nov 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Five Things Tony Left Behind" from AzureChaos
Review:
Very sweet. I loved the card, nice touch with the st.bernard on it :)

nate
Comments from author:
Glad you liked!

I ran through a lot of options for what the card would be and it was either some busty redhead or a dog of some sort. The dog won out. :-)
Review By [AzureChaos] • Date [24 Nov 07] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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