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Review of chapter "Little Sister" from physicsteach
Review:
A bit terse, right at the line, if not over, of being too choppy.

Also, there's at least one missing blank line after a paragraph - an easy thing to correct.

After that, let me commend you - it's quite a good start and I'm looking forward to more.
Review By [physicsteach] • Date [15 Dec 07] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Little Sister" from Twoboots
Review:
Oh, this is good! Continue it, please?
Review By [Twoboots] • Date [15 Dec 07] • Not Rated
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