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Review of chapter "A Charmed One And A Vampire (Prue/Angel)" from Orion
Hey! Got this as one of my "random selections" from the "No More Zeroes, Anymore" campaign (if you've not been to tth in a while, it's a campaign to make sure all fics have reviews.

Ok, so here I go. First off, please take this as the creative criticism it's meant to be: helpful advice.

The picture: I liked it. It's far from the best photo-mainip I've seen, and Prue seems a little disproportionately sized, but it's mostly good.

What I would have liked to see in this though, is some sort of story. A single sentence to set up the scene. It's clearly not either the sister's house from Charmed, nor Angel's place (either in SunnyD or LA). Where are they? Was this the morning after a 1 night stand, or have they been married for years? How long has Angle been Human (sunlight on his face) or maybe that's a benefit of dating a witch?

Also, The picture could really use a title.

As I said, the fic itself shows promise: I hope you keep practicing, and good luck on your next.
Review By [Orion] • Date [29 Jun 08] • Not Rated
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