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Review of chapter "Searching" from purrfus
Review:
While it drives me crazy when stories are years in the making, this one has come a long way. I don't know what the time frame was between chapter 1 and chapter 12 but what a difference - in content, style, and presentation.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [28 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dark and Confusing Times" from Lin
Review:
Xander laughed. "Never in my life have I met anyone who didn't know what a TV was."
"That is the box with pictures, if I'm not mistaken?"

I LOVE this line.
I like that you are actually showing us what is going on in buffy and willows classes...how you are explaining what they are doing. Many writers neglect that part....which makes no sense considering they are in a school lol
I hope that you also include some peeks into the other classes as well.
Review By [Lin] • Date [2 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dark and Confusing Times" from Lin
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in chapter five where Buffy comes in all brused and cut and what not you do have them questioning amongst themselves but come on..they are meddlesome kids....in all the books that is what gets them into danger..they need to be a bit more suspicious.
Review By [Lin] • Date [2 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Dark and Confusing Times" from Lin
Review:
I started reading this and was not impressed with teh first few chapters, i then scanned through the reviews and noticed that others said that the later chapters were a great improvment...this is why i'm going to continue reading, (i wish tth would have it so you can review individual chapters instead of waiting until the end, by the end i have forgotten most of the things i wanted to say)
As i said before i'm going to continue reading and i'll probably review as i go because i have a terrible memory.
First i suggest that you rework the first few chapters because people might not give the story a chance because of them, they aren't terrible but they do need some work.
The part where they arrive at the horsless carrage..and you put the A/n about not bothering putting in the thestrals....you missed out on some great conversations about how the gang reacts to them..granted it has been done before..but even if you didn't want to go into detail in the area where your A/N is you could have easily said "they saw strange demon looking horses pulling hte carrage and wondered what kind of strange man let these things around kids" or something like that...or left out anything about them at all. Sorry if that is nitpicky...but really details like this are what can make a story great, make it more interesting. Everything does not have to revolve around the main plot. Or maybe i just like the thestrals ok? :: pouts::
They kind of jump from sunnyhell to hogwarts kind of quickly and the big slayer secret...is kinda supposed to be a secret...i find it odd that in most stories the whole wizarding world knows about slayers and buffy knows very little about the wizarding world. Your characterizations are good though, i am enjoying your Tara, in many fictions i find the way her character is written to be obnoxious. Show some more emotion about how Willow is feeling since she knows that Giles had Formal magic training and did very little to help her along as a witch (in my opinon anyway...though i still love giles) Show how the characters are feeling through the way they are acting and through dialog more so tahn spelling it out for the reader. I'm sorry if most of this seems critical but you did ask for our opinions and know that taking critisism will help you improve as a writer (i'm sure from others reviews that you have improved greatly and i can't wait to get to the newer chapters)
Ok, i need to stop my ramble...and continue reading..heh i mostly just wanted to get in here to put in the thestral comment.
So..umm..yeah...keep writing...and i'll keep reviewing as i go. :D

Oh...i hope that in later chapters you have somewhere in there about how the grangers reacted to both of their daughters being magicall....JK never really got into hermionies home life...
Review By [Lin] • Date [2 Dec 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Leads and Classes" from purrfus
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The first few chapters moved fast maybe a little too fast. The scene with Willow and Tara is a little awkward, and seems more of an interruption than part of the process. From the original post date this has been a work in progress for a while, so I am going to assume some things have changed and have decided to continue reading.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I know what you mean. I wasn't as happy with the early parts of the story as I am with the more recent parts. I'm still learning about writing fan fiction, so thanks for your comments :)
Review By [purrfus] • Date [1 Dec 06] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dark and Confusing Times" from mithrilandtj
Review:
Okay I just found this story. So far I've gotten as far as chapter 4, so far so good.
I REALLY like the premise with Dawn being at Hogwarts.

You must keep writing!!! ;-) I'll go nuts if this isn't updated at LEAST once a month.

(PS: I'd keep reading tonight but it's 2 am and my pillow is calling... loudly.) ;-P i wish sleep could be optional sometimes.
Comments from author:
Ooh, yay, glad to see I've got a new reader! I'll try my best to give you regular updates, otherwise maybe you should start picking out an asylum for yourself now. lol :P
Review By [mithrilandtj] • Date [1 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Forest" from (Past Donor)Kiara
Review:
Even with all the action at the end, my final thought was about whether Dawn and Harry get together! I like sappy stuff so I hope it's soon. Update when you can!
Kiara x
Comments from author:
Hehe, I like sappy stuff too... but you definitely enjoy it a lot more when you've had to wait for it or there's a big drama. Thanks for reviewing!! Almost done on the next chapter! :)

EDIT - Make that done on the next chapter! Yay!!
Review By [(Past Donor)Kiara] • Date [21 Jan 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Secrets Will Only Tear Us Apart" from organicmagic
Review:
I like where you are going with this, starting to tie it all in. Excellent as usual.
~Kinki.
Comments from author:
Thanks! Yeah, I had all these ideas early on and it's exciting to actually be able to put them into words now. :)
Review By [organicmagic] • Date [1 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hurt Like Hell" from MrsAndisMom
Review:
I really like this. I hadn't read it before. I Hope you keep it up.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much! It's great to hear from someone who has read this for the first time.... and don't worry, the next chapter is being written right now. Should be a couple of days. :)
Review By [MrsAndisMom] • Date [15 Nov 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "That's Not Me" from organicmagic
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-- And if you love reading her character, you'll love the next chapter --
I most certainly did! I liked the Ginny/Draco interaction too. I wouldn't worry that you are getting 'off track' as it were, personally I like to see a story with interlocking plotlines, something I can really sink my teeth into and this is one of those stories. It also helps deepen Dawn's story by letting us get to know your ideas of the characters surrounding her int hat situation.

You have written all of the characters well I think, none of them seemed jarring and that is always the mark of a good writer. I can't wait for more! :D
Comments from author:
Ooh yay, thank you for your comments and advice. It's also very reassuring because I haven't had much of it lately. :( You rock!
Review By [organicmagic] • Date [1 Mar 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Underneath the Mistletoe" from organicmagic
Review:
I liked this, I really have enjoyed the emphasis you have put on Tara, I really love reading her character.
Comments from author:
In risk of sounding desperate - Yay, a review!! Hehe. Anyway, thanks for the review, I decided to put some focus onto some other characters because I realised that I was focusing too much on Dawn. And if you love reading her character, you'll love the next chapter *wink wink* :)
Review By [organicmagic] • Date [13 Feb 05] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Building A Mystery" from Lilly
Review:
this is interesting and I like your writing style. :) will be watching out for more.
Comments from author:
Wow, thanks for that. I haven't had a review on Tth in ages, and it brightened up my day to read yours. :D
Review By [Lilly] • Date [21 Nov 04] • Not Rated
Review of story "The Key of Hogwarts" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
Poor dawnie :(

But it would be boring if everything happened the way we thought it would!

Great chapter! Can't wait to see what's going to happen!

Happy Christmas
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [19 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "The Key of Hogwarts" from Anonymous Reviewer
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OKay that was just damn mean!! You shouldn't do that to people! This fic is fabulosity!! Love it! Love that you've made Dawn Hermione's twin, that's just too funny!

Can't wait for more!!
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [11 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "The Key of Hogwarts" from Anonymous Reviewer
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Leave it to Anya to rag on Buffy. Love Dawn practicing with Harry. I love your Dawn so much more than Dawn from the series. Tara's dream was wonderful. Love the teases and hints you're giving them. Can't wait til they put it all together. Looking forward to more.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [9 Sep 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
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