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Review of chapter "Chapter 16: Kiss" from Taisy
I can't believe this story doesn't have more reviews, although I myself usually lurk quietly in the background. Only occasionally do I venture out to politely thank someone for a good story. I don't gush. I don't beg for updates of obviously abandoned fic. I don't usually read WIPs to begin with- I'm always so disappointed to get into something that's not and may never be finished. That being said...

I was absolutely delighted by this. The characterizations of canon characters was spot on and the original characters were nicely three dimensional. You get ten trillion bonus points for bringing in Clem (such a sweetie and sadly overlooked in most fic) and Oz (my Oz love knows no bounds- if he's written well, and you have). Giles and Kennedy died in ways that absolutely made sense considering their respective mindsets. I liked how you pulled in what was going on in the rest of the world with excerpts from published works and interviews with survivors, all the while subtly letting the readers know that the mystical cat was out of the supernatural bag. The Wolfram & Hart banner being hung up was a particularly nice touch. The language of the story and the turns of phrase used made the reading really flow and a joy. In particular, "we had an outbreak of zombies" had me giggling and snickering long after reading it.

I was extremely put out that it ended before I got to see what happened to Xander or if Min made it back to Oz and Clem or whether Nina completely lost it or what naughty little plan Dawn was going to hatch to try to get Eve out of the way or the complete shock over Andrew finding a girlfriend or, or, or... A thousand different things.

If I didn't have the firm policy of never recommending fics that are not finished, you'd have another rec.

Great job and thank you for the delightful, if entirely too short, read.
Review By [Taisy] • Date [3 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Curiosity Killed The..." from lizzyw
Are you going to post this at the World war z site? Also if i were you I would definitely post it at the homepageofthedead if I were you! It's a great story!
Review By [lizzyw] • Date [24 Mar 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16: Kiss" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
This is fascinating. It's not that much darker than the tone of Angel, and well in Buffy, Buffy died... Still, it felt real. Giles dying senselessly is kind of how people actually die, especially in war situations. It doesn't have dramatic pathos, most of the time people just die. And Kennedy. People who keep secrets almost always get themselves and others hurt or killed. And as for mourning... There's just so much going on. If life ever gets back to normal... someone's gonna fall apart. Maybe Angel.

Now about Lindsay and the 'bit... I want them to have inappropriate mind numbing sex... She's above the age of consent in California (18) (I believe, otherwise don't do it) and this is not exactly a normal situation. Both Lindsay and Dawn are rebels, always looking for a way to thumb their noses at anyone they perceive as an authority figure. And impending doom seems to do strange things to both libido and judgment... Just think of how many soldiers hook up just before shipping out... And they are both so damn dripping with hotness... There's only an 11 year gap between them... Buffy's favorite squeezes have had centennials at least... And even Riley would have to have been almost a decade older than she was... Of course Lindsay would be in trouble with Spike, Buffy, Angel and Eve... and maybe others... But that's half the fun! But I'm just twisted, yeah?

All in all I'm pleased at the way you're writing this... As long as you keep on writing... hint... poke, nudge, poke... Ok... I'm done now.

(wicked grin)
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [26 Nov 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 16: Kiss" from Sharkbait
Okay.... I'm hooked on this. I looked for a dark non-crossover story and next thing I know my whole afternoon is spent going over this great story. Wow! And the killing of Giles and Kennedy... Okay, killing Giles was unexpected and a good twist. Killing Kennedy was just needed, lol, and done extremely well! "The needs of the many...." we can call it!
Very good stuff and looking forward to the building stress and conflict at Wolfram and Hart.... Now very curious over my two fav characters - what will happen to Willow and where is Xander? Looking forward to more....
Review By [Sharkbait] • Date [7 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15: The Hunger" from (Past Donor)Mari
Hee. If Dawn succeeds with Lindsay, Angel's head might just explode. So, LIndsay needs a white hat, huh? I am enjoying the apocalypticness of your fic, but what's making it really shine for me is the way you sneak in the character bits. Buffy would probably emotionally shut down. Spike would probably be there, supporting her, while Angel is freaking out while pretending not to freak out that Buffy's involved with Spike.

Poor Nina, though. While she knew about the curse, she was never really told she was just "an acceptable measure of happiness." And I can't think of many people who would want to be considered just "acceptable". (I think that's how Wesley and Angel put it?)
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [20 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 15: The Hunger" from grd
Your tale is probably one of the best Zombie/Slayer stories I've read in a long time. Only thing I'd like to suggest is if Slayers to go out and eventually hunt zombies, is to please wear armor, too many movies have bare armed heroes fighting bite infecting zombies...stupid. Looking forward to see if Willow survived, hope she didn't go all Dark after Kennedy's stupidity. Enjoying all the unusual alliances.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! I am really glad that you are enjoying the story!

More Willow in the forthcoming chapter - it is going through the beta process which is pretty intense for this story. Hopefully it will be done soon. Meanwhile, I uploaded Kate's story in this universe.

A great suggestion about fighting zombies. I will make sure that I mention it... hmmmm perhaps an argument about fighting techniques....

Thank you again for the wonderful review!

Review By [grd] • Date [8 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14: Reunions" from (Past Donor)Mari
Do I like Angel? While he's not on my list of favorite characters, he's also not on my list of characters I would like to kick really hard in the shins. He's kind of in the middle, I guess.

It really depends if he's in his sanctimonious mood or not.
Comments from author:
Grins I can understand that.

I have a feeling the story will be divided on Angel... since we are doing varying pov's there will be some plot lines where people can think he does no wrong, but there will be other people who love to pick on him. It should be fun to play with... Nina worships him pratically, Cordy is in love with him, and Buffy was formerly known as Juliet.

Fun to play with at least!
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [30 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen – Fists Fights and Hair Pulling" from (Past Donor)Mari
I have to tell you that I"m really enjoying your fic. Particularly good bits? The Spike/Dawn interaction, Andrew's zombie planning, the Clem/Oz meet, and since I was never quite able to let go of my inner Spuffina, I'm having a good time with that, too. Since there's lots of plot, and actual monsters to fight, so far, all good. (Plus, if you had to have a character die throwing up in a closet, well, I can't say that I shed too many tears for Kennedy.)

Just out of curiosity--because you haven't tread into real bashing territory--but, I'm getting a feeling Angel wasn't your favorite character?
Comments from author:
Thank you so much hun! Glad that you are enjoying this story!

Spike and Dawn are so fun to write! I really enjoy their dynamic. They really are a great brother and sister type relationship with Spike being so horribly bad at times. (meaning bad boy attitude :-) But he has a heart of gold....

Clem and Oz have to be buddies, it just works so well. We couldn't help writing that in.

I am a huge Spike and Buffy fan so I love writing that pairing --- although I have written almost every other pairing which comes to mind ... so it probably isn't that obvious. But I do adore them, and couldn't help indulge with the Spuffy-ness (athough it will be rather light in this story)

Grins Kennedy had to die. It just had to happen. And in the closet no less. The irony was to much. Of course I will come back to that in Chapter um... 16 I believe.... (that is the one I am currently trying to write)

AHhhh Angel, Angel, Angel... I have actually written two Angel bashing fics but they are not on here yet. They are short one shots :-)

Alas although he is not my favorite character, my co-writer manages to rein in my bashing desires. I am trying to really go with what a character actually feels and thinks and not go into unrealistic territory.

So sigh. If Angel survives this story he will have his darn happy - but not to happy - ending. :-)

Since you asked of course now I am curious if you like him or don't like him :-)

Thanks for the wonderful review and take care!
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [14 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirteen – Fists Fights and Hair Pulling" from Marcel
Ok, I have to comment: the story is great. What I read of it, I mean... because I couldn't read more than 3 chapters. It's TOO well written :P - and while I don't care one bit about the characters in The Stand (which I enjoyed), I care a lot about those in Buffy :) So, sorry... I'm going to look for anything else you might have written, but I'm not going to continue reading this one.

It is said that Stephen King wanted to write a book nobody could read until the end. As far as I'm concerned, he succeeded with Misery - and this story is the closest thing I've tried to read since. (Character I care about in a horrible situation.)

Kudos :D
Comments from author:
Thank you .... Although really not everyone dies. Just about half of the people....

But it is a tad dark. A dark comedy, where you laugh at half of the chapter and cry for other parts.

Thank you for your review though...

(Although if you don't care much about Kate - she has a one-shot which can be read independently....)

I would also avoid the one-shot with Faith and Wood as well... it is a heartbreaker...

Thanks again!
Review By [Marcel] • Date [14 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve: Perfect Plans" from banner
Chilling. Incredible story - detailed, consistent, logical. The characterizations are fascinating. Watching people fall, one by one, just terrifies me. Great job.
I've read a few good "End of the World" stories. "The Stand" is one of my all time favorites books. This keeps the tension high.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! We were thrilled to get your review!

The story is so much fun for us to write that we love to hear from people that they are enjoying the story and the characterizations.

I love the Stand as well - and zombie movies - and disaster films :-)

Grins! Thanks so much for the review
Review By [banner] • Date [9 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch 11: Fallen Soldiers" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
It took me a while to catch up. Good job. Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much! Glad you liked the story! I uploaded the next chapter!
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [15 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Statistics" from AllenPitt
Neat! I wonder if Connor will survive. he does have the super strength & agility of course... but doesn't have the combat skills he learned in Quor'toth....maybe that box will get shattered & he'll regain 'em...
Anyway-- at least Angel & company are forted up at W&H with Dawn....
So hey--is Faith around somewhere?
Comments from author:
Thank you! Connor's fate is still undetermined - but there is a possibility that we will address is as a one shot - if it is not included in the story. *smile*

Faith's story was uploaded a while ago on this site. Hopefully you enjoyed that as much as the story.

I really appreciate the review! It is wonderful to know people are reading the story!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [4 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: Pale Horse" from Booster
Excellent story so far, and I will be fascinated to see where you go from here. Nice touches in having everybody with different pieces of the puzzle, and making assumpions based on what they know.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! We are really trying to do a realistic spread and how they would figure things out! I have updated the next chapter - hope you enjoy!
Review By [Booster] • Date [10 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Gathering Storm Clouds" from sturm
This story is coming along nicely. I have no idea what the cross is but part of my enjoyment is not knowing.

Okay... actual critique of the story: paragraph transitions are good, spelling (if not perfect/zero errors) is fine, grammar seems okay, too. The original characters introduced thus far (I'm assuming they're original) aren't dwelt on in painfully long-winded fashion but do provide this reader with enough characterization so as not to skip their mentions and skim each chapter--I'm actually reading every word.

I also like the flash-forwards interspersed with "real-time" events and commentary. It makes me wonder all the more how you plan on resolving this. Although if you ultimately plan on killing off everyone... don't play your hand too soon.
Comments from author:
Sorry I just realized I could comment on the review! (New to the site!) Thank you very much for the review! I really hope you are still enjoying the fic. We actually have the fic plotted out to then end but of course I won't spoil it :-)

*spins* Thanks so much for reading! *Hugs*
Review By [sturm] • Date [28 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two:Damages" from DarthMurphy
World War Z?
Comments from author:
My co-author has sworn me to secrecy on the crossover - so mum's the word *evil grin*
Review By [DarthMurphy] • Date [11 Jan 08] • Not Rated
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