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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from zafaran
Review:
Oh, this was nice. Very well done. Dumping mini-me always bothered me, but it wasn't until this story that I could place part of what bothered me. Cromwell left Jack behind in Iraq, it's part of what drove Jack in the later part of his life besides Charlie's death. I think, subconsciously, that I was wondering how Jack could do essentially the same thing to mini-me as Cromwell did to him. Thanks for giving me the clue that helped me resolve that niggling little nagging voice in the back of my mind. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and post more chapters on more stories sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Review By [zafaran] • Date [6 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BillieBog
Review:
You hit it on the mark. I was writing a review to Laney's mini-Jack story "Fragile Existence" and was, very badly, trying to say exactly what you said so well in this story.

Thanks so much for sharing and I hope you write loads more.
BB
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [1 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)Sulien
Review:
This is something that I wish had been done in series canon. Thank you for this very well written and well thought out conclusion! I'm very much looking forward to reading the rest of this series.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [2 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Nanelovesslash
Review:
love it

I allways felt that Jack was sort of an as**** in this whole episode, he fights aliens, goes through a wormhole and his best friend can't stay dead, what was the big deal with his clone?

So your solution is wonderful and funny and a bit sad but great

Nane
Review By [Nanelovesslash] • Date [24 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from purrfus
Review:
Believable, which by the way is rarer in fan fic than many might think (but we're all conditioned by television writers to accept), and well put together.

Nice work with the character voice for Jack, interesting choices for Jon.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [23 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from azulkan
Review:
Rereading this before starting the next part. Enjoyed just as much if not more this time than as the first. Eager to read the next parts.
Review By [azulkan] • Date [17 Feb 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from MistofRainbows
Review:
It's an interesting take on family.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review.
Review By [MistofRainbows] • Date [27 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
Well written.

Very nicely done with the characterisations.

Lee
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing it keeps me going.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [26 Jan 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Good stuff. Good explanation of comes before your longer story.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your encouragement.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [26 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from AngelaM
Review:
I really liked this, I always thought it was pretty cold of the team to completely drop clone jack once they got the original back.
Comments from author:
Yes, it was but in fandom we can put things right, but I also think that SG-1 were in some part following their CO's lead.

Thank you for reviewing.
Review By [AngelaM] • Date [26 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)zephyrRS
Review:
Excellent !
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [(Past Donor)zephyrRS] • Date [25 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Even un-beta'd (and with the elder Jack O'Neill especially sounding much more conversant with British slang than I'd ever heard him in canon), this is still a great bit of character writing, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with it.

I actually BELIEVE that Jack O'Neill might find the events of season 8 leading him to finally contemplate getting in touch with his clone, and I can believe that Jack the younger might well turn into an academic over-achiever the second time around (especially if the alternative was hanging out with no one but teenagers for a moment longer than necessary -- O'Neill's great with kids, as we all know, but living as a teen among teenagers is a completely different proposition).
Comments from author:
Thank you, this is high praise indeed. I'll watch the way I word Jack in the future, try and keep him more American.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [25 Jan 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from elektra
Review:
I enjoyed reading this and your other fanfic. I'm looking forward to updates as the series continues. I think your characterizations are well done and I was happy to see Jon and Jack finally coming to terms with each other. One small nitpick; Jon would have worried about the SGC sending SFs, not MPs after him. MPs are Army. Other than that, good fic!
Comments from author:
Thank you for pointing that out, I'll change it now.
Review By [elektra] • Date [25 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from axolotl
Review:
This was pretty good, I like the dynamic and differences between jon and jack. I look forward to where you take this.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your kind comments.
Review By [axolotl] • Date [25 Jan 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)DonSample
Review:
It's a nice look at Mini-Jack, though I don't think anyone should be surprised that Jack did very well his second time through high school. Jack got into the Air Force Academy so he had to do well the *first* time he went through high school, and the second time around should be easier. He also did well in his post high school education, since he made it past captain. The Air Force requires that you have at least a masters degree in something to be promoted to major.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your comment.

I am aware of the need for Air Force Officers to have a high level of education and I'm aware of the original Colonel having a degree? or something like that in Engineering. However the fact that the clone went back to school may have meant that that the original was pulling his academic punches, so to speak at the high school level. In canon that is left to the watchers imagination. All we know is that he was taking a second go. Whether someone CAN do something is not just based on their mental prowess, there is a whole range of factors that have an effect on the outcome and journey itself.

Please keep your comments coming.
Review By [(Past Donor)DonSample] • Date [25 Jan 08] • Not Rated
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