Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Deamondeathstone
Needs Slash warning. Don't care if it's graphic or not, but it's part of a series where it may be or may have been portrayed at some level of graphicness, so it should have one.
Review By [Deamondeathstone
] • Date [21 Jul 12] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ebony
Stumbled upon this series and so far have loved what I have read and would love to see it continue.
Review By [ebony
] • Date [27 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from axolotl
I'm really sorry, I rarely bother reviewing stories that I don't like- however this one led me to exception. Fandom jumping fics are fine and a well written Xander as a chaos whatever can be enjoyable but this came off as contrite. You are having him interfering in various universe at potentially crucial points or whatever but in marvel there are alot of titles and connotations. We get the "what if's " sold to us by Marvel itself. So when you make an interference it should either be significant or funny and this was neither. He 'magicked' away five minutes... and Xander reads as this ultimate voice.
May parker was shot because Peter left the registrant side after unveiling his identity and removed them from protection. He did this not because he completely believed the process to be wrong but that he found the implementation was being morphed into something wrong. His family were the ones who encouraged him to unmask.
Just, try to know your fandom before bashing characters and making "solutions". Otherwise it appears arrogant and makes your story unlikeable.
Comments from author:
Actually I find it quite arrogant that you think I don't know the entire arc of Civil War.
Xander is jumping into various universes in a one shot?
All your complaints make sense if May Parker had already been shot, or Peter had already jumped ship. Let's not even mention that the Kingpin already knows who Peter is and his reveal just motivated him. The scene I mentioned was based on the end of Civil War 2. 2! Nothing else as Far as Xander knows has happed. He's jumping to conclusions. It's supposed to be a silly fic hence the CRACK warning. And sadly it's a solution MARVEL has used Iron Man and Mind Wipe anyone?
Everything he said was what every one was saying when #2 came out. That and how the hell Marvel was going to fix such a nightmare. Pools were going on if it would be May or MJ to go.
PS I believe the word you are looking for is Trite not Contrite which is a sense of guilt.
Review By [axolotl
] • Date [31 Jan 08] • Not Rated