I am willing to wager that Orrochimaru sensed what happened! And if he is smart, he is going to stay FAR away from this comibination of Illyria and Tsunade!
Review By [Harry] • Date [21 May 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
This story has some serious potential. I can see Illyria taking a shine to many of the Ninja's in the village, especially Naruto and perhaps Sakura as well.
Review By [Harry] • Date [21 May 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
It's a good start, but it needs work. The chapters are a bit short.
You're going to run into a lot of confusion if you continue to use words like "being" and "they" to describe events. I can understand why you do this, but... Try to flesh things out with names. It's not always good to leave things suspenseful.
I'll follow this for a bit.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the comment =)
And yeah, I know chapters are a bit short, they'll get longer when there are more people interacting.
The particular way I wrote chapter two well.. *grin* It'll be a bit clearer in chapter 3. ;)
Review By [Valkyrie] • Date [14 May 08] • Not Rated
Review By [rinv] • Date [5 Feb 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "One: Beginnings" from TheMadFangirl
Review:
Ooh. Illyria!Tsunade...I'm intrigued! And there's so much potential irony when and if she runs into Orochimaru. Illyria won't condemn him for doing more or less what she did, but I'm pretty sure she still won't like him.
Review By [TheMadFangirl] • Date [2 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "One: Beginnings" from Almadynis
Review:
More? Please? Pretty please with cherries on top?
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [2 Feb 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
