Yes, I did like the change of tone. I was hoping they'd get together in a more ... healthy ... relationship as the story progressed.
I particularly enjoyed the thought of Lorne critiquing the porn movie. I can just picture him sitting there, sea breeze in hand, saying "No, that's not how it's done. And would you look at how bored she is!" I just had the wicked thought, if he can read souls while people sing, imagine what he'd come up with when they ... arrived, as it were.
Comments from author:
I'm really glad you didn't find the change of tone jarring. I figure they can have it all... hot and sweet, why not!
Lorne mind reading... that WOULD be wicked! Willow's skin tone would match her hair, that's for sure, lol.
Want to know how you can tell that a story is written very well? When you are so engrossed by the characters and the moment that when they get "caught" during a private moment the reader (me) actually blushes on their behalf. I actually covered my eyes because hoping that I misread it for a moment. LOL. Great story. Worked fine for me.
Best wishes, meks
Comments from author:
Well now, you've made my day for sure, lol I love getting that engrossed in a story, so thank you very much for letting me know it happened to you here. *hugs* and thank you for your lovely comments.
I love this story. The last chapter definitely changed the tone of the story. It went from nearly PWP to a Romance... but somehow it still works. I loved it. And Wesley's "It was a trick" thing was hilarious.
The only thing I would have put in this last chapter was one of them quoting something from the Princess Bride... the Wesley/Westley name thing always convinced me that any romance involving Wes should have a quote from the Princess Bride in it. lol... but then, that's just my inner geek showing through here.
I can think of several that might have worked somewhere in this last chapter. -"As you wish.” -"This is True Love... you think this happens every day?" -"Since the invention of the kiss, there have only been five kisses that were rated the most passionate, the most pure. This one left them all behind.” -"Mawwage is what bwings us togwether today....” -"I'm not a Witch; I'm your wife.”
But, whether or not the (in my mind) obligatory Princess Bride quote was included, it's still a great read, and definitely drool worthy.
Great Job!
Comments from author:
Well I'm thrilled you liked it. The tone change was worrying, in a short span of time, so glad to hear it worked for you ::grins::
Princess Bride is one of my all time faves! Wish I'd thought of it, lol Actually, it was also my first fanfiction... a twisted version, but yup... that's how I got my feet wet.
And a bit of trivia, my co author had her hubby's wedding ring engraved with "as you wish" - thought you might like that, lol
Review By [Scrappychic] • Date [3 Mar 08] • Not Rated
I am loving this. After reading the first two chapters I immediately went to find more willow/wesley pairings. But none of them have been this good. I can't wait to see where this goes.
Comments from author:
Woot, that is very nice to hear. Thank you muchly :) I know there is quite a bit of Spillow out there, but hardly any Weslow I think. Kinda sorta rectifying it, lol
A wonderful pairing. Two highly intelligent and slightly repressed characters getting it on. how wonderful! Chaja
Comments from author:
Woot, glad you like the story. Funny huh, the combination of intelligent/repressed/and yet trying out their kinks characters? I never thought of it that way, no wonder they fit together :)
Review By [chajalive] • Date [24 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Wesley/Willow isn't one I've read before, but it has interested me enough that I thought about it. Good job so far. I always liked scruffy dnagerous Wes vs. Buffy Wes
Comments from author:
Ah, new pairing for you, huh? Woot, glad you decided to try it, then. I agree, wussy Wes from Buffy is boring, but dangerous/mysterious Wes from Angel rocks. Glad you're enjoying it.
Review By [dharkcharlotte] • Date [24 Feb 08] • Not Rated
Not a popular pairing currently, but I have read many a W/W pairing in the past and this is turning out to be one of the best. Hope this develops into more then sex. Hope for more soon.
meks
Comments from author:
It's wonderful to hear you are enjoying this story that much. Interesting that you want it to develop into more than sex, while another reader feels a bit cheated by the fact the story appears to be going that way (toward a relationship) when the vehicle for the characters to meet (the website) appears to promise a lack of a monogamous relationship. This is why I love comments, you get to look at the same story from many angles and view points. This one will move toward a relationship :)