Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from roseymay
Every now and then you get lucky and stumble across a story that hits all of the high notes for you. I Love Love Love this story so far. I am so happy that you put so much effort into making Faith a "real" person and not just some ignorant ho-bag the way so many others have. Dawns back story was very clever as well, I can't wait for your next update. Kudos to you my friend..... You Rock! :)
Review By [roseymay
] • Date [20 Mar 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from aveave
Great story. Are you going to continue writing it?
Comments from author:
Thank you. I definitely intend to continue, although right now it's taken a back seat to a couple other things. (I'm not pleased with the next couple chapters and I'm waiting until I hit on a version I'm happy with.)
Review By [aveave
] • Date [18 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from Callista
good story, I like the fact that they weren't dropped in Rivendell, that they haven't been with the Fellowship for the entire journey, and that they couldn't save Boromir. I'm not that crazy about Dawn, but I must admit, I like her here. Keep updating!
Review By [Callista
] • Date [20 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from Vickzie
Aww that sounds so sad! Please update more soon
Review By [Vickzie
] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from Speakertocustomers
What happened to Dawn's and Faith's horses? Dawn looped their reins around a tree before entering the fight, and there's no mention of them running off, but when Faith and the three Fellowship members set off after the orcs they're all on foot. It comes over as you forgetting that the horses had ever been there. If Faith forgot about the horses, and left them behind by mistake, there should at least be some mention of her regretting it later when she starts to feel the effects of the long-distance run.
Comments from author:
The horses bolted. A horse's natural reaction to a predator is to flee, and looping the reins casually around something isn't going to hold a horse near a swarm of something nasty like orcs for very long. (A panicked horse either breaks whatever it's tied to/with or injures itself.) I've toyed with the notion that Faith or Dawn may encounter their horses again later, but haven't decided one way or the other yet.
Review By [Speakertocustomers
] • Date [28 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from FaithRoseLexi
I love the first eighteen chapters you write, keep up the great work. I can't wait to see what happens next!
Review By [FaithRoseLexi
] • Date [27 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from BritneyandJacob
Excellent chapters. I love your story. Please continue.
Review By [BritneyandJacob
] • Date [6 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from tonnocal
Bound by good will out of time.
Returned to strife and thus b'spell
'Gainst enemies b'yond mortal ken
Her slayer at her side.
Tindomiel, the light of which
Is ever the hope of men.
Now turns her face to b'witch
Those riding to the fen.
Her sister gone, her form defined
By a fading spell, slow to unravel
Needs find a further mortal hold
Or else be lost 'neath time's gavel.
As Melkor fought in that sunless dale
Once cast out beyond the cloak of night
Did he traverse the dividing veil,
Returning to douse Earendil's Light?
Tolkein-esque poetic review. Funner and more difficult than it seems, your story was sufficient inspiration. And I mean that in a good way. In short, like what you've done, like where you're going, will Dawn loose/change her form and did the First travel through the breech with them. I ask the last, because I'm hoping that Dawn will have a strong magical foil to her awesome power.
Review By [tonnocal
] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from Yodes
Loving this. Can't wait to read more.
Review By [Yodes
] • Date [20 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from stahchild
Did not see that twist coming :) Dawn being around during the days of the silmarilion, wonderful way to advance the plot. Part of me is hoping that Faith and Dawn stay on middle-earth only to see what trouble they can come up with lol. Btw, it probably wont happen but Im crossing my fingers for some EomerFaith loving lol
Review By [stahchild
] • Date [8 Apr 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from spikeismine
Awesome!! This is going really well so far, I can't wait to see where you will go next with this. Please update soon.
Review By [spikeismine
] • Date [27 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from bucksavage
You wove the backstory in so well, it feels right for the tale.
Great chapter! More to come I hope..
Review By [bucksavage
] • Date [25 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from LeaFairy
WooHoo, an awesome new chapter!!! I loved Dawn's meeting with Gandalf (it was very well written) and your backstory for Dawn with her originally belonging to Middle Earth was simply fabulous. I love that she was the reason that she (and Faith) are now in Middle Earth as well. Good news about everyone back home being ok too.
Thanks so much for the update... I really look forward to reading more!!
Review By [LeaFairy
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from fran
I Like, I Lust, I Love!!Please Update Soon!!
Review By [fran
] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Green And The White" from Gideon
Great to see an update. The first of many more I hope :)
I'm glad Dawn has learned a little more about her origins but it is sad she doesn't remember and therefore it isn't much use to her yet. Hopefully that will change. I'm sure she will love riding to the rescue with Gandalf's reinforcements though - Faith will be jealous. I wonder what Gandalf will feel like to Faith?
Comments from author:
Thanks! Updates should be a little more regular now that I've finally gotten this chapter up.
Review By [Gideon
] • Date [20 Mar 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]