The Willow bit bugged me.

It's like 'Boo Scoobies! Yay SGA!'

I know I'm super late but I just wanted to say this story was awesome u should do a sequel

lol I have no idea how many times i've read this story but I love it!!!!

Haha that ending was brilliant!

I just had to send you a little note of love because I just re-read this story and loved it even more this time around. That epilogue always makes my heart smile because it's the perfect ending/beginning for Buffy's journey. :)

A bit of an abrupt start- I wouldn’t have minded more information about what the Immortal was like as a person rather than the group introducing the prophecy and establishing him as a threat, and just killing off Angel, Spike, Illyria, Connor AND Dawn (Even if the last two were only technically) seemed a bit extreme-, but the central idea had potential (Particularly with the prophecy of the Tarith’na, even if the Furlings just ‘showing up’ like that stretched credulity a BIT...).

Unfortunately, once again you run into your central problem with writing; you introduce everything too fast, and many of your ideas (Such as that witch on Atlantis; you never seemed to explain precisely how she got there with that many vampires) seem to be there just for the sake of it or (As with your ideas regarding how Dawn’s old abilities as the Key affect Buffy now that she’s Ascended, or Cordelia just ‘showing up’ like that) to save you having to think about how Buffy or her new allies gain crucial information about the current situation and each other.

In the end- just like with many of your stories-, your plot idea is essentially good, but you try to introduce everything too suddenly; you need to exercise more patience and introduce things at a more gradual rate to make your plot appear more natural, rather than just try and have everyone reveal or discover everything at once (As well as pay more attention to the two groups adapting to what the other side deals with rather than them automatically accepting it without question) just so that you can get on with what you’re more interested in looking at.

(Oh, and on a minor note, Daniel should have at least SUGGESTED that they capture Osiris alive rather than Faith just decapitating her like that; the fact that he brought it up later doesn’t change the fact that he should have protested at the time, particularly since the Tok’ra have the necessary technology to remove the symbiote without killing the host)

I just had to re-read this story, and I love it even more the second time around. I always chuckle over that ending of "pass the crying baby." :)

Reread it and still loved it. Good work.

The only reason that it took me two days to finish this story is because work interfered. I loved it and would love to see a sequel.

The fic really would benefit from another round or two with beta-readers, but the story itself is great :)

I really enjoyed this story but there are quite a few types that break up the otherwise great flow.

Lovely bit with handing the baby around, at the end.

Love the way Jack takes to "the Scooby way", but I couldn't help but be surprised at the uncharacteristic way that Daniel let the killing of Osiris' host slide.

On the show, Daniel was extremely concerned about the host Sara's well-being, and was willing to risk his own life and that of others for the chance to capture Osiris and give the Tok'ra a chance to free her host (and his old girlfriend) Sara.

it was a good story. a little crazy with all the characters and plots. i like stories like this bc they show how friendships are sometimes fragile and people hold stuff in.

Good story, but as one of your other reviewers pointed out, in dire need of being proofread. Also, why did you keep talking about Daniel having died more times than Buffy. He's only "died" twice that I'm aware of (both being ascensions). If anyone holds the record on resurrections its Jack and that's only because of being repeatedly tortured to death then brought back via sarcophagus.