Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from fourmenandanelephant
Nice to see my favorite BTVS pairing on here. I always felt that those two being played by two young Jewish women from New York and having worked together before they had the best chemistry by far of any actors in the series....
Review By [fourmenandanelephant
] • Date [3 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from Labrid
*pokes story with a pointy stick* is it alive? or did it die a horrible death?
or is it just that it progress at the speed of 1 chapter every few years not that i would have a problem waiting for it as that would not even be the slowest story i have followed as I'm still following one that started in 2003 and was last updated January this year...
that and i know how easy it is to lose inspiration so that greatly helps with understanding
and if this review is not making any sense its just further proof that i should not try to write anything after being awake for 4 days will look at it again when i have gotten some sleep so if it makes no sense just ignore it
Comments from author:
Nope, not dead, just waiting.
This one sort of suffers from my own insecurity.
I like the first two chapters of it so much, I'm afraid that if I add anything to it I'll mess it up.
I guess it's actually pride AND insecurity, because I think what's here now is beautiful--the sort of thing that I look at later and go 'Wow, did I really write that? ME?'.
Also, the place where I'd meant for this to go when I started it may not be the place I'd prefer it to go now....
Or maybe I AM fine with that first place; I don't know.
So basically, I need to get my head together, and also come to a decision about where this is actually headed.
Or maybe just stop overthinking things and start writing, which is working pretty well with the Ship of the Line story.
Review By [Labrid
] • Date [27 Jul 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from Spica
Of course people care if you write or not, so get on with this story now whenever next you get the inspiration for it. ^_^
Review By [Spica
] • Date [17 Jul 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from HappyWonKinobi
This was an awesome story! In only two chapters, I think it is completely deserving of the 11 recommendations it has gained. The only thing is: I think it deserves a little extra attention. After all, it's been about 4 years. I think it can be continued easily (just don't expect me to continue it. I'm not *that* good).
Comments from author:
I hear ya.
And I've sat down to do the next chapter several times, but I have trouble with finishing anything (obviously) unless I'm more or less ON FIRE to finish it... if you know what I mean. Seldom do I just plug away, with a page written every day till the chapter is done--it's either a 30-hour rampage of keyboard abuse... or years of nothing.
Which leads to lots and lots of dusty, half-finished stories.
But again, I hear you. And yes, this should move forward.
I'll see what I can do.
Review By [HappyWonKinobi
] • Date [9 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from garrycooper
Review By [garrycooper
] • Date [24 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from Arselbengt
One of the most interesting "power-up" stories I've read so I do hope that you start working on it again some time soon. :)
Also, the pairing is not a big deal to me since it's very well written so far.
Review By [Arselbengt
] • Date [11 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from mattson
Dawn becoming Fae is definitely not something I've seen before
Excellent job of describing Dawn's learning and transition into a Faerie she has now become.Buffy at any other time would not likely have run from Dawn but season 6 Buffy was disassociated sufficiently to not consider Dawn first. Buffy was traumatized by her current environment and while she hated it she also feared any sudden changes more than anything, which would make it hard to except what dawn is offering if she believed dawn was her self. excellent job of describing dawns pain of her loss of Buffy and dawn perspective of what Buffy's going though. over all it is a wonderful story i hope you continue it soon
Review By [mattson
] • Date [13 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from imortis
You know, I think this could have been a really good story if you had continued it. The whole buffy/dawn thing isn't as odd as one would think, dawn was created from buffy's blood, she isn't her exact twin because the monks arranged it that way, she's basically buffy's twin with a different age, and it isn't exactly unheard of for twin siblings to resort to sex as a form of comfort between each other. The idea of dawn infecting buffy with what got her, buffy slowly becoming a fae as well is an interesting one, since buffy and dawn are identical genetically, it is all about the blood after all.
Comments from author:
No, not so very weird, I think. As time goes by I find myself becoming more open to what once would have squicked me a bit, at least in terms of relationships. Girl with girl, guy with guy, sibling with sibling--our issues with all of those are a remnant of religious and social rules with really don't have relevance in today's world (unless we allow them to have relevance).
What DOES matter is simply this: is anyone being hurt, or forced into the relationship? THAT is the only measure, really, of when something becomes wrong.
And... that's very much the point at which this story is currently hanging---Is Dawn willing to Force Buffy into being what Dawn wants/needs her to be?
Right now, the answer to that seems to be 'yes', but that would be a horrible thing for her to do to someone, wouldn't it? Even if Buffy would feel better afterwards.
So that's where things stand.
And don't be so quick to call this done; it's not 'if I had continued it' it's 'when I continue it'... although I'll admit that I sometimes forget how brief a span is given to you mortals. I'd planned to work on this again sometime mid-century, but perhaps I should move things up a bit.
Review By [imortis
] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from Chikageko
Now THIS is cool. Why didn't you continue it after chapter 2?
Comments from author:
World of Warcraft.
Also various emotional issues which are too boring to relate here.
I still want to finish it, though; there are notes and stuff, and even the beginnings of part three.
It may well happen; we'll see.
Thanks for commenting.
Review By [Chikageko
] • Date [26 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from BlueManticore
This has been one of my favorite stories of yours. I also enjoy heroes and villains as well as supergoddess. But I really enjoy this one. You're so creative and detailed and really capture some of the emotion and feelings I thought Dawn would have. Love this and have hoped for more for a long time. Now that your back, might there be any more to this story? Please?
Comments from author:
There is absolutely more to this story, yes.
I'm still struggling to find time to write, but I've not forgotten about this one. (Strangely, or at least unexpectedly, this is one of my most popular stories, at least by some ways of measuring it. Given the slightly controversial pairing, and the general oddness of the premise, I would never have guessed at that. Still, obviously, it's pretty neat, and I do like this Dawn.)
What was I saying?
Oh, yeah, 'more'.
Yes, at least one more chapter in this one, to wrap it up. And possibly more Dawn/Buffy stuff as well, though that concept thoroughly squicks my Beta reader/editor, which puts me under some amount of pressure not to go there....
And as always, thanks for commenting. It's always nice to be reminded that people care about these stories. That really does provide incentive for me to work on them.
Review By [BlueManticore
] • Date [25 Mar 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from deathgeonous
This is a great start, and contiuation would be good. So, please continue this some day. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous
] • Date [31 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Everything that isn't nailed down'" from WyldCardFour
Definitely adding my own opinion to the please continue crowd.
Dawn was written better here than half the time in the actual show. I really loved the fight with Buffy, heartbreaking.
You set up Dawn's attraction to her sister incredibly well. Beautiful and understandable. You have built off the relationships of the show with excellent personal extrapolation.
Also your description of fae magic is absolutely gorgeous. The incredible description combined with a really good sense of humor for the whole thing.
Just a good story. Continuation is of course a very personal decision, but I would love it if you continued.
Review By [WyldCardFour
] • Date [7 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from FireFlash
So I was re-reading all the stories in my tracked list. I saw this one and said to myself, "oh yeah, I remember this one. Too bad it hasn't been updated." Not that the lack of updates stopped me from reading it again. :)
So any plans to write more of this one? It's a unique story, and I'd like to see where it goes (other than the obvious stuff from the challenge).
Review By [FireFlash
] • Date [28 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from TwoBlackDragons
Evil author = one who doesn't finish stories they start.
And this is a good story, so please stop being an evil author.
Review By [TwoBlackDragons
] • Date [28 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "'Was there fine print I didn't see, or what?'" from paradocs
Very nicely done.
A minor criticism - in the first chapter you use 'the girl' when referencing Buffy a few times too many; modifying sentence structure can alleviate this tendency - one of the lessons I had to teach myself as I used 'the witch' 'the blond' 'the red head' . . . I'm sure you get the idea.
I really enjoyed the story telling approach; the modern faerie tale isn't used very often - almost never - in BtVS fic. It's nice to find one. I also enjoyed the change in references - Dawn now and what it was like when Buffy was alive - and the touches of humor, subtle and still quirky like the characters often are.
I hope that you will continue this in the future.
Review By [paradocs
] • Date [23 Oct 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]