Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from musumenosuoh
Review By [musumenosuoh
] • Date [9 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from ultor
this is a great story can't wait to see what happens next please update soon.
Review By [ultor
] • Date [16 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from CelebwenTelcontar
Please continue! This is good!
Review By [CelebwenTelcontar
] • Date [21 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from BuffyKaibaHunt
Awesome job writing this chapter! :) I like it -- especially this part:
When the pair of them pushed into the bar, Willie sighed, “What can I do for you kid?” he asked Xander.
“I need information, Willie. And I'm also introducing my cousin Kankuro to the local wildlife,” Xander said with a slightly sardonic look on his face. Kankuro just looked around in interest, filing everything away to tell the others about later.
Willie just shook his head, knowing that there was some hotheads in the bar that would take offense at that comment, and sure enough, at least one did.
“Wildlife are we?” a young vamp said, rising from the poker game that he was involved in. “And who the fuck are you, bloodbag?”
Xander turned to face him, face completely blank. “Who writes your lines dude? Cousin, that's a vamp. Corpse inhabited by a minor demon, I'd say a minion at best, easily killed by a wooden stake to the heart or decapitation. You can also kill them by fire and sunlight, highly allergic to garlic and holy water. You want him?” And Xander pulled a wooden stake out of the back pocket of his jeans, and offered it to Kankuro.
“I've got my own weapon's, cousin,” and Kankuro unslung one of the scrolls that were on his back. It was this motion that confused most of the clientèle in Willie's more than anything. With chakra strings extending from right hand, the Ant exploded from the scroll that he'd unrolled on the floor. “Watch this,” he said to Xander with a grin on his face, and with a twitch of his fingers, sent the Ant flying towards the mouthy and idiotic vampire.
“What the fuck is that?” the vampire was saying, as he backed away rapidly.
“Your death,” Kankuro said, as with another twitch of his finger, a set of blades popped out and severed his head, sending a shower of ashes to the floor.
Xander whistled in admiration, “Any other smartass's? Somehow I don't think I'm the only who wants a fight tonight?”
“You're just the Slayer's lapdog!” one of the more idiotic demons shouted.
“And this lapdog faced down Angelus, weaponless,” Xander said evenly, tightening his grip on his axe.
A few of the older demons backed up then and there, knowing the reputation of the Irish vampire, and knowing the sheer guts that it took to do such a thing. “Leave the boy alone, or you'll die. That look in his eyes, that's your death,” one of them told one of the more foolhardy vamps.
“I ain't afraid of no human!” was howled, and the idiot charged. Only to be met with an axe to the chest.
Kankuro summoned another two puppets, and a mini-riot then commenced, laying waste to the bar.
After all the demons had either been killed, or had fled, Xander said forlornly, “we only came for information,” as Kankuro burst out laughing and slapped him on the back.
“It was a good fight cousin. Now, where do you live again?”
Brilliant! Very extraordinary and awesome! :)
Review By [BuffyKaibaHunt
] • Date [23 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from ClumsyElf
Great story!!! Hope to see more soon!!!
Review By [ClumsyElf
] • Date [12 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from CrystalBlaze
Mentioning domestic violence in a house with Gaara of the Sand in it is signing the responsible sod's death warrant. The fact that Jessica/Yukio is his aunt AND a already badly-treated member of ninja village he's now the Fifth of means Tony Harris may be rasped apart by Gaara's sand like a giant rubbing him between sandpapered fingers.
Review By [CrystalBlaze
] • Date [10 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from JediKnight
Nice job on this story, Xander seems slightly out of character for chapter 2. Please add more to this story very soon
Review By [JediKnight
] • Date [20 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from AlphaBeta
Hi, its me! Not bad, like the ideal, though I think you started out at little fast at the beginning with Xander and his mom. I think it would be better if you slowed the pace of the story down a little. Other then that, not bad at all. And hope you update this soon. Oh, and one more, cannot wait till Xanders cousins meet the rest of the gang!
Review By [AlphaBeta
] • Date [18 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from HolyKnight
Let me guess.......Yukio and Baki had something on the past, no?.....it would be even more interesting, if Baki, or Yukio, were related to the Sandaime Kazekage, who was renown for Satetsu(Black Sand)....based on the ability to manipulate magnetic fields to an degree and precision uncanny, allowing the Sandaime Kazekage to use metal-based Sand as a deadly weapon. Now...Imagine Xander, and "Sand" made from metal, from Holy relics, and with an amount of Blessed Silver on the mix?
Review By [HolyKnight
] • Date [3 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from dogbertcarroll
Sorry, but these two series just don't mesh that well. It's like the scene in Last Action Hero where they have a cartoon cat in the police station, jarring and really making it hard to suspend disbelief.
Jessica knew her son was out fighting vamps and trying to keep the world spinning and she did nothing to help him.
One mistake and her son's dead and she apparently didn't care.
One dead son and the Scoobs slip up and boom no more world, but she was too busy playing her role to care?
I'm at a loss on how to make any of it work without making it really hard to take seriously.
Review By [dogbertcarroll
] • Date [3 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Kirallie
Good work, keep it up!
Review By [Kirallie
] • Date [28 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Elleria
Looking forward to the next bit.
Review By [Elleria
] • Date [18 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from RojoOjo
As a person who is always on the look out for good (hopefully Great) Xander meets Naruto Fics (As in the Xander meets some one form the Naruto Universe) I have to say I LOVE YOU!!
Review By [RojoOjo
] • Date [16 Mar 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dragonelf
I loved reading this story
And I hope you will be inspired to add more chapters to this story,
This story is really good as far as I can see
On this I think we all agree
I hope you never will find us commenters to be dissatisfactory.
Review By [Dragonelf
] • Date [15 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Miststalker
Hi I hope you continue this story, it sounds fun so far
Comments from author:
I've got a few more chapters already written out out, just needing to be typed up. If my internet connection doesn't keep crapping out that is.
Review By [Miststalker
] • Date [14 Mar 08] • Not Rated