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Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from AriaDragoncrest
Review:
Great start
Review By [AriaDragoncrest] • Date [2 Dec 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from spring
Review:
Well this is extremely interesting so far. More soon please.
Review By [spring] • Date [11 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from Nightofthecreeps
Review:
I like this i hope you update soon
Review By [Nightofthecreeps] • Date [2 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from Nakita
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I can see Dawn in Twilight. I hope you continue.
Review By [Nakita] • Date [22 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from (Current Donor)AshDawnSoulmates
Review:
please update soon! I'm looking forward to this story!
Review By [(Current Donor)AshDawnSoulmates] • Date [12 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from chickaboo
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I'm definitely intrigued. I hope you continue!
Review By [chickaboo] • Date [5 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from Jossalyn
Review:
I love it so far so update soon
Review By [Jossalyn] • Date [15 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from candydreamer
Review:
Great start! I can't wait to see what happens next...
Review By [candydreamer] • Date [28 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from (Past Donor)hellmouthprincess
Review:
Great start, looking forward to reading more
Review By [(Past Donor)hellmouthprincess] • Date [18 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from darkprinncess
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I love it so update soon I shall wait patiently for it
Review By [darkprinncess] • Date [16 Apr 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from riverbreeze
Review:
I've been looking and waiting for a Dawn-centered and/or Willow-centered Twilight fic, and lo and behold! One's been written! :) As for the first chapter, you just jumped right into it, instead of starting off slowly. I'm personally not partial to either, as long as the chapters are well-written. As for my constructive criticism, I think you could probably add a bit more detail to everything (such as, "The brown fleece blanket scratched against Dawn's skin distractingly as she rised up off of her bed to return downstairs.") to help create more of an image in the reader's mind, you know? But be careful not to put TOO many details, otherwise the reader will skip over sentences, and possibly miss important parts. There weren't any atrocious grammatical mistakes, thankfully, and you know how to correctly put a sentence together, which is always a plus. I can't really give you any more con crit until I read more of your chapters and get a feel for your writing. On a side note, I think that getting a beta-reader or two will definitely help (unless you already have one). A second or third opinion is really great because it helps improve your writing (not that there's anything horribly wrong with it in the first place).

I'm looking forward to the next chapter!!! (But don't ever feel the need to rush when you're writing, otherwise it's sloppy and doesn't flow quite right. And try to ignore people who pressure you to write the next chapter, because it causes nothing but stress, and that's never fun.)
Review By [riverbreeze] • Date [26 Mar 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from NutsContract
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So Dawn is the new Bella? I can see that happening... She'd be a lot cattier than Bella that's for sure... no meek bullshit for her... can't wait till she moves to Forks... Oh, the emotional scarring she will cause people.
Review By [NutsContract] • Date [25 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from TouchoftheWind
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Excellent story, when she has moved Spike should come visit her, would like to see how Charlie deals with that!
Review By [TouchoftheWind] • Date [20 Mar 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One : Marked by a Funeral" from karmasfriend
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Oooh, I like! That was really cool how you put in the part where Dawn realized Buffy was really dead. Longer chapter next time please *puppy eyes*?
Review By [karmasfriend] • Date [19 Mar 08] • Not Rated
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