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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from FullOfWhiskey
Review:
Can I just point out something which is throwing me off massively.


Season 2 Angelus happened in 1998.

New Moon happened in 2005/6

Even with your adjustment (meaning this story takes place in mid 2006) there is still an eight year discrepancy.

Because in 2006 Angel was Angel and LA was in hell. And in 1998 Bella would have been, what, nine?

Not to mention, your summary mentions a 'recently re-souled Angelus'.

That doesn't work.

Angel = Angelus with a soul
Angelus = Soulless vampire

You cannot have Angelus with a soul acting like Angelus. Because Angelus with a soul is Angel. Who does the whole 'saving people, brooding vampire' thing and is also in love with Buffy.

Plus your vampires are too fluffy for me. You expect me to believe that Angelus, Darla, Drusilla and Spike are quite happily wandering through a mall (and is this at night or what? Cause Buffy-verse vampires get a bit dusty when they come in contact with sunlight) with humans in and aren't terrifying and killing the people inside. That's what they do, they want to be noticed and they want to commit sadistic and violent acts. Not to mention, they don't buy clothes and books, they walk into a shop, kill everybody and then take the thing they want.
Comments from author:
The joy of fanfiction is that timelines don't mean that much. If i want to merge too fandoms together that are set a while apart then I am able to. It is something most fanfiction writers do to make things fit. It is something that you will have to get used to for many writers do this- like having baby Harry Potter adopted by Sherlock Holmes from the 2010 BBC Series and such. And for the characterisation- I started this story when I was new to Buffy and Angel. So it is bound to be incorrect and not true to character to a degree. I also view that vampires in Buffy while evil are also social creatures and like that they have companions. besides Darla likes to think of herself as more civilised. They can't be out to destroy the world every day. Even they need a break.

I am glad you took the time to review as even people who like my stories often don't. So that is appreciated that you took the time to send me your thoughts.
Review By [FullOfWhiskey] • Date [17 Apr 11] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from savingjuliet
Review:
I love this! I hope you add the cullens in soon. It would be great to see their reactions to how Bella is now. Please, please update soon.
Review By [savingjuliet] • Date [6 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from DarkFaerieYumi
Review:
Cool! I really enjoy this! OMG the Volturi?! WTF?! Interfering smeg heads! Don't you touch a hair on Connor's head!
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [10 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from SwimmieTeam
Review:
I LOVE it! But, what about the Cullens? Jake?
I think it was a great idea to have Bella Connor's mom, but what about Nezzie?
What will Edward's reaction be? I mean he left so this WOULDN'T happen!
Review By [SwimmieTeam] • Date [29 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from dawnieelf
Review:
good story.... i hope you review soon, and i would like to see edward back and finding out that Bella is an evil vampire!! I wonder what he will do? Hope to see more soon.
Review By [dawnieelf] • Date [24 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from spring
Review:
More please
Review By [spring] • Date [4 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9" from btvsatsbones
Review:
this is rly good and i love how u kinda took "Breaking Dawn" and made it evil! i have always loved Darla, Dru, Spike, and Angelus together. Oh btw, Bella is a brunette :)
Comments from author:
I know she's a brunette, but I prefer her with red hair....pretend she dyed it...

Thank you for reviewing!
Review By [btvsatsbones] • Date [4 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from spring
Review:
interesting.
Review By [spring] • Date [11 Feb 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from DemonChildeKyra
Review:
Yay! Connor! *happy dance* More soon, please?

~ Kyra
Comments from author:
Im working on the next chapter now...

PS have you seen my cup...think Edward might have it...again!
Review By [DemonChildeKyra] • Date [29 Dec 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from (Past Donor)hellmouthprincess
Review:
lol, like the little 'interview with a vampire' bit in there. Still enjoying the story.
Comments from author:
Thanks, you are the first one to have noticed that bit, i was wondering who would...Lol.
Review By [(Past Donor)hellmouthprincess] • Date [28 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from DemonChildeKyra
Review:
Loved it! Can't wait to see Angelus, Spike and Dru's reactions to Bella being pregnant! More soon, please?

~ Kyra
Comments from author:
Thanks, next chapter shouldnt take too long hopefully...
Review By [DemonChildeKyra] • Date [27 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from DemonChildeKyra
Review:
I really liked it! It was interesting to see the Family's first reactions to Bella. I can't wait to see what happens next!

~ Kyra
Comments from author:
Thanks, in the next chapter we will find out what is wrong with Bella and see some of her lessons with the family.

xxx
Review By [DemonChildeKyra] • Date [27 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DemonChildeKyra
Review:
I love it! I can't wait to see what happens with the Voltari. Or for Bella and her new family to meet up with the Cullens. Edward's reaction when he finds out that Bella has slept with both Angelus and Spike (and maybe even both at once *grins and leers* will be priceless!

And our sex scene rocked!

I can't wait to see the next chapter!

~ Kyra
Comments from author:
Thanks, I'm looking forward to writing the fact that Bella will have being with Angelus, Spike, Drusilla and darla have all being with Bella...Imagine Edward's reaction!

I've started the next chapter, but i would like to get Demon Hunters, Tyler Simms: The Secret, and The Key and her Vampire updated first...

PS -whispers- my new cup is a Tigger cup!
Review By [DemonChildeKyra] • Date [27 Jul 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)hellmouthprincess
Review:
Nice start, would really like to see more of this story
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Past Donor)hellmouthprincess] • Date [10 May 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from InsaneGiggles
Review:
I love this story and hope you keep up the great work.
Review By [InsaneGiggles] • Date [25 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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