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Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from maxthehobbit
Review:
Damn good story. Almost like a semi-documentary of countries south of Mexico, not a safe place to live, much like Northern Africa. Doesn't take a demon's influence to cause humans to be animalistic towards each other. But even as bad as parts of Central-South America can be it isn't up to Hitler level.
The part about beheading the men and children kind of reminds me of "The Godfather' in that the Don's are worried about offspring taking vengeance on them. Never been to Italy so I don't know if it's that bad, but I have been to NY and don't have any desire to go back.
I like the way you made the guy that didn't want to fight the temporary President.
Thanks for another enjoyable and thought provoking read.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

Glad you enjoyed it, some of it was based on a Mini-Series I watched back in the early 70's (bits from it stuck in my mind!). No idea what it was called though I think it had Ernest Borgnine (sp?) in it.

Cheers,
D.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [25 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from DNelson
Review:
Sorry for sounding like an 'Ugly American', but who is the 'Man from Del Monte'? Is it a pun on 'The Man from La Manche' (Don Quixote)? And is 'El Viejo Palacio' the Old Palace or the Governor's Palace?

Good story by the way, I've just stayed up all night reading it. And I have the eyestrain to provie it. :)
Comments from author:
The 'man from Del Monte' is a sort of 'in' joke. Here in England there is a tinned fruit company called Del Monte. There old advertising slogan was ' The man from Del Monte- he say yes!'. Said man having spent most of the advert inspecting worried South American fruit farmers produce. It was just something I couldn't resist.

'El Viejo Palacio' (the Old Palace) was the President's hang out. As I say my Spanish is almost non-existent.

Glad you liked it, I enjoyed writing it, sorry about the eyestrain. If you're interested there will be a couple more stories in this series after I've finished my present writing projects.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [DNelson] • Date [15 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Current Donor)Speakertocustomers
Review:
Excellent story, capturing the feel of a revolution/civil war very well in a way that reminds me of Desmond Bagley's thriller "Wyatt's Hurricane". The malevolent Aztec deity making everything worse, and condemning the country to an endless cycle of revolution and new tyranny, was a neat twist.
Comments from author:
Thank-you for your review.

I've noticed that unfortunately you don't need Aztec (or other) deities to make things worse...but it helps!

The basic idea for the story was given to me by the vague memories of a TV mini-series from the late 70's about a S.American Revolution, seemed to fit with the song.

Cheers.
DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)Speakertocustomers] • Date [16 May 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from Mcspender
Review:
Excellent ending dude!.

I liked the way that Ernesto got, pretty good for a normal guy; and yeah, sometimes you gotta let go a small fish to get a better prize.
And Tecazlipoca got it off really easy =).

See ya!!
Comments from author:
Shades of Grey (old Monkeys song!), I like the occasional morale dilemma...particularly where Willow's concerned.

Tecazlipoca; not as tough as he thought he was.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [18 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Moderator)jrabbit
Review:
Good story, as always. However, I'm noticing a disturbing theme developing here, and I plead with you: please stop before you reach Phil Collins' solo career...

P.s. I feed obligated to add: "Nobody expects the Spanish Inquisition!"
Comments from author:
Look, I had a couple of weeks off a while back and I started to go through all my old Genesis CD's. Have no fear only one Genesis inspired story to go and that won't be for a while (Return of the Giant Hogweed/Day of the Triffids xover). Going nowhere near Phil Collins' solo stuff.

All the best,
DaveT.

PS; Battle of Epping Forest, maybe? I've seen that one turned into a Wargame!
Review By [(Moderator)jrabbit] • Date [18 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from JoeDineen
Review:
You had to use the 'man form Del Monte' line? Poor Jerry, for feck's sake to continue filming when an armoured car is lining up the main gun on you. Obviously he never played Twilight 2000.

I enjoyed the story, the demon was a little anticlimactic, though Darth Willow is no one to mess with.
Comments from author:
What can I say? the 'shot' is everything to the cameraman. Oh I remember 'Twilight 2000'!

As I said to Marcus...the man from Del Monte...He-he.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [18 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Twelve." from (Current Donor)MarcusRowland
Review:
The Man from Del Monte???? Oy...
Comments from author:
I'm sorry I just couldn't resist the opportunity.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)MarcusRowland] • Date [18 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine." from Mcspender
Review:
Tecazlipoca? The freaking Quetzalcoatl's "Dark Mirror" Tecazlipoca??.
That guy is waaay hardcore dude, Willow is gonna be in biig problems, I mean, an elder god =S.

I like Ernesto, and I really hope you not gonna kill the guy a la Joss =P.

"Willow was about to go into a long harangue about cultural imperialism and how, as a foreign correspondent Tim should try to learn other peoples languages; which was a little hypocritical as she spoke not one word of Spanish."
And being from California, at least she should know her way around spanish speakers=P.

Cool set of chapters =).

See ya!
Comments from author:
All will be revealed today...I think you'll be ok with what happens to Ernesto.

I was always amazed, considering Sunnydale's history, that none of the characters seemed to speak any Spanish. Not even Cordy and her mom musta had a Mexican maid or some such!

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [17 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from PATM
Review:
I thought "oh no" at first, but the story telling rings true for me, real danger and the effects of the
curse is a real cool variable. I'm convinced by the last 3 chapters.
Comments from author:
Intriguing review, I'd be interested in why the 'oh no' comment.

Glad you're liking it now hope to keep you interested with the rest.

All the best,

DaveT.
Review By [PATM] • Date [15 Apr 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from Mcspender
Review:
Cool song, and way cool set of chapters dude =).
Nice metaphor with El Palacio Viejo and the traps of power, and yeah, things are kinda ugly in Cholulteca(Cholula+Tolteca, cool mix ;)) although, I think you could have used Colombia's conflict zone without too much problem.

And coming from a native Spanish speaker, you're doing a good job with nuestro idioma dude ;) by the way, in Spanish, the show was named "Buffy, la cazadora de vampiros" (The Vampire hunter), I suppose that Hunter sound more... kinda mythical than Slayer.

See ya!!.
Comments from author:
Thank-you.

My translation program wouldn't come up with anything for slayer! And as for some of the other translations...!

I don't like using real places for fics like this you're sure to step on someones toes if you do.

More today.

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [15 Apr 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from JoeDineen
Review:
Hmm, definite improvement, I suppose the faux Central American country had a lot to do with it. Liked the observation about the dangers of firefights, where, yes, if you die it was almost certainly not by a bullet actually aimed at you. So how are Willow and Kennedy going to storm the old palace. I keep having visions of Butch and Sundance.
Comments from author:
Cheers.

As I said to someone else, I think it best to invent your own country for things like this.

Odd you should say about Butch and Sundance (I'm told one of them was Welsh! Now there's an idea for the re-make!) I did think on a scene like that (the last scene in the film) but I thought 'no not today' later sometime.

Yes I went through the 'fun' of 'Tin-city' and I played 'Cityfight' more than a few times, bit of a shock to have your whole command wiped out and never know where you were shot at from.

All the best,

DaveT.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [15 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five." from (Current Donor)MarcusRowland
Review:
Why do I get the feeling this is not going to end well...?
Comments from author:
Damn!

You have seen through my cunningly crafted plan!

All the best,

DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)MarcusRowland] • Date [15 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from (Current Donor)MarcusRowland
Review:
The rebel slayer versus Willow and Kennedy ought to be interesting...
Comments from author:
I hope so...

All the best,
DaveT.
Review By [(Current Donor)MarcusRowland] • Date [14 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two." from JoeDineen
Review:
Not up to your usual standard, kinda reminds me of the Morecombe and Wise movie where they become rulers of a south American country. A good few spelling mistakes, pail for pale and gordy for, I presume, gaudy?

Also if Sarita can pull the trigger faster than the gun on automatic, so what? would she not be pulling the trigger faster than the loading cycle of the weapon and so achieve nothing?
Comments from author:
Well if nothing else you get the prize for the first review. The M&W movie was actually far from my mind when I wrote this (I don't think I've seen it) but now you mention it I can see what you mean.

Gaudy/Pail/Pale; Why don't dictionaries give you the spellings of words that sound the same all together? As with pail/pale I could have sworn I'd checked that...I shall correct those before tomorrow.

Pulling the trigger...? I claim 'writer's license' on that one.

Give it 'til the end of chap 4 on Wednesday before you give up on this one eh?

All the best,
DaveT.

PS: Sorry can't find the pale/pail thing I think I've gone word blind or something...anyway I meant 'pale'.
Review By [JoeDineen] • Date [14 Apr 08] • Not Rated
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