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Review of chapter "Rush" from Kethric
Review:
Just starting with this particular story, having read most of the rest posted here, and I'm certain that there's a pattern you're not noticing. I know most people only post reviews to fawn over the writers, and you're more deserving of it than most. However, you seem to rely on spellcheck to catch errors. Across your stories, I regularly see errors with things like "board" and "bored" or "loose" and "lose" or, in the case of this chapter, "beaconed" and "beckoned." I advise getting a beta to read your work before you post it. As the author, you're in the unenviable position of being too close to your work to be able to rest assured that you're proof-reading adequately. I've said it before, obviously not to you, and I'll likely say it again: as the author, you see what you want to say in your story as much what's actually written. A second, preferably objective, set of eyes could catch some of those errors, provided they belong to someone who knows the words. Unlike many, your errors are in making the wrong choice among similar words; everything is spelled correctly. As such, it's easy to determine what words you intend. Overall, you have good ideas and good execution, which is why I've read almost all of your stories, and will likely have read all of them by the end of this week. You just have a slight vulnerability in your word choice sometimes.
Comments from author:
Thanks so much for your candid review! I really appreciate it when someone takes the time to actually offer advice! Spelling (and the word choice issues that go along with it) has always been a problem of mine, so I do rely heavily on spell check.

If you or anyone else would like to beta for me, I'd be much obliged. Next time I post, I'll put up a 'help wanted' sign.

Thanks again!

'lucidity
Review By [Kethric] • Date [4 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship" from RevDorothyL
Review:
I do hope you're inspired to write a sequel at some point!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the encouragement! I'm glad you liked it!
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [1 Aug 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship" from (Past Donor)athenewolfe
Review:
I really enjoyed the story!
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [(Past Donor)athenewolfe] • Date [31 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship" from (Past Donor)sopchoppy
Review:
this was a good story, liked how you wrapped it up
Comments from author:
Thanks so much!
Review By [(Past Donor)sopchoppy] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship" from Beth
Review:
Heya again!

I would very much like to read more of this friendship. They sound like fun together.
Comments from author:
Thanks a ton - Glad you like!
Review By [Beth] • Date [30 Jul 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship" from Phaerye
Review:
::pouts at quick ending::

Well, either way, I really enjoyed your story. I liked your take on the Dawn/Dexter relationship. It worked really well!
Comments from author:
Thanks so much! I know the end was a bit summarized, but I like to think I covered most of what I had planned to cover anyway. And, after all - a quick ending is a hell of a lot better than no ending, n'est pas?

I really appreciate your reading and reviewing! Thanks again!

'lucidity
Review By [Phaerye] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Comfortable" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
That was awesome, very detail seen without bogging down the flow of words. You captured what everyone was feeling fantastically.

Good work!

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Beginning of a Beautiful Friendship" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
What and ending... you did a wonderful job with this story!

Thanks...

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thanks you so much for all of your reviews! You've got me all smiley!

'lucidity
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Casual" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Mind blowing how you are writing their connecting through murder/justice. Damn good and creepy.

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! Glad you like! This started out as a one shot and I was convinced to continue. I've completely convinced myself that Dawn and Dexter would be great friends.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Weird Stuff" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Oh what an interesting way to introduce Dexter to the night-unlife!

Wispr
Comments from author:
Up close and personal - it's the only way, really.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Little Bit of Drug" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Love Dawn's and Dexter's chemistry, going to be an interesting relationship!

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thankyou! Glad you agree!
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issues" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Beautiful, how you are writing Dawn makes the story very believable. Love Dexter's point of view.

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thanks - She always seemed like, of all of them, she'd be the one that could get out into the real world and live a full life outside of Team Slayer. Of course, once you know about it all, you can never fully leave ...
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Playing House" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
Oh very nice, love how Dawn draws on her experience with Spike. Never scene Dexter but you really fill out his character very well.

Wispr
Comments from author:
Wow - thats a high compliment! Thank you! BTW - you really should watch it - great show.
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Not a Stalker" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
You did a wonderful job writing Dawn, also love Dawn's and Buffy's phone conversation.

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thanks for the feedback!
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rush" from (Recent Donor)MissingAuthor
Review:
What a interesting beginning!

Wispr
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [(Recent Donor)MissingAuthor] • Date [29 Jul 08] • Not Rated
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