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Review of chapter "Remembering" from FinalGuardian
Review:
Ok, to give you a hint about what I think of this story, this is the only 10 rating I''ve ever given on this site. there are constantly new twists around the corner and the writing an characterization are excellent.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I am deeply flattered to be your only 10 in the site. I've put more energy and thought into this story that into anything I've ever written before so it's always a joy to see that the work has been appreciated. I'm currently on a writing hiatus, but this story will continue.
Review By [FinalGuardian] • Date [13 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Regrouping" from HMaxMarius
Review:
Okay... So I've reached this point and something silly has popped into my mind and I'm wondering if you've considered it... (Of course, if one of the affiliated stories that I haven't yet read covers this then cool.)

So, on Dawn's arrival at Hogwarts she made a huge too do about her 'Key' abilities and how she was now an expert in languages, etc... all at the tender age of 11.

Add to that, her Mom has this wonderful serpentine familiar...

Mix with Dawn being Buffy's LITTLE sister.

Can we make the following assumptions?

Dawn is a Parseltongue who gets along with Skippy /infamously/ and that the two of them have taken to pranking big sis? Perhaps even Dawn might eventually become a second 'Snake animagi' in the family?
Comments from author:
Amusing ideas, I must say. I shall think on it.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [1 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Relentless" from mrInfinity
Review:
this is one of the longest fanfic I've seen, it's amazing.

I'm curious about what's gonna happen with Voldemort's kid, especially now that this Carrow thing has been revealed.

also, just out of curiosity, are you planning to bring Sam and Dean into this, or are they going to stay canon?

Anyway, fabulous work, I hope you continue.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm taking the summer off from writing but yes, this saga will continue.
Review By [mrInfinity] • Date [30 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from skychan
Review:
I actually really enjoyed this chapter. It was a nice way to work in a review of recent events. I actually am sad that it got interupted where it was. I would have liked to see even more of a recitation and reactions from the elder malfoys before having the carrow card played.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought the conversation flowed pretty naturally. If Calypso had gotten too detailed with her explanation, it would have felt forced, I think. The elder generation will have other opportunities to react to various revelations, I'm sure.
Review By [skychan] • Date [29 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from TroyGuffey
Review:
How does the Wizengamut have jurisdiction over something that happened in America? I can't remember, but I don't think Giles is a member of the wizarding world. Also, he practices (occaisionaly) a different FORM of magic, not wand-wielding.

(It's been a while since I've re-read the entire story.)
Comments from author:
Technically, as a British national, any magic Giles performs fall subject to the Ministry of Magic. That is part of the treaty the Ministry has with the royal family of Britain. Although Willow and the other Americans are outside their jurisdiction, however the International Confederation of Wizards does include the American Magical government, so they're very fortunate that the same magical chaos that masks witches and wizards from general detection hides all magic performed in the area of the Hellmouth. Also, Jacinthe, Xander, Lucius, Narcissa, Bellatrix, and Alecto are all British citizens (even if Xander didn't know he had dual-citizenship until recently), so they can be brought before the Wizengamot and tried for any crimes they may commit.
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Revelations" from DonCroyle
Review:
After having read the whole fic to date, I'd have to say it's not horrible, but it would have been better as a straight HP gender bending story. On the other hand, it's hard to object to a crossover with BTVS on a site devoted to them. I'd have liked it better if you'd have limited it to Joyce returning to the UK and left Buffy in Sunnydale. Having given Joyce two extra, non-canonical daughters, you haven't really done much with them.

As for the Heirs of the Founders plot line, I can believe that the magic works that way, but not that the politics does. If there's a hint of real power available, not subject on the crown's (dis)favor or other political machinations, the family trees involved are going to be tracked in multiple places. The founding chieftains would have made provision for someone to act on behalf of any heir not eligible to act for themselves--if only to protect their lands and people. And anytime a line daughtered out, the daughter in question would face enormous pressure to make a marriage that would consolidate lines. Out of twelve original lines, I'd be surprised to see four surviving after a thousand years.
Comments from author:
Interesting. Well, I took Jess from Supernatural mostly because I hated what Kripke did to her, and I found her an interesting challenge. Dawn is quasi-canon, though obviously she was not the same precise character as canon Dawn.

In a non magical society, I'd be surprised to see one or two Royal lines surviving the more than two millenia I've established for the Council of Twelve Kings, though several Scottish Clans are older than that. Someone else asked me once what would happen if a male was born that was the sole heir to more than one line. The line he was most directly descended from would pass to him, any others would pass to his sons, nephews, or grandsons. No Heir may carry more than one crown. A Royal line may be carried through the distaff for dozens of generations, but the line would still be a valid inheritance under the magical contracts enacted by the first Council. The actual scope of power available to any individual King is actually limited to his own family and such other families that choose to become his vassals - laws that ae established wo that each time a new King takes his hereditary place, any vassals not of his own family have the choice to leave the service of that crown or renew their vows of fealty. The Council as a whole has the authority to determine the political structure of the nation as a whole, but no one King may command any person within that nation without those vows of fealty. These are laws that are not yet fully understood by Harry and his friends, but he's only made decrees and rulings about his own family, for now, so they're not technically relevant to him yet either.

Does that help?
Review By [DonCroyle] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from ChaosLady
Review:
A lot happened in one chapter. Excellent update!
Comments from author:
Thank you! There is a lot going on. Also, we're in the home stretch of a major plot arc, so...
Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Relentless" from starwolf
Review:
things are moving along. I see lots of little thing coming together. nice to see progress in Sunnydale also. congratulations on your coming family addition. may you have a smooth time of everything. maybe you need to add another secret or surprise baby to the story to jump start your muse. until next time, thanks
Comments from author:
Well, we've already got Joyce and Sev expecting, Remus and Nymphadora are expecting Teddy as happened in canon, and Alecto being cared for by Narcissa and Lucius while she's also expecting... hmmm......

Next chapter should be Dumbledore's trial. Finally. It might just surprise a few people, and it should answer a few old questions... and raise all new ones, because I'm evil like that.

Eh. We'll see. Thank you for letting me know what you thought.
Review By [starwolf] • Date [27 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
Review:
It's been...so...long....

Thanks for writing! Was the summarized recap to the grandparents planned before this, or a happy accident of timing that just made up for the long break?
Comments from author:
It's been two months. Rather shorter wait than the last two, but I agree that it's still longer than I'd like. Still... Calypso's report to her grandparents just happened to fit here. Someone would have eventually needed to clue them in, and it made a decent enough way to have Calypso bond with then a bit, as it were.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [27 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Redirection" from spikesplayfulpet
Review:
I think i read this story awhile ago and sorry to say i forgot about it because it hadn't been updated in awhile. I just want to say that like this story and what you have done with it so far. Keep up the great writing and i hope to see an update soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the compliments. I'm working on the next chapter already, though I can't promise when it will be out, it will be much less time than between the last few chapters.
Review By [spikesplayfulpet] • Date [6 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Redirection" from Starfox
Review:
High Tribunal sounds ominous - but the idea of the wizengamot judging people sounds even worse.
Comments from author:
Indeed. I think I'd prefer a trial guaranteed to end in execution, exile, or exoneration over the Ministry's idea of justice, myself.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reaching" from Starfox
Review:
Interesting revelations concerning the council. Ties into the old religion of Britain point towards the fae, maybe?

Nasty vision for Jess. I wonder what happens should the two brothers discover she is a witch. And Charlie needs some help with romancing her - comparing her to one of the beasts that burned him might not be the best way to her heart.

And I almost pity Dumbledore. Almost.
Comments from author:
No, druids.

Jess' dream is at least in part sparked by Sam's visions of Jess in the first season of Supernatural. The first part was his glimpsing her on a street corner at the end of 'Bloody Mary', the second was her dropping in during the episode where they deal with demon-powered witches for the first time. The second part was, obviously, creative license.

Almost...
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Rediscovery" from Starfox
Review:
Ew... Snape has a nasty sense of humor even towards his family. Dragon Burn scabs indeed.

Wineyards and teasing talks - poor Harry.

Ah, Helene could quickly become my favorite character. One woman not at all impressed by the kings. Or at least not impressed enough to abstain from threatening Harry to treat Calypso well.$

Good scene with Dawn - I was wondering when her special talents would appear again. I am curious who will be chosen by the wand as well.

And more fluffy scenes in Sunnydale. I guess some trouble there would be sidetracking the story, but it feels a bit too peaceful for a Hellmouth.
Comments from author:
Even if he's mellowed because his wife had returned, he's still Snape.

I do like Dawn. She's a fun character write when the opportunity presents itself.

Well, with Faith not going evil, and no "Mayor McSnake" problems, it's been a virtually apocalypse free year.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Remembering" from Starfox
Review:
Interesting and original abduction attempt. Of course in hindsight it was an obvious means to kidnap them, but that's hindsight. Of course if that's dear grandmother or such abducting them, then that's quite a foreshadowing of events to come - eccentric comes to mind.

Nice scene with Faith and Xander, well done.

Great-grandmother Malfoy is a staunch advocate of muggleborn rights? One can but wonder if that includes the right to be equal to pure-blood noble borns. Too bad Harry more or less seems to have cut his muggleborn friend(s) off by now.

Edit: As long as muggleborn can only be upward mobile to a certain degree they are still second class citizens - or subjects, in this case. And in a heriditary oligarchy they cannot move up to the highest position. And I don't want to sound insulting, but it just seems so strange that Hermione is not present anymore in Harry's life - after being his staunchest, closest friend for 5 years, risking her life with and for him every year there is no mentioning of her at all anymore, no inclusion in the summer plans, nothing, no explanation. I'd never have thought those ties would fade so fast. I really don't get why he doesn't consider her family. Is blood really that important for him?
Comments from author:
Eccentric, and headstrong, opinionated, and willing to fight for what she believes in.

The right to not be tormented about blood status, to find their own way without repression, and to make their own mark on the world. Everyone has the right to be upwardly mobile. Noble born does not automatically mean better. A person's worth is proven through their actions. She taught her son that. She is French, and proud.

"Too bad Harry more or less seems to have cut his muggleborn friend(s) off by now." THIS is what I meant about being insulting. Where, exactly, does it say that Harry has cut off his friends? Do you consider your friends to have 'cut you off' when they are dealing with personal or family problems that don't involve you? How very self-centered.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Removal" from Starfox
Review:
And there is the corruption I feared - Tonks can't act on her lawful duty, but has to obey her family and the kings present. Once Voldemore gets a few kings on his side, he can do the same. And since it's heriditary, he can get kings on his side by killing the present kings until someone of his inherits. That's the danger and corruption of absolute monarchies.

It's quite hypocritical, but not too much of a surprise, that Harry has issues with being called a king but not with using the power of a king. Someone should point out to him that he is close to a slippery slope, one Dumbledore slid down.

Calypso should know better - a ministry that uses dementors as prison guard and whose prison sentences are actually inhuman torture should have not qualms at using such spells as punishments.

Edit: But Harry wasn't raised in this society. He was raised a muggle. Buffy and Dawn too were mostly raised as normal people in a democracy. It just feels odd for them to forget that.

Edit2: Buffy still spent the last 5 years in a modern society. Some of the most important years in her education. That's not something that should be wiped away that easily, not from a headstrong, determinded young woman like her. It simply feels odd that she's forgetting about the real world so easily, and accepting things that should make her cry out in anger at the injustice of it.

Edit3: Understandable, though I'd say Voldemort needs to be stopped, then the ministry. I guess my strong reaction to the lack of modern thinking in the story comes from my desire for happy endings. Without changing the system to democracy the wizarding world will go to hell in a generation or two again, with the next dark Lord taking over thanks to the inherent corruption of all monarchies, which is why I don't think leaving the council of kings in power is a happy ending.

Edit 4: Would you agree to have the USA ruled by 12 heriditary kings? It's still an evil system, since no one not born into it can ever rule. You don't actually need a revolution to do away with that, just a change of system - unless of course the ruling oligarchy is evil enough not to change. I don't really see Harry as evil, as wanting to suppress the muggleborn, and keep people from having a say in how they live.
Comments from author:
Harry is still learning. He's going to make mistakes. I quite agree that someone needs to help him make certain distinctions, but that probably won't happen until he actually screws something up.

ALbus Dumbledore was never King.

People raised within a given society (particularly those of the privileged minority of the wealthy upper class) often do not see its failings until they are directly affected by them. Then, they are often surprised. This is the "rude awakening" effect.

Edit: Harry was not raised. He was enslaved by the Dursleys. I very much doubt he had much understanding off how democracy us supposed to work. Buffy spent five years in California under a memory charm. She lived within the Wizarding world, albeit secluded, until she was twelve.

She's not forgetting, just willing to learn about the differences, and recognise that she's in a completely different society from that which she lived while away from her father's people. At the moment, however, she is more forcussed on things like figuring out how to get rid of the soul-sucking demons, and how to fix the current problems with the Wizarding government. At the moment, she is on the "the Ministry is evil and must be stopped" bandwagon.

As to the stop Voldemort, then fix the Ministry, I agree. So do they. As to the inherent evil of monarchy, that's another thing. There are checks on their power at a larger level that keeps them from simply taking over and 'conquering the world', as it were.

First off, monarchy is rule by ONE person. What they have is oligarchy. Which if you consider that any major action MUST be by the agreement of the entire Council as a whole, is much more balanced than a monarchy. Consensus, not majority. Which means that any debated action must be argued out until compromise is reached.

Yes, the position is inheritable, and thus not 'fair'. Nothing is truly fair. Any king taking direct actions to kill another king forfeits his own life. If a King is killed by the express command of another King, the one issuing the command forfeits his own life. The only reason Tom Riddle wasn't executed long ago is because he never claimed his title, because he was unaware of it. As such, he is a war criminal who will be executed when he is apprehended.

There's a word for what you want. Revolution. Which by its very nature usually results in the deaths of about half a populace, when all is said and done.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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