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Review of chapter "Reminders" from UnscathedAnimal
Review:
I realise this story isn't about Buffy, but she's still one of the better qualified people to deal with situations like this. She's seen friends die, and Bella was an ENEMY. She's faced certain death for herself and her friends and family and come out on top. She's even died in the line of duty herself. Why has she been in a purely supporting role so far? Slayers are usually not background material, and Buffy is better than most.

In fact, so far the fic could have done without a crossover at all. Buffy and her family could have been replaced by a regular wizarding family without any narrative loss. Very disappointed.

Not rated because I know I'm being unfair. Aside from the No-Buffy thing it's a pretty good story, and there's still a lot more of it to go before I'm caught up.
Comments from author:
Hmm. Well, for one thing, this is sixteen year old Buffy. In season three, she was as insecure as she ever got in the show, still dealing with what happened in season two and unsure of herself. Also, she's not particularly used to dealing with HUMAN evils, or enemies.

Add to that the uncertainty of being suddenly moved into a completely unfamiliar environment, filled with other people who seem to have a better handle of what's going on than her, and she's more likely to take a secondary role and let someone else be a leader while she figured out what's happening. Also, at that age, Buffy was still married to the idea that Slayers don't hurt humans and the sight of dead people did still upset her. Further, I've backed her age up a full year, so she's not yet an adult in the Wizarding world, and at sixteen, Buffy was more interested in trying to force her Calling to accommodate her desire to be a normal teenage girl. When you consider the fact that both of her parents are present, and they both have more experience and a better understanding of what's going on than she does, and her inclination to take a supporting role should make more sense.

I don't consider your thoughts unfair, you are sharing your perspective and I appreciate it when people do that. Thank you for taking the time to tell me what you think.
Review By [UnscathedAnimal] • Date [10 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Relentless" from twlight
Review:
Oh this is such a wonderful wonderful story! I have to say that it seems like Draco doing what he did ended up causing wonderful things to happen to everyone, his family got out of Riddle's control, he learned of more family that he didn't know he had and he found true love. I love how you made Spike related to everyone that he is and how you made Joyce married to Snape. I am eagerly awaiting the next installment to this wonderful wonderful story.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your enthusiasm. ^_^

I always love learning that I have new fans. The study will continue, though I can't promise how soon. I have rather a lot of RL things on my plate at the moment, what with my third baby being due in a month. But I will be continuing, I promise.
Review By [twlight] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Remembering" from FinalGuardian
Review:
Ok, to give you a hint about what I think of this story, this is the only 10 rating I''ve ever given on this site. there are constantly new twists around the corner and the writing an characterization are excellent.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I am deeply flattered to be your only 10 in the site. I've put more energy and thought into this story that into anything I've ever written before so it's always a joy to see that the work has been appreciated. I'm currently on a writing hiatus, but this story will continue.
Review By [FinalGuardian] • Date [13 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Regrouping" from HMaxMarius
Review:
Okay... So I've reached this point and something silly has popped into my mind and I'm wondering if you've considered it... (Of course, if one of the affiliated stories that I haven't yet read covers this then cool.)

So, on Dawn's arrival at Hogwarts she made a huge too do about her 'Key' abilities and how she was now an expert in languages, etc... all at the tender age of 11.

Add to that, her Mom has this wonderful serpentine familiar...

Mix with Dawn being Buffy's LITTLE sister.

Can we make the following assumptions?

Dawn is a Parseltongue who gets along with Skippy /infamously/ and that the two of them have taken to pranking big sis? Perhaps even Dawn might eventually become a second 'Snake animagi' in the family?
Comments from author:
Amusing ideas, I must say. I shall think on it.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [1 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Relentless" from mrInfinity
Review:
this is one of the longest fanfic I've seen, it's amazing.

I'm curious about what's gonna happen with Voldemort's kid, especially now that this Carrow thing has been revealed.

also, just out of curiosity, are you planning to bring Sam and Dean into this, or are they going to stay canon?

Anyway, fabulous work, I hope you continue.
Comments from author:
Thank you. I'm taking the summer off from writing but yes, this saga will continue.
Review By [mrInfinity] • Date [30 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from skychan
Review:
I actually really enjoyed this chapter. It was a nice way to work in a review of recent events. I actually am sad that it got interupted where it was. I would have liked to see even more of a recitation and reactions from the elder malfoys before having the carrow card played.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought the conversation flowed pretty naturally. If Calypso had gotten too detailed with her explanation, it would have felt forced, I think. The elder generation will have other opportunities to react to various revelations, I'm sure.
Review By [skychan] • Date [29 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from TroyGuffey
Review:
How does the Wizengamut have jurisdiction over something that happened in America? I can't remember, but I don't think Giles is a member of the wizarding world. Also, he practices (occaisionaly) a different FORM of magic, not wand-wielding.

(It's been a while since I've re-read the entire story.)
Comments from author:
Technically, as a British national, any magic Giles performs fall subject to the Ministry of Magic. That is part of the treaty the Ministry has with the royal family of Britain. Although Willow and the other Americans are outside their jurisdiction, however the International Confederation of Wizards does include the American Magical government, so they're very fortunate that the same magical chaos that masks witches and wizards from general detection hides all magic performed in the area of the Hellmouth. Also, Jacinthe, Xander, Lucius, Narcissa, Bellatrix, and Alecto are all British citizens (even if Xander didn't know he had dual-citizenship until recently), so they can be brought before the Wizengamot and tried for any crimes they may commit.
Review By [TroyGuffey] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Revelations" from DonCroyle
Review:
After having read the whole fic to date, I'd have to say it's not horrible, but it would have been better as a straight HP gender bending story. On the other hand, it's hard to object to a crossover with BTVS on a site devoted to them. I'd have liked it better if you'd have limited it to Joyce returning to the UK and left Buffy in Sunnydale. Having given Joyce two extra, non-canonical daughters, you haven't really done much with them.

As for the Heirs of the Founders plot line, I can believe that the magic works that way, but not that the politics does. If there's a hint of real power available, not subject on the crown's (dis)favor or other political machinations, the family trees involved are going to be tracked in multiple places. The founding chieftains would have made provision for someone to act on behalf of any heir not eligible to act for themselves--if only to protect their lands and people. And anytime a line daughtered out, the daughter in question would face enormous pressure to make a marriage that would consolidate lines. Out of twelve original lines, I'd be surprised to see four surviving after a thousand years.
Comments from author:
Interesting. Well, I took Jess from Supernatural mostly because I hated what Kripke did to her, and I found her an interesting challenge. Dawn is quasi-canon, though obviously she was not the same precise character as canon Dawn.

In a non magical society, I'd be surprised to see one or two Royal lines surviving the more than two millenia I've established for the Council of Twelve Kings, though several Scottish Clans are older than that. Someone else asked me once what would happen if a male was born that was the sole heir to more than one line. The line he was most directly descended from would pass to him, any others would pass to his sons, nephews, or grandsons. No Heir may carry more than one crown. A Royal line may be carried through the distaff for dozens of generations, but the line would still be a valid inheritance under the magical contracts enacted by the first Council. The actual scope of power available to any individual King is actually limited to his own family and such other families that choose to become his vassals - laws that ae established wo that each time a new King takes his hereditary place, any vassals not of his own family have the choice to leave the service of that crown or renew their vows of fealty. The Council as a whole has the authority to determine the political structure of the nation as a whole, but no one King may command any person within that nation without those vows of fealty. These are laws that are not yet fully understood by Harry and his friends, but he's only made decrees and rulings about his own family, for now, so they're not technically relevant to him yet either.

Does that help?
Review By [DonCroyle] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from ChaosLady
Review:
A lot happened in one chapter. Excellent update!
Comments from author:
Thank you! There is a lot going on. Also, we're in the home stretch of a major plot arc, so...
Review By [ChaosLady] • Date [28 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Relentless" from starwolf
Review:
things are moving along. I see lots of little thing coming together. nice to see progress in Sunnydale also. congratulations on your coming family addition. may you have a smooth time of everything. maybe you need to add another secret or surprise baby to the story to jump start your muse. until next time, thanks
Comments from author:
Well, we've already got Joyce and Sev expecting, Remus and Nymphadora are expecting Teddy as happened in canon, and Alecto being cared for by Narcissa and Lucius while she's also expecting... hmmm......

Next chapter should be Dumbledore's trial. Finally. It might just surprise a few people, and it should answer a few old questions... and raise all new ones, because I'm evil like that.

Eh. We'll see. Thank you for letting me know what you thought.
Review By [starwolf] • Date [27 Apr 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Relentless" from (Current Donor)Sithspit
Review:
It's been...so...long....

Thanks for writing! Was the summarized recap to the grandparents planned before this, or a happy accident of timing that just made up for the long break?
Comments from author:
It's been two months. Rather shorter wait than the last two, but I agree that it's still longer than I'd like. Still... Calypso's report to her grandparents just happened to fit here. Someone would have eventually needed to clue them in, and it made a decent enough way to have Calypso bond with then a bit, as it were.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sithspit] • Date [27 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Redirection" from spikesplayfulpet
Review:
I think i read this story awhile ago and sorry to say i forgot about it because it hadn't been updated in awhile. I just want to say that like this story and what you have done with it so far. Keep up the great writing and i hope to see an update soon.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the compliments. I'm working on the next chapter already, though I can't promise when it will be out, it will be much less time than between the last few chapters.
Review By [spikesplayfulpet] • Date [6 Mar 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Redirection" from Starfox
Review:
High Tribunal sounds ominous - but the idea of the wizengamot judging people sounds even worse.
Comments from author:
Indeed. I think I'd prefer a trial guaranteed to end in execution, exile, or exoneration over the Ministry's idea of justice, myself.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Reaching" from Starfox
Review:
Interesting revelations concerning the council. Ties into the old religion of Britain point towards the fae, maybe?

Nasty vision for Jess. I wonder what happens should the two brothers discover she is a witch. And Charlie needs some help with romancing her - comparing her to one of the beasts that burned him might not be the best way to her heart.

And I almost pity Dumbledore. Almost.
Comments from author:
No, druids.

Jess' dream is at least in part sparked by Sam's visions of Jess in the first season of Supernatural. The first part was his glimpsing her on a street corner at the end of 'Bloody Mary', the second was her dropping in during the episode where they deal with demon-powered witches for the first time. The second part was, obviously, creative license.

Almost...
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Rediscovery" from Starfox
Review:
Ew... Snape has a nasty sense of humor even towards his family. Dragon Burn scabs indeed.

Wineyards and teasing talks - poor Harry.

Ah, Helene could quickly become my favorite character. One woman not at all impressed by the kings. Or at least not impressed enough to abstain from threatening Harry to treat Calypso well.$

Good scene with Dawn - I was wondering when her special talents would appear again. I am curious who will be chosen by the wand as well.

And more fluffy scenes in Sunnydale. I guess some trouble there would be sidetracking the story, but it feels a bit too peaceful for a Hellmouth.
Comments from author:
Even if he's mellowed because his wife had returned, he's still Snape.

I do like Dawn. She's a fun character write when the opportunity presents itself.

Well, with Faith not going evil, and no "Mayor McSnake" problems, it's been a virtually apocalypse free year.
Review By [Starfox] • Date [24 Feb 14] • Not Rated
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