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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from tals
Review:
Very nice. I like how you made Dawn the fifth element, and still kept her personality. And the explanation of the mangalores is inspired. Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed it...

Tals
Comments from author:
Thanks. Once I figured Dawn was the fifth element, a bunch of stuff just clicked. I had high hopes for the plot line, as there were going to be sequels where Dawn and Korben hunted down super-strong werewolves (from the two moons now orbiting the earth) and alien vampires, but I lost the muse :(
Review By [tals] • Date [23 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Orion
Review:
Interesting. Somewhat abrupt at times - some scenes such as the spaceship landing and taking Dawn could have been expanded to be more than a couple paragraphs - but generally good.

I look forward to see what else you do with this.
Comments from author:
My writing tends to be less on the "expanded, expounded, and elucidated" side, and although I make a major attempt from time to time, I realize that I'm not particularly good at it. I'm stoked if a chapter approaches 1K words. I feel I'm much better at the snapshots approach...guess this means I have a problem with continuity in writing. I find it highly ironic that I write the types of stories that I don't read from other authors: not a fan of standalone shorts, and I'm death on drabbles in general.
Review By [Orion] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Hazgarn
Review:
Awesome. I've been wanting for some time to find a fic exploring the whole Dawn-as-Yog-Sothoth thing. Weaving it into The Fifth Element is just like a bonus. :D
Comments from author:
Glad you like it so far. I can't claim credit for the idea...some author I can't recall used that plot hook as the basis for a Dawn/Illyria fic that was pretty cool. This arc of my story just uses a little of the Cthulhu bit. Part 2/story 2 (if I ever get around to it) will go into more depth about what it means for Dawn to be an Old One.
Review By [Hazgarn] • Date [11 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Nomma
Review:
*starts bowing* We're not worthy! We're not worthy!
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm still working on the story, but action scenes are my bugaboo. Guess what I'm struggling with?
Review By [Nomma] • Date [3 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Avena
Review:
i'm so glad you updated! i really like it!
Comments from author:
This will take a while, but I am planning on finishing it. The other fics are just easier to get written down for some reason.
Review By [Avena] • Date [14 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
One of my favourite films - and I already like the changes you've made. Keep it coming.
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [26 Jun 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Iriai
Review:
Yay! An update!
And I love the subtle changes you're making to the details of the plot. Hope you update soon!
Review By [Iriai] • Date [24 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
Review:
Very good... Excellent segway into the plot.
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [24 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Fighter
Review:
Great chapter. Can't wait to see what he's going to do next. Please come back soon.
Review By [Fighter] • Date [30 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from LallaBelle
Review:
Really liking how the story is going so far. Can't wait to see the pairing really start up.

And oh! I just love how you have Dawn still speaking english as well as the divine language. Also interesting take on the hair colour. (Not exactly hard to forget Milla's 'fluro' orange hair in TFE...)
Review By [LallaBelle] • Date [30 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Fighter
Review:
I like the story and think that it is a great pairing. I can't wait to read more. Please come back soon.
Review By [Fighter] • Date [5 May 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Iriai
Review:
Kyah! Love it! Can't wait to see Bruce Willis! Update soon!
Review By [Iriai] • Date [25 Apr 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
Review:
HEE!! Looks promising!
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [25 Apr 08] • Not Rated
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