Review of chapter "Chapter One" from sevter
Interesting premise but execution could be better. Xander is too perfect here, "fixing" too many things that he couldn't have possibly known and working by himself. Too many odd ends that was never explained as well...like how did he manage to summon the monkey king.
Review By [sevter
] • Date [23 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from TharzZzDunN
It was interesting, I was just hoping that there would be more.
Review By [TharzZzDunN
] • Date [26 Jan 13] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CathalPicard
I love, love, love, love, love this!!!
Review By [CathalPicard
] • Date [27 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CelebwenTelcontar
That was very good. I really liked that, and the end was especially powerful.
Review By [CelebwenTelcontar
] • Date [21 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Hanzo
Review By [Hanzo
] • Date [27 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Chikageko
Nice ficlet but with all due respect, Glory was defeated with a simple enchanted warhammer; Someone of Sarutobi's power would not need to resort to the 8 trigrams dead god seal to defeat her.
Edit: "When Giles briefly left Sunnydale, he reluctantly left Anya in charge of the shop. During an argument, she and Willow accidentally released Olaf the troll from a crystal. It was revealed that Willow and Anya's mutual dislike stemmed from the fear of each that the other would hurt Xander. When Xander protected both women equally from Olaf, they finally came to an understanding and worked together to banish Olaf to the Land of the Trolls. As the Scoobies prepared to confront the hellgod Glory, Anya provided crucial advice by suggesting that they use the Dagon Sphere and Olaf's hammer in the fight." Buffypedia.com
Review the episode right after once more with feeling () It's simply an enchanted troll hammer, nothing divine about it, Anya calls her old boyfriend Olaf a troll god because it sounds better when she's offering frightened options to stopping Glory.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. Though it's been a while since I watched the episode, I'm pretty sure the hammer was stated to be the Troll God's Hammer, so while it wasn't wielded by the Troll God, it was still divine magic that beat her. Also, something I didn't really make clear, but was my intention, was that this was the Scooby's first encounter with Glory, and they hadn't had chance to research her. All Xander knew was that she was shrugging off everything he was throwing at her, and she needed to die before she got away. Thus, the Death God.
Review By [Chikageko
] • Date [24 May 10] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Cracking good story, one error I noticed is that it should be Sarutobi Hiruzen not Sasuke.
I would have given you a 10, if it was to be continued.
Review By [eriktheviking
] • Date [12 May 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Jearom
Just found this. It's awesome and I wish it were expanded to a full length fic!
Review By [Jearom
] • Date [14 Apr 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Wingwyrm
Ack! Who did Xander seal her into!? What happened to Xander in the Shinigami's stomach? Did he meet up with Sarutobi and Namikaze? Did he get magically transported to Konoha because magic is completely illogical and the Shinigami might not have been able to digest a soul that was already in his stomach (which could have been why Xander kept the memories, him keeping Sarutobi's soul in his body).
That was an amazingly awesome fic, Xander as Sarutobi was just... perfect. *laughs* Xander with seventy years of memories. And torturing Deadboy with genjutsu :) On a cross :D Every part was better than the last one.
(May I use the term 'Dead Kage Clause'? Because it sounds like something that needs to happen more often in Naruto fics :)
Comments from author:
Xander didn't seal Glory into anyone, he didn't need to. I don't think she had nearly as much power as a bijuu, so Xander wouldn't need someone to seal her into, she's stuck in the belly of the Death God for eternity. For right now, Xander is stuck in the same situation as every other user of the Shiki Fuuin, he's being tortured in the Death God's stomach for eternity. That's how I understand the technique to work.
And go ahead and use Dead Kage Clause, I actually got it from another fic I read quite some time ago that I forget the name of. Gaara originally said it to Tsunade.
Review By [Wingwyrm
] • Date [13 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Hecatonchires
I would have enjoyed more of this
Review By [Hecatonchires
] • Date [4 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from iamnuff
i got GOOSEBUMPS from that,
loved the mention of the dead kage clause too,
also, thats what a ninja does, small changes making things different.
not "lets just kill every demon in Sunnydale" or crap like that, its bypassing before he started, stopping faith killing that n00b, little things, a single action, one death, or even one life. makes so much difference,
then there's the last stand, because hes not JUST a ninja, he's Sarutobi motherfucking Hiruzen and that is all 64 flavors of win.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing. Glad you enjoyed it. I had planned on taking it out till Season Seven, but then I realized that Xander had already fixed the problems that were there. There's no way Xander wouldn't have noticed Willow's descent into magical overload, and taken steps to counter it as early as possible, likely countering it before it came to be a problem, nudging both Willow into being more responsible with her power, and Giles in being more responsible in teaching Willow and monitoring her progress, and if Buffy doesn't get resurrected, which wouldn't have happened if Willow was more responsible, the First never gets to enter the Material Plane. Not to mention that Xander wasn't going to let Glory march over Sunnydale for as long as she did in canon. The Scoobies may have run from Glory once, but Xander wasn't about to let her run amok. Which is why he pulled out his entire arsenal, including the Shiki Fuuin.
Review By [iamnuff
] • Date [15 Jan 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordSia
Epic Awesome. I think it's a pity that people don't use the Professor more; he's Awesome, really. Think about it, he have not only learnt but Mastered every non-bloodline technique in Konoha, possibly the world, no Sharingan, no Byakugan, no nothing, just sheer genius and lots of hard work. Only flaw really is that it's too damn short.
Review By [LordSia
] • Date [3 Dec 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from frankocsic
great story idea, and well executed. good job. i enjoyed reading it.
Review By [frankocsic
] • Date [11 Apr 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
i love this story
Review By [Bobboky
] • Date [20 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from acerbia
That was a really good story. I wish there was more you know, like he was reincarnated with his memories in the Naruto universe or something. But really your story was great!
Review By [acerbia
] • Date [1 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]