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Review of chapter "Epilog and thoughts." from deathgeonous
Review:
The only problem with this fic is the fact that if you truly want to read this series in chronological order, you have to read this fic after halfway finishing another. Well that and the fact that the pokegirl romp was just a tad to long. Eh. Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
Yes... that's the problem with it. It's irksome even for me looking back but yes that's the way things happened. The romp in the pokegirl world was more than a bit long. Thanks for the review.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [7 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilog and thoughts." from deathgeonous
Review:
Hmm, nice fic here, and I loved what you've done with Gaby, but this fic in my mind had three glaring problems. Problem number one was the fact that, and while I understand just why you did it, this is a side story that you have to leave another story to read if you want to keep reading within the timeline. Second problem, the Pokegirl tangent. While I like it, it just went on a little too long. Third problem, that right after the Pokegirl tangent was over with, you rushed to rap up this fic. It was a little rushed as I said, and you probabbly should have waited a little while longer to finish this off. Well, thanks for writing this though, I had fun reading it, bye for now.
Comments from author:
I did the side story because at the time I wanted to try a few things and explore some characters without getting too far away from everything else.

The pokegirl tangent had several issues. Looking back at it, I should probably have mixed in some more explanations than I did for the various parts of the pokegirl world. I wrapped up the fic because I folded everything back into the main story. Looking back at it, I probably could have taken a bit more time but I wanted to get back to the main story. It was an interesting writing experience though.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [11 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Pokegirl what?" from DCG
Review:
Oh isn't that nice. 21 chapters in and a nice big Fuck you from the author.

It was bad enough that you filled this with loli sex. But then you toss in that pokegirl crap. ya that's great, lets send the 11 year old kids to a world based on Mind Rape, Rape, forced changes, and of course Slavery.

Your Mary sue-SI Willow is one sick and depraved bitch, Ill not bother with commenting on how that makes me wounder about the author.


On the upside, your writing is great. And the plots and screen play flow well. There's just that glaring problem with you FAILING AT LIFE. Dragging the fic down.

Work on that last problem, redo a few chapters and this would probably be a nice solid read again.
Comments from author:
Before I answer this review maybe even dare I say flame, I would like to point out that I did warn people, female/female and questionable underage pairings. So you can't exactly say it wasn't already morally suspect.

Our world is filled with a lot of horrible things, doesn't mean we do horrible things. The kids sent themselves, the best the parents could do was try to make sure they stayed safe. They could have said no you can't go, but that might not have stopped the kids besides Rose Lillian and Lenora got a perfectly nice education on a different type of magic. Nothing sinful or immoral about that. Gabrielle found a nice couple of girls, she doesn't hurt them or anything and treats them as people. Also nothing sinful or immoral about it. Would like to point out that house elves are slaves so it's not like Harry Potter a children's book doesn't mention it. It's a fact of history and depending on where you go in the world life.

As for my version of Willow being sick and depraved I'll have to agree to disagree, she's had around 13 years to come to grips with loving more than one person with her whole heart. She's a bit darker than the show's Willow because she stepped up and moved away from the I'm sorry I'm a slayer we don't hurt people thing, into the judging someone on their actions not on the this guy does or doesn't have a soul or what not. She's not a champion she's just a demon fighter. She's also fighting a war, she doesn't have time to treat her kids with kid gloves, not when they are the next generation of warriors. Shoot me if you think that's depraved and sick, hell it probably is. They willingly fight demons, not exactly a safe occupation. Gabrielle and Leo are both combat trained and have at that point had 6 years or so of magical training. And duels at least a few times a week. They can take care of themselves. Is it a risk sure but everything is a risk. Toss in the fact that all of the kids can teleport and there is much less risk than you would first think.

As for the flow and such, I try. As for failing at life, that would depend on who you ask. I'm a relatively sane person that enjoys pushing boundaries in my writing. As for redoing some chapters, I really can't see that happening other than for grammar corrections or such things. I've had enough people tell me it was interesting that I'm content to let it rest. Not every story, or every chapter is always to our liking. Not that you care and not that it matters to you but chapter 28 picks up back home again. I can understand the sentiment though, I've had various stories I've been reading change from something I enjoyed to something that left me thinking that some drunk idiot stole their password.
Review By [DCG] • Date [27 May 09] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilog and thoughts." from morgannac
Review:
I didn't care for this at all. I liked it at the start with the kids starting at Hogwarts but I did get the whole sex thing 1 - they are half-siblings - yuck
2 - they are 11 years old - yuck

The pokegirl chapter were horrible. It for me did not continue the plot at all. What happen with the hair in the crystal that almost killed Gabriella? Isn't Harry supose to kill voldymort?

The ending was too quick.

What is Gabriella?
Comments from author:
As for Harry killing Voldemort that was what the prophecy said, but we all know that Xander screws up things like that. As for what exact Gabrielle is, she's a magic user. Much like her mother only a bit darker. As for the hair you're right I didn't resolve it. Giles was still looking into that. As for the plot it did contribute to the plot in a round about way, it was a place for them to dump the death eaters that they captured, it was also their vacation.
Review By [morgannac] • Date [27 Apr 09] • Rating [2 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Home again." from SamDragon
Review:
Totally out there and wonderfully so. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks, I enjoy the story. Having a set up where I can mix in just about anything is a lot of fun.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [18 Mar 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Raid the evil base" from Wolfkin
Review:
Not a crazy ride, a fun one. Weird, but fun. It was nice to see Leo take center stage for a while, since it's usually Rose and/or the twins. Are all the PokeGirls going home with them?

Great job with this little "diversion". ^_^ Can't wait to see where you're going next!
Comments from author:
Heck yeah they are taking their girls home with them. Why do you think they tossed all of those death eaters in to start? :) They needed a balance of life to be able to take something out. Rose's powers work differently than Dawn's. I had a lot of fun writing Leo. I'm hoping that he can steal some more screen time. It's fun to play the hero and anti-hero off each other. He has a faith in humanity that Gabrielle has lost. It makes for an interesting time writing.

As for next probably back to Hogwarts. :) But I'm not sure. I should know before too much longer though.
Review By [Wolfkin] • Date [4 Feb 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pokegirls the other white meat" from Wolfkin
Review:
First, thanks for the fast updates, they make my day! ^_^

The pokegirl thing is a little weird, but very good weird and I rather like it! On the other hand, and I hesitate to ask, you understand, but what are the others doing? Where did Rose send them?

Keep the good stuff a'comin', okay? Can't wait to see where you go from here.

Oh, and I agree with Lumly... Man, what a jinx that could be! ;-)
Comments from author:
Reviews make my day to.

Yes pokegirls are a bit weird. It's an interesting weird though. The others went to another part of the poke world. Sadly my ideas for that took a while to firm up because of the nature of the pokegirl project. In case you didn't know it's sort of like picturing a whole bunch of writers working on a single world. Certain parts are released for the public and certain parts are still semi controlled by their author. It would be like borrowing one of your ideas... in other words I was working out the details and asking permission.

That being said I'll work on adding them into the mix soon.
Review By [Wolfkin] • Date [19 Jan 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pokegirls the other white meat" from lumly
Review:
“It can’t be worse than the last store.”

you realize of course in the fine Scooby tradition she just jinxed the the hell out of it...

though I'm not sure HOW the next store could be worse...
Comments from author:
It would be a little hard to stop that one. But hey I'm sure there is a way. Thank you for the review.
Review By [lumly] • Date [19 Jan 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pokegirl what?" from Bunney
Review:
The shit you come up with amazes me....lol

Later and Love
Bunney
Comments from author:
I am glad that I can amuse. I realized that I needed a break from Hogwarts for a spell and I thought maybe it would be interesting to see what would happen if they were left to their own devices. I'll see where my muse takes me.
Thanks again for the review.
Review By [Bunney] • Date [11 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Like pulling a rabbit out of a hat, only better." from Bunney
Review:
ooooh this is an interesting turn of events :)

Later and Love
Bunney
Comments from author:
I figured I couldn't leave Dumbledore traveling all alone for eternity. Glad you liked the chapter.
Review By [Bunney] • Date [15 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Attack of the snowball" from snipehunt
Review:
This is great. Does Buffy know that Willow, Dawn, Hermione, Harry etc have all made themselves immortal?
Buffy and Xander becoming long lived should be great news since her sister won't have to watch her grow old and die..

Still don't understand why Ginny doesn't get the power up.

"Who wants to live forever
Who wants to live forever?

Who dares to love forever?
When love must die"
Comments from author:
Yeah Buffy knows for the rest. As for Buffy being long lived, I'm going with the idea that she came back from the dead a little less than human, mix in the demonic energy from the slayer and presto.

Ginny isn't going to age and die an old lady but she isn't as immortal as Harry.


Thanks for the review.
Review By [snipehunt] • Date [27 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Firsts" from Bunney
Review:
wow...ummm...neat :)

Later and Love
Bunney
Review By [Bunney] • Date [5 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Firsts" from Wolfkin
Review:
Boy, it's just "Beat Gaby with a stick week", idn't it? I hadn't realized she liked Trista that much.

Good chapter. I liked it lots, even though Gaby takes another hit here. Maybe Sylvie can come for a visit and cheer her up?

*hands over more food for the plot bunny*
Comments from author:
I was reminded the other day how emotional people can be. How little things can spiral out of control even for adults. I do like Gaby, even if my muse has tossed her a few lemons lately. The reaction had less to do with Trista and more to do with her sister. It was driven home that her sister has a life with parts that don't involve her. As for Sylvie, it's a good guess.

Watches the plot bunnies devour the food.
Review By [Wolfkin] • Date [3 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Night time wandering" from Wolfkin
Review:
Hey, another great chapter, though I am curious as to why you're following HBP and killing Dumbledore. Or is he going to fake his death and go behind the scenes? I guess we'll find out relatively soon, neh?

Gotta admit, I was excited that you'd posted 4 chapters, well, until I noticed it was the same chapter posted four times! ;) Seriously, I think the site hiccuped or something.

As for Bunney's comment about Gaby getting hurt last chapter, I didn't like it either, though I agree with you that the bad guys must sometimes win a few little ones so kicking their asses later is that much sweeter. Also, and forgive me for saying so, but Gaby was getting quite the case of "Superman(or Supergirl, in her case) Syndrome". It seemed to me she was starting to think she was unbeatable and, as much as I hate to see one of the kids get hurt(story wise or real life, for that matter), she did need to be knocked down a peg or two. That said, I'm looking forward to seeing what Willow does to whoever hurt her daughter! ^_^

Anyway, keep the great work a'comin', okay?
*sets down a case of nibblements for the plot buny*
Comments from author:
As for Hbp I'm sticking with it in so much as the explanation for the curse, it's going to kill him at some point. As for finding out what happens yes. I'm extremely sorry about the 4 chapters posted glitch. I updated during and after the site back up. Not sure that was what caused it but grr.

Gaby is rather powerful, but that doesn't mean she can't get hurt. I imagine it was a learning experience for her. Hopefully it curbs the feelings of invincibility. As for what Willow does to the person/group responsible... well it can't be much worse than what Xander is planning if he finds them.

I look at Gabrielle's trials as a learning experience. The more she goes through the more she learns and changes.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Wolfkin] • Date [30 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dead man walking" from Bunney
Review:
yippee kiy a MUTHA-fER! LOL, I am not happy about Gabby ouchies but hey waht can you do right?

Later and Love
Bunney
Comments from author:
Yeah well no one really is happy about Gaby getting hurt. But sometimes what has to happen isn't always what you would like to happen. (even in a story:) ) The bad guys sometimes do put up a fight and can cause serious issues. That's the way the cookie crumbles. The scoobies in my story are slightly better in that they will learn from their mistakes. Thanks for the review, it helps fuel the creative process.
Review By [Bunney] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Not Rated
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