cool

Hmm... Nice. It needs more though. Perhaps not in this story, but the next. How does this "new creed" affect Xander when he's "off duty"? When he doesn't have to worry about protecting people? How does it change Xander period? How does the rest of the group react to the new Xander? How does the answer to The Judge change?

Excellent job on your first time out. The fact that you were able to do it so well, without a single word of speech makes it all the better.

um... Wow...that was good...realy good... why isn't there more? The good ones always stop to soon

Good. Very Good. Another idea for Xander Auditore de Firenze.

I just found this story. Its a lot of fun. Xander with the Skills of an Assassin, Cool. I'ed happily read the sequel.

Excellent!

...Whoa. This was absolutely great. I really have to applaud you for it. I love the way you worded everything - it made visualization easy - and you merged Xander's character with the... mood, for lack of a better word, of Assassin's Creed expertly and without making either half seem lacking. I can easily see this being expanded upon - or even a new story line with the same crossover - and that you'd do wonderfully.

good job.

Assassin's Creed is one of favorite video games and I like how you made Xand into one the perfect weapons. So how bout a squeal

Well done, with a nice sense of pacing and mood. And that was a killer last line.

The action is fantastically written and flows really well.
Well done for a first time.
Are we gonna get a continuation? An extension? I love this as a one-shot, but my head is screaming: MORE!

Awesome.

How about a prologue? Did Altair, on finding out he was a costume, sneak into Ethan's shop and do something to make Xander's new skills a bit more permanent?

Fluid fighting skills. I'm wary of seeing more of this fic's future, as a super-skilled Xander out of balance to the threats they face might be uninteresting... Though I guess it's really all in how you handle the dynamic between him and the rest of the universe.

Well-written scene with good movement.

The 'Hide-in-plain-sight' creed is good advice for say Los Angeles or Cleveland... maybe even Africa if you sent him that route... But it is a bit much for Sunnydale where everyone's pretty much apathetic/oblivious/one of the bad guys with access to a high school yearbook anyway.

I could see this leading to a very AU season 3 where he ends the major threat early and leaves town for a bit in search of bigger challenges - but how would he square that with protecting his family...


Ah well, nice day, hope to see more stories - looks like you have a good start :)

Very Cool, I love it. Great work for a first fic. Hope to see a second.

I liked your story a lot! I would love to read more of this world you've created. Excellent first venture.