Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from citymouse
I know this is probably abandoned, but on the off chance the author is still hanging around: squeeeee!
I liked how you avoided many of the most common pitfalls of this type of crossovers, such as Dawn having super powers, or getting somebody immediately attracted to her, often to the detriment of a well established or even canonical pairing. Bravo. Niblet's first steps at mutant high read believably, and I would dearly like to find out how it would unfold from here. (is that who I think it is banging at the door?)
Comments from author:
I have good news for you! It is not fully abandoned! I originally had the next chapter all written out and lost it in a computer crash. Then I decided to rewrite/edit the story when I realized I rushed to a few points before I wanted to and missed a few along the way as well. Unfortunately, this coincided with many life things. I haven't touched the story in quite a while, but I fully plan to start it up again. I haven't given up hope on this story, so you shouldn't either. Keep an eye out for a Family Bonds - Rewritten.
Review By [citymouse
] • Date [22 Apr 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from Vickzie
Omg that's not good! Cool story though.
Review By [Vickzie
] • Date [17 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from hanahanachan
tehe Scott's in for a rude awakening when he finds out what went down in Sunnydale, maybe he'll loosen up a bit.. I'm hoping you'll update soon so Spike can make his big entrance!! Maybe Connor can go to the school with dawn too, keep an eye on her and all that.. Anyway, update soon!
Review By [hanahanachan
] • Date [9 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from Drix
Please please please tell me you have more planned for this? Cause you left us at a cliffie and I'm pretty sure that was Spike's voice, and I've so been looking forward to his appearance.
Review By [Drix
] • Date [28 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from Charlotte
Am really hoping Spike is the one at the door.
Review By [Charlotte
] • Date [3 Feb 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from firedrakegirl
More pleease!!!!!! This is great!
Review By [firedrakegirl
] • Date [13 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from TTrunks
This is a cool story I can't wait for more.
However as for the not having Dawn have a power. I'm not saying I don't understand yrou point of view, but you could have her have a power similar to Wanda or the Scarlett witch. Her powers aren't' really powers, she uses chaos magic. So maybe Dawn can use magic or something?
I cant' wait to see Spike fight Saber tooth over Dawn. That woudl be a fun fight sense Spike sees Dawn as a creature that needs to be protected and Alphas tend to protect things. Also I'd bet on Spike, but both are blond immortals who have been fighting and killing for centuries.
Review By [TTrunks
] • Date [28 Jul 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from yakoba
I love your potrayal of dawn. can't wait for more!
keep up the good stuff
Review By [yakoba
] • Date [27 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Food Fight!" from Chikageko
While I can understand not wanting to give dawn Mutant powers Dawn has a variety of powers and skills throughout the TV and Comic series.
A natural gift for languages and apperantly an ace student before learning of her existance as the key dawn was also quoted to have been "Made from the slayer" by the monks of dagon. This translates into her charactor later in seasons 6 7 and 8 where she proves herself, while not more than human, capable of handeling herself in battle with a variety of weapons, per preferance appearing to be swords.
And let's certianly not forget magic. I can list a dozen, both desasterous and otherwise, examples from the comics but I think the best one to make my point actually comes from season 5 episode 17 "forever". Necromancy is, even in cannon buffyverse, horribly and disasterously complicated magic, requiring both large amounts of skill and power to perform. Despite all of this Dawn manages to pull of a necromantic ritual to summon her mother with little apperant effort. While we never actually got to see the result of her spell the impression is given that it worked properly before she realized it was a mistake and reversed it. I don't know if you've read the comics but there they state and sometimes show dawn being taught to use spells and all Wiki's have her listed as an apprentice witch, though her instruction moves along slowly due to her tendancy to overload spells causing them to fail explosivly.
You put her in a real magic shop last chapter; you connect the dots to us giving you the powers-puppy-dog-eyes.
Beyond all of that your story is very well written thus far. My only complaint is about the legnth of most of the chapters. Personally, I think they're small but beggers can't be chosers. I've read thousands of fanfictions so I enjoy finding quality ones every once in a while. ...even if they are short.
Review By [Chikageko
] • Date [21 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from calikocat
So who's at the door? Spike maybe? That would make sense with sunrise so close. ^^ And why was Dawn targeted...or were they just after Xavier's kids in general? So many questions...
Review By [calikocat
] • Date [19 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from nomanic
I love it!!!
"Zut" while technically meaning "damn" in french is sort of a wussy swear. I would be like saying "darn!" or "drat!" A better french swear word would be "merde". It's one of my favorites. XP
Review By [nomanic
] • Date [24 Apr 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from Damia
Ok, I love the fic, but you take SOOOO long to update. It makes me want to cry.
.... not that I'm really one to talk ....
Review By [Damia
] • Date [31 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from chrysanne
Oh my god, please let it be Spike!!!!
Review By [chrysanne
] • Date [21 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from AngelBlack
This is really, really amazing! I definetely can't wait until your next update, and especially how Mr. Billy Idol Stole My Look will fit into it.
Review By [AngelBlack
] • Date [20 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Night Out (part 2)" from manic
Oh, crappers. And I wonder who's at the door? Thanks for the update. I look forward to more.
Review By [manic
] • Date [13 Jan 09] • Not Rated