Good story. More Please!!!!!!

Pretty interesting so far! Really love the idea of Dawn and Spike in the Anita Blake world... I look forward to hopefully, reading more!!

Good one! How much trouble??? The mind just boggles at the thought. I'm just sorry that it looks like you aren't continuing this story.

How much trouble they can get into in a few days? {snicker} Oh, let us count the ways. More, more, more, please. Pretty please? {bouncie} This is a wonderful beginning, and I can't wait to find out what happens next. Is there any chance of getting more chapters on this story sometime soon? I know Real Life can leave stories in limbo, but I hope that things have gotten better in the last year and you've had a chance to work on more chapters even if you haven't had a chance to post them yet. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm

Famous last words.

very Very good! I'll definitely be looking forward to the rest of this story.

Glad to see an update to this. Spike's behaving himself remarkably well... I wonder how long that can last? ;)

How much trouble indeed LOL

I love it
chaos.

In my opinion, your story is getting better with each update. You are also doing a wonderful job with both Spike's and Dawn's characters and I can't wait to see what chaos the two of them will wreak in LA before they hit the road. I wonder if Angelus is the Master of LA? Please keep updating as I really want to see where you are taking Our Heroes.

Wow famous last words. Cant wait for more. Update soon!

This is a really interesting take on this type of crossover

I think this story needs a little polishing. The dialogue is almost there, but seems off, almost as if all of the characters are robot versions of themselves. Although I admire your attempt to get each character's voice right, somehow, they don't even sound like actual people to me. For instance, you have Spike calling Angel Peaches ALL THE TIME. While he did use that term as a derrogatory nickname, it wasn't the kind of thing the real Spike said five times in a minute, and it wasn't the only name by which he referred to Angel. Going over the whole thing with a fine toothed comb and adding in some punctuation in dialogue would help, too, as well as more non-dialogue description. I think this is a promising start, but it needs some work.

(After all how much trouble could a vampire half his age and a 15-year-old girl get into in a few days?)

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Good chapter, only thing that struck me as odd was that Spike and Dawn spoke a bit freely in front of a strange Vamp. Really looking forward to seeing what kind of mayhem those two can cause.

Wispr

Very nice way to get them into Anita's universe.

Wispr