This is a nicely integrated crossover. You can easily believe that Dawn wound up in the next world over. And I loved that description of the "Powers that be lazy". {snicker} More, please. I hope your schedule and muse will allow you to write and post more chapters sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm
Review By [zafaran] • Date [24 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Great chapter! It was very interesting seeing the whole Sunnydale era from Dawn's perspective. I especially loved Dawn's idea to kill Sauron using buckets of Visine, and Dawn's grousing over Aragorn's Buffy admiration. Doncha just love sibling rivalry? ;)
You are doing a great job with the fine line between Dawn being lumped in with these people/elves and thus having to trust them by necessity and yet her not knowing them well enough to be friends yet, though I am sure that is coming. But I still want to strangle Theoden. He is a sexist buttpipe, and I sincerely hope that Legolas puts his arrows to good use and shoots Theoden in the aforementioned hiney. *nods solemnly*.
In regards to your previous message; you should SO give her a puppy/warg. That would seriously make me giggle. ;)
Anyway; I must be getting to bed as it is 6:30 in the morning and I have no idea why I am still awake, but please keep up the great work; I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Review By [Melli] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Yay for adding the stories *grins* great chapter. It was just what I had in mind, it introduced them to Dawn's world, showed the skeptics what an ass-kicker Dawn is and helped everyone get closer. Thanks for indulging me *grins* I can't wait to see what happens next.
Review By [moonstarsfu] • Date [23 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
I liked how you had Dawn instinctively calling out for Buffy here and how she imagines she's heard Buffy calling out to her. Also nice that she and Haldir saved each other and her interaction with both Gimli and Gandalf has been fun. And more good lines like wondering where the killer jewel is.
I liked too, how in this last chapter you showed her realising she's vulnerable in that she's always been protected and looked after and never had to look after herself. It's a nice counter-balance to the earlier chapters where, while she's plucky and determined, may have come off as just a little more aggressive and confident than we are used to seeing her.
Still enjoying this and love the last line.
Comments from author:
This review made me smile in particular because you noticed how Dawn was a lot more aggresive than she probably should be. That'll be explained later in a very dramatic outburst. LOL
Review of chapter "You're all going to die" from Nosi
Review:
Man, have you been busy since I was last on. It's a pity that all the slayers couldn't suddenly turn up just in time for the battle, so Hama would have to eat his words for saying Women are inherently weaker than men.
I liked that you made Dawn's big rallying speech be drawn from many of Buffy's. "I think they'd listen to a fish right now if it were offering words of encouragement and comfort” was a great line, as was her reference to an entire army of shiny blond hair.
There's a few typos in there, but nothing serious, and if you've been writing at 4 in the morning, hardly surprising. This story is going very well so far.
Comments from author:
yeah, poor Hama doesn't know what he's in for by telling Dawn that she's naturally weaker than a man LOL. Thanks for reading!
