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Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from KarlStahl
Review:
Good set-up, interesting beginning. I like the interaction between Lara and Wesley so far.

Keep it up, please.
Review By [KarlStahl] • Date [22 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Silentbobfoley
Review:
Nice work, although even though she has that knife i think that Lara would be better armed especially in LA.

Can't wait to see more tho, Wesley Demon hunter is always worth reading.
Review By [Silentbobfoley] • Date [21 Jun 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from martelcris
Review:
Lara introduction to things that go bump....lots of fun !!!!

I'll be tuned !!

PS: I should point to the fact that I asked for Lara Croft (better rack) not A.J. in my precedent review, but if you can't do that A.J. will do ! :-))))))))
Review By [martelcris] • Date [21 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Greywizard
Review:
Just stumbled across this and I want to tell you that I like it a great deal.

You've set up an interesting meeting between Wes and Lara, and I'd like to see more.

Wes is pretty much my favorite character among the Angel group, and I always enjoy seeing stories where he's portrayed as the competent and resourceful individual that he developed into over the course of the series.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [21 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from wolfman
Review:
I really like this story. Great start. Please do continue as soon as possible.
Review By [wolfman] • Date [19 Jun 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)jedibuttercup
Review:
I love the idea of any Wesley centric story, especially with Lara added in, and the scene you set here was intriguing; I hope you write more! They would play off each other really well.

On a more critical note, I see one of your other reviewers also commented on "pot plants". I'm fairly certain there's a cultural thing going on there; to an American reader "pot plants" equals "marijuana plants", not "plants in pots", which we usually write instead as "potted plants", since "potted" here does not equal "drunk". If you really *DID* mean marijuana plants, you might want to make that clearer so more helpful critics don't pile on the bandwagon.
Comments from author:
Yep it is a cultural thing. Thanks for the review. Have added an AN for those who don't come from the Uk.
Review By [(Current Donor)jedibuttercup] • Date [19 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from YademosEbyam
Review:
It's a good prologue, if a bit short. (Still, much better than an extended one loaded with obvious filler.) Excellent visuals BTW; some of the best I've read in quite a while. Please continue; cliffies are nice, but there really isn't enough backstory to set one up just yet.
Review By [YademosEbyam] • Date [19 Jun 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dreamweaver
Review:
Umm. I dunno about whether or not you should continue, but I do think that you need to make a correction. Unless, of course, you actually MEANT to say it. I'm talking about a line you wrote near the top of the chapter.

You really should change that to "pots of plants" or "potted plants" instead of the "pot plants" you've got there now.
Comments from author:
I meant to say pot plants.
Review By [Dreamweaver] • Date [19 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Thedruid
Review:
Yes, continue.
Review By [Thedruid] • Date [19 Jun 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from martelcris
Review:
Ok this is a little freaky...my surname is Martelli but unfortunately Lara Croft isn't trying to found me although ( I'm very happy about this ) being not dead, like your character, is a very good thing !

I forgive you for killing my homonymous but NOT for sending Lara at HIS door, I will be very grateful if you send her at MY door, I promise lots and lots of enthusiastic reviews !! :-))
For now...good work and I'll be tuned!!!!
Comments from author:
Yes of course i'm able to get Angelina Jolie to go to your door :D

Glad you liked!
Review By [martelcris] • Date [19 Jun 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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