This was a great start to what could have been a great story

nice work

Thank you. I love this story.

This was certainly interesting. Do you intend to expand upon it?

Nope that was a one-shot bunny. If anyone wants to expand on the idea all they have to do is let me know.

Ohhhh wow!!!

::snickering:: Now that's just cool. Alan Quartermain is Xander's grandfather. Those skills would definitely be of the good when living on the Hellmouth.
I'm surprised that he didn't "deal" with Willow (one way or another) when he found out what she was doing. He's not a doormat, so why let her get away with it?

Please, please, please write more about Xander's adventures - it would be awesome if he got to work side by side with his grandfather (and maybe even some of the people in the League of Extraordinary Gentlemen -- Mina should still be around, at the very least).

Thanks for sharing your story, it was a blast!

MavenAlysse

Solid story and interesting concept. Only real beef or negative is that it needs fleshing out as it feels a little abrupt. Would have prefered some form of confrontation, either between Xander and the Scoobs or Quartermain and the gang. Where is Giles in all this? Again, a great idea and you have the points there, but the meat that bridges those points is a little too lean. Would be really interested if you either worked again with this concept or further delved either into the past or the arrival of Xander in Quartermain's world. A great pickup might be his renewed involvement when they call the slayers in the fight with the first and a real dressing down by Quartermain for their presumption and arrogance in the matter. Xander and Quartermain would be aware due to their role with Africa and when whomever is delegated to go to Africa to recruit the newly called would run into and have to deal with the possibly hostile duo. Don't know, but it just seems that there is definately some mileage left to draw from this tangent you created. Will hope for the best, but again thanks for the great idea.

I would love for you to continue this story. I wouldnt mind back story even. kizuna

Awwww! Don't leave it there! The story has so many possibilities!

Needs more to the story, but it reads like a really great bunny!

Even if he's estranged from Willow and Buffy, I'd hate to see him miss being there for Faith, Cordy, Dawn, Mrs. Summers, etc. so I hope he's only going to Africa for the summer and will return for the next school year. (He's gotta look 1000 times better in the speedo after being Quartermain and living rough in Africa to build up more muscles!) Does he have any of the hyena left too? Will he get anything from the Mermaid taint? Will either of those affect anything/make him even stronger?

Kinda bleh!
Telling Rayne everything about who he's dressing as - check.
Special enchantment just for Xander - check.
Willow and Buffy are now shit post-Halloween and not worthy to lick Xander's boots - check.
Killing off Spike - check.
Reads like a outline instead of a story - check.

It's made of old cliches and not much else.

I suggest reworking and and finding something more to put into it beside a tired and stale soup of cliches.

Interesting set-up. I'd love to see a sequel, though. Quartermain is a bad-ass, and a fairly human one, even!

Well written but it read more as an outline that requires filling.

Please expand.

Thanks

Lee

Hmm .. more of a short "prologue" ... or outline .. could be used as a very good basis for a long term story line...

Excellent story. Now I have to find a full length story with Xander as a Quartermain.

Quite nice, quite nice indeed. I enjoyed reading the Quartermain books when I was younger. This would be wonderful if fleshed out.