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Review of chapter "Goodbyes and Souls" from fourmenandanelephant
Xander being petty and strange with his reasons for Dawn disappearing again into the mysterious Cosmos really doesn't work. Xander got left by the wayside as a character in later BTVS seasons mostly due to his absurd relationship with Anya and becoming the comic fodder in a story about whiny and entitled adolescent and twenty something girls. He should laugh in both of their faces and say something like the following "A little angst was the least Buffy deserved for murder by omission so she could get that self righteous coward back that year hell in any competent military unit she would have been at least arrested for dereliction of duty and if enough other charges could be found thrown in prison for years or stuck up against a wall and shot, I honestly didn't think Willow could succeed with that spell after failing once already and I wasn't about to screw with Buffy's mental state once she was finally ready to do her job when the whole planet was on the line but the idea that your stupid enough to think the "powers that be" are giving you the complete picture about what I've done the last decade fighting along side my friends shows your a hell of a lot more gullible and stupid than I thought you were. You've been used as a tool by a bunch of meddling and hypocritical false gods, instead of being allowed truly choose your own destiny. You seem to have this idea your special and irreplaceable guess what princess the people in that expedition neither needed you or Ronon to survive out there. You just as easily could have lived here on Earth and grown into someone a hell of a lot more valuable and skilled than you are now just thru your wits and overall intelligence alone and still made it to the Pegasus Galaxy if you needed to be there no your suffering from a massive mix of PTSD, Stockholm Syndrome and prideful arrogance. Have I at times been a hypocrite yes, but I've never given up on my friends and I don't approve of them being used as tools. Remember, man was made in God's image and women was designed to serve him as a tool/servant and honestly that what Slayers do your sent out as blood sacrifices to appease some sort of balance, but your not necessary to the survival of this planet or universe either while for the most part men still control this world and most others. I wasn't "Chosen" or forced by circumstance chip cough chip to fight but I've never given up or backed down which is more than I can say for either you your sister and your precious pet vampires...."
Review By [fourmenandanelephant] • Date [3 Sep 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back and Counting" from SamuraiSky
I have a hard time putting good books down. I started this story on Monday, it is now Thursday. I greatly enjoyed this story. A few typos, but well written. Thank you for a wonderful read.
Review By [SamuraiSky] • Date [27 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back and Counting" from RaeJoy
I've read the whole series, but this is still my favourite. Cheers.
Review By [RaeJoy] • Date [30 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Intro Atlantis" from maxthehobbit
Hmm think you need to check your use of weather -- most should be whether, sounds the same, but very different meanings, but doesn't take much away from the story.

Using foreign languages doesn't add much to the story and I doubt many people are anal enough to look it up, especially since English keyboards don't have those 'special' characters.

I did however rate your story with a 10 so far because it is original and entertaining. I've never seen Stargate Atlantis, but the characters seem east to follow. I like it so far.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [16 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back and Counting" from jimk
It was ok, wasn't really my style but it was an interesting idea. For whatever reason, to me there just didn't seem to be much of a story. It told about events but for me at least they never seemed to flow together into a story about anything. Parts of it were good, it had a great premise and overall it wasn't bad which why I rated it a 5.

The other issue which was relatively minor is that I thought Ronan was ridiculously overpowered. You had him him holding his own with slayers which made no sense at all. Ronan is human with no mystical or other enhancements. Having him hold his own and often beat slayers seems to miss the whole point of what a slayer is.
Review By [jimk] • Date [14 Feb 11] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back and Counting" from Mordare
I loved this story & look forward to the others to come. Keep up the great work.
Review By [Mordare] • Date [14 Sep 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kiss and E-mail" from lucyferr
These were good bits:

You, my dear silent sir, are the most physically vocal man I have ever met.

“For somebody who has grand plans for everybody else,” Ronon said as he lifted her chin, “you don’t seem to have any for yourself.”
"… at one point I wanted to be a dancer…I would never admit it to her but I wanted be like my sister. Thing is I couldn’t ice skate a lick, but I loved the way dancers moved. I wanted to be that graceful and athletic.”

“You need to calm down a little,” Dawn said as he stopped. She waved away his next words, “As someone who has often been on the side of needing to be rescued. To save her you need to be thinking clearly. Worry will keep you awake but only thinking it through will save her.”

“she has seen so much death and destruction for one her age but she doesn’t let it control her. She makes fun of it in fact. Like Jack, she acts like experience just makes it a better joke.”
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kat-tails and Kirsan Fever" from lucyferr
“Oh! That, um. I realized that for Angel it was the ultimate redemption. To be human meant that his sins had been forgiven. There is a reality where he became human through demon blood and stayed that way with my sister. In mine he realized that they would both die and that he hadn’t earned it, and he set back the clock, no one was to know but him. I found out in one of my dreams.
“For Spike though… he wanted proof that he was good enough. That he wasn’t just an awful poet, that he wasn’t a disappointment as a vampire or as a man. For awhile he thought he had it, Buffy’s love, when he found out he didn’t…he lost it. He went searching for a way to end her, if he couldn’t have her no one would. Instead he got his soul, and he felt more unworthy than he ever had before.
“I can’t honestly say they were good men, because I didn’t have many examples to go by. But they were great Champions of Good, they both protected my sister and her friends…Spike was even pushed off a tower trying to save me. I think they did the best with what they were given, even if they took the long way to get there. And I think that counts more than anything else.”
“When you said you didn’t have a lot of examples of good men… There are a lot of them here. They are fighters and fight for good. They also know how to be more than just fighters. They are good men.” Ronon finished the longest speech she thought he’d ever given, and walked towards the exit.

This is a really cool analysis
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Month and Knives" from lucyferr
“What? Oh! Nothing,” Dawn said a small smile on her lips, “I was just thinking I’m as bad as my sister… only good things she ever got from guys were weapons. A lot.”

Good one - her interaction with Ronon, and Roddy too, is intriguing.

She and Glinda remind me of Midshipwoman/Admiral Honor Harrington and Nimitz
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Points and Explains" from lucyferr
“And here you come to tell me that not only is the city alive but she doesn’t even like me. That I’m someone who talks too much and she would like me to just shut up.”

Awww... I liked the talk she has with McKay... would be nice if Candy could find a way to talk with Roddy directly
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Glowing and Believing" from lucyferr
Jack smiled slightly, “she reminds me of when I first met Carter.”
Daniel simply looked at his friend. “Is that a good thing?”
Jack thought about it. “I don’t think there is a woman alive who shouldn’t want to make that kind of first impression.”

good of Jack to say that
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Plead and Heal" from lucyferr
we would only verify weather or not


‘But you are!’ Candrima protested, ‘the Amazon, Healer, and Tiny Medic have all gone out of their way to help you. Even the Sad Leader has helped you.’

I like the names - bit surprised that Carson is called Healer but Keller is not, though

“Please, stay. I don’t know how to set bones, except my own. Could you straighten his hand?”

good that Jen doesnt feel entirely useless
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Storytelling and Disbelief" from lucyferr
‘Won’t let you go,’ Candrima told her stubbornly, and Dawn saw in her mind’s eye a small child clinging to the leg of a leaving parent.

awww - lovely image there

ps - I hope you, like any true Granger fan, despise Ron! :-)
Review By [lucyferr] • Date [30 Jun 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Month and Knives" from TheMaskedLurker

You keep using "bow"
When it seems it should be "bo".
It's quite confusing.
Review By [TheMaskedLurker] • Date [26 Oct 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back and Counting" from Obsidian
awesome story thanks!!!
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [18 Jan 09] • Not Rated
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