just the Czech language doesn`t make much sense (I can tell, it`s my mother tongue :) So I`m sending a corrected version (in case you are interested :)
the first quote : I must admit, that I didn`t really undrestand, what was the meaning, but if it`s something like Hello, do you have any question? the translation would be Ahoj, chcete se na něco zeptat? /Ahoj, máte nějaké dotazy? or What would you like to know? Ahoj, co chcete vědět?
the second quote: Mluvíte česky? Kdo jste? Jak to, že mluvíte pozemskými jazyky? Kolik jich znáte? Or something like this :)
- I know, it`s actually pointless to correct it, because nobody out there understands it :) Have a nice day!
Review By [sigrida] • Date [13 Dec 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sequence and Interference" from RachelK
I liked how you showed Dawn's reaction to Earth-plus-deamons, and that she was able to explain it. Less sure why you brought Willow in at the same time.
Review of chapter "Energy and Drinking" from RachelK
Review:
I like the relationship development part of the story, but find references to epidoes that i haven't seen in para-retelling au/telling hard to follow. I'm getting the gist of it , but not the deeper meaning, necessarily.
Review By [James] • Date [5 Dec 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Terror and Laughter" from RachelK
Review:
Well... I'm not exactly sure where you're going with the strengths and weekness... but the interpersonal, friendship and relationship moments tend to be good.
Review of chapter "Glowing and Believing" from RachelK
Review:
Okay. I was holding back. This story is officially the definition of a Mary Sue story.... but I don't hate it. I might later, if Dawn does everything and everyone loves her... even if she does have angst. Dawn was created as a powerful character, so I am less likley to be upset. There is good plot and dialog. But with so much power, difficult to see where you will take the story from here. Stylistically quite nice, so I am going to hang in a bit.
James
