It is a fairly good story so far, and in chapter 4 just begins to get up to speed. It would be very nice if you could find the inspiration to continue.
Review By [Malu] • Date [18 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
I have to concur with the many folks who feel that Willow is too savvy to infodump about the First Evil, Slayers, etc. when it's not necessary or appropriate to share that way.
Review By [orangemike] • Date [30 Nov 09] • Not Rated
I noticed that you haven't updated this in awhile, but I only just found it - so I just wanted to say I really enjoyed reading what's been posted so far. It's a great premise for a crossover and your handle on the characters (both NCIS and BtVS) is solid and well executed.
Perhaps Willow didn't need to give the entire history in one sitting, but then she IS Willow, so it would fit that a bit of 'Willow-babble' is in order. Can't help laughing at her 'campfire' comment given what Tony calls his team meetings in Gibbs's absence.
Anyway, points for originality and great writing. I can't help wondering what Willow's reaction would be if, on meeting the mysterious missing Watcher, said Watcher demands that Willow show her knickers so that Mrs Mallard can "assess her character"... *snort*.
Review By [tigerlily] • Date [7 Aug 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
You had a great idea, a good start and interesting development going for you. Unfortunately, you sent Gibbs off to Mexico and dropped the story at a very awkward and unsatisfying spot.
Could you do something with it, or at least re-do the ending to leave it at a better pause?
Comments from author:
I didn't send Gibbs off to Mexico. He did that to himself.
Review By [Dianasis] • Date [30 Jun 09] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review By [DawnDreamer] • Date [1 Feb 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Beginning" from physicsteach
Review:
Very interesting start; a bit awkward with the back-story of NCIS, in the way cross-over back-stories tend to be. The choice of setting the story while Gibbs is "retired" in Mexico is curious - is it about putting Dinozzo in the lead, getting Gibbs out of the way, or some other reason?
I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
It's mostly about me trying to avoid figuring out if I could write Gibbs well. He seemed the toughest, and since there was a spot in canon without him....
Review By [physicsteach] • Date [7 Dec 08] • Not Rated
::Gives the plot bunny some Black Forest cake with extra chocolate::
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [21 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Very interesting start. I thought the NCIS guys took the whole story too quickly as fact. But maybe Abbie has been talking. Lol! Is Abbie going to be a Slayer? That would also be ... interesting. Lol!
Comments from author:
Maybe they didn't. Maybe they think she's a crazy person. Wasn't much reaction there.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [20 Nov 08] • Not Rated
Dianasis
