While your ideas are fun, what you are giving us is a plot summary not an actual story. The whole thing feels really rushed, which is a shame because the ideas would be worth flushing out. We need to actually hear the negotiation that gets all the major players back together. Not just be told it happens. How does Faith convince them she has superpowers? How does Andrew convince them he's a mage? These people are not likely to believe "magic" just because some one says so, they have to much experience with advanced technology. It's all in the details and the dialog, which you are short on.
Review By [DeeRose] • Date [27 Jul 08] • Not Rated
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [27 Jul 08] • Not Rated
the beauty of it is, SGC already is familiar with alternate realities and such, so only a small amount of lying is needed... they can say they've encountered alternate versions of the SGC in the past (that accounts for knowing things they shouldn't know, and anything they get wrong is, hey that was an alternate that they learned it from). As is, they can give them a great big data dump on things to know, things to avoid, all that good stuff... Like maybe, "don't mess with that artifact, it'll alert the Ori" etc...
Comments from author:
That's kinda what I'm going for.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [15 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Lol! Andrew, Andrew, Andrew. He is just such a frakking dweeb. I really like how you are starting your story and look forward to seeing where you take our intrepid heroes. OK, and Andrew too. Lol! How about a pairing of Faith and Vala? Hubba, hubba! Ok, the meds have kicked in and I am much better.
Comments from author:
LOL I'm not sure that Vala or Faith would be interested in each other. Maybe.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [15 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Great characterization of Daniel with That last line, when going to Atlantis is on the table he would be willing to do almost anything. Also glad with the job you have made of my challenge. Keep updating.
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