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Review of chapter "The Mysterious Girl, The Fourth Child?" from ReflectionsOfReality
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The only reason why this is one of the least popular is because no-one respects the classics. The easiest way for a Shinji/Kaworu pairing to work out would be if someone can get Shinji to question his sexuality before him so that it would not be as much of a shock. Which if Dawn were to reveal Tara/Willow stories then it is highly possible that he might start to consider non-traditional sexual roles.

The real reason that I am placing a second review so soon is that I had a thought occur to me. What would happen if Unit 04 was somehow possessed by the Slayer essence? What would that mean as far as attack strength/healing/fighting capability? What would a slayer dream be like in this new world with Angels rather than demons. This is more a what if idea than an actual suggestion though it could still be used if it would add a new useful dimension to your story.

And the idea of a 15 year old Xander would be more of having NGE realities Xander that age rather than the Buffy reality one. Then again I can sort of see Xander as a subordinate of Kaji or even have them have the same appearance. A common idea that I am not sure is a part of cannon or fannon is that in the NGE reality are psionics/psychics. What would happen if the NGE Alexander Lavelle Harris('the one who sees') were to try to read Dawn only for the remanents of the Key spell to recognise him and do the memory dump. Just think of the possibilities? Like how much would the memory cover, from when Xander met Dawn to Dracula? his whole life until she sacrificed herself to close the portal? His whole life from when he was born till 2015 with all the crap in between?

Tonnes of different ideas and no where near enough time to go over them all,

Though the biggest thought is what if Dawn were to send Lillith to another reality where she could do no harm (like one where an Angel actually made impact or a reality without life so that she would initiate genesis) so that there could be no third impact. I wonder if Kaworu and Rei were to witness it how he would react? The other thought would be to screw NERV and Seele's plans and her to take all of her friends and classmates to a new reality (or even returning to her original one) so they could actually live out their relative lives...

Feel free to use or ignore any of my thoughts or ideas, and I really do hope that you can update this story some time,
~Reflections
Comments from author:
Those are all very interesting ideas. I think you've just kicked my muse into action. I'll work on it some more and see what happens. I tend to get more ideas as I write, too, so even I'm never sure what I'll do and what I won't. I just hope you'll keep reading and offering input.
Review By [ReflectionsOfReality] • Date [3 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Mysterious Girl, The Fourth Child?" from ReflectionsOfReality
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Any chance you are eventually going for a Shinji/Kaworu pairing?

You made a comment about the level of technology and a tape player versus an mp3 player and I wanted to point out a concept that has been used before where with Second Impact many of the industries required to produce electronics were destroyed and it is quite possible that it set back technology a few decades that fifteen years later they are only just able to recover in the civilian sectors. Military of course would have first priority with technology considering they kept most of their infrastructure.

That point made though it is Your story and in essence you are the god of its reality so if you say Shinji has an mp3 player that is able to transform into a robot then that is what he shall have. If you make Dawn have a psychic connection with Pen Pen so be it.

Heck I personally would love if there is incident where Dawn is called into Commander Ikari's office and sees the kabbalah tree of life and tells him that it is incomplete (after all in a reality WITH demons and real magic versus the NGE one without I am sure that their could be whole new branches of it and even a root structure that a person could not imagine) only for her additions to drive the Commander insane with the idea that there were demons.

I also wonder if Dawn's solution to escaping a Dirac Sea (activation of the S2 engine in Unit 04 and the disappearance of the Nevada NERV or the 12th Angel either in rescuing Shinji or escaping it herself) would be to spill her blood to destroy its barrier.

This is a very good start to a crossover of its type, I really can't wait to see where you take it... any chance of a 15 year old Xander?

Odd thoughts,
~Reflections
Comments from author:
Bingo on the pairing! I'd say more, but that would give away too much of the plot.

As for the mp3 player, you make a very good point. It really wasn't something I had considered so I'm glad you pointed it out.

You also came up with some very good plot points, I may end up using them and I'll be sure to thank you for them. It may be a while though as this is my least popular story and RL has been really hectic.

Anyway, thanks for the long review, I love when people give me lots of input. And Xander is still the age he would be at the end of season 5, which would be about 20 I believe.
Review By [ReflectionsOfReality] • Date [2 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Mysterious Girl, The Fourth Child?" from AllenPitt
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And Dawn has found someone (Shinji) more messed up than she's ever been. I sure hope this story doesn't end with the weirdness the anime series did....
*It'd be funny if the scoobs do a spell, pull dawn back...inside "04" .....heh. Even for Sunnydale, that'd be strange.
At least Dawn won't let them brainwash the shopping-urge out of her. Cause that would just be too horrible to contemplate
In a way, she'd be more weirded out by the trip to Nevada. At least in Japan it's a foreign country-in NE, she'd encounter strangeness in a place she'd expect normality in, I think---
Comments from author:
Well, that depends on which ending you're talking about. If you're talking the last two episodes, then no, it'll be nothing like those. If you're talking about the End of Evangelion movie, then it'll be somewhat like that since I'll be working off of it.

Anyway, thanks for reviewing.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [2 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Mysterious Girl, The Fourth Child?" from Tatsu
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(Evil Laughter) oh i hope this will put a wrench into the red earth ceremony. dawn/shinji could be cute ^_~ and it would mess up gendo.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing!

I've actually got plans for Shinji already. A brief relationship followed by a long one. I'd say more, but I don't want to give too much just yet. But I can just say he won't be with Dawn for important plot reasons.
Review By [Tatsu] • Date [1 Aug 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Girl who Fell from the Sky" from Tatsu
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B.E.G. (BIG EVIL GRIN) (joker laughter)
ABOUT BLOODY TIME. love it and you've really captured gendo's charming personality.
Comments from author:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you like how I wrote Gendo, it was actually easier than I expected once I got started.
Review By [Tatsu] • Date [15 Jul 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Girl who Fell from the Sky" from AllenPitt
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Ok, no demons..there might be a Summers family with a Buffy etc, but probably no Dawn....
Hopefully Dawn will pick up the language real quick, and be able to tap into her Key powers soon...
And look at the bright side: you can't possibly come up with a worse, weirder ending than the series actually had.
Comments from author:
Thanks fore reviewing. There are still some counterparts BtVS characters in the NGE world, but definitely no Dawn.

Dawn will pick up the language quickly, but realistically so. She's obviously good at languages (she was able to read Ancient Sumerian after all).
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [15 Jul 08] • Not Rated
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