first let me compliment you with this story. It's well written and easy to read if I liked it is a second I'm not done deciding yet. Why? Well The PTB are playing with so many lives I hope that a higher power than them will punish them in your next story. They are using so many lives and destroying them for their own game.
What I most dislike is giving Buffy a baby after being raped, how sick can you be as a PTB. Rape is a very traumatic experience and having a baby out of it is difficult and certainly when you are a virgin. Than leaving everything you loved behind. Power of good I don't think so. Wolfram and heart have more mercy and they are supposed to be evil.
And ab baby from Xander for heaven sakes, well I don't like Xander because he is a hypocrite. Willow you describe perfectly. The Gypsy's are sick bastards who let the soul suffer for something the demon did. What did the soul do that he has to suffer like that and how are the Gypsy's any difficult from demons. To me the Gypsy's are worse than evil demons.
And you. Thank god you use your mind to write stories because otherwise it would be a very scary world. brrrr. Hmm, I think I like your story and I'm going to read your sequel. Oh dear what is that telling about me. I'm not gone think about it.
Comments from author:
Xander is quite possibly a hypocrite as you say but many people are to some extent or another. As for the PTB, they are opportunists and take advantage of what they can that comes out of free will. WRH would do the same if they were aware of the situation and maybe less gently. Buffy at least retains some support system under the PTB plan.
As for using my mind to write stories instead of other more sinister purposes, I just don't have the resources of Luthor, Doc Doom, or Hydra to have a more creative effect on the world.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [25 Dec 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "And the Lucky Winner Is . . ." from MultiverseBeliever
Review:
Good story .... does Xander get to eventually tell giles who he is ? if not could it happen? :)
There seems top be a lot of brooding going around :) At least we can count on Cordelia to continue to get things done! She would make a great project manager.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Oct 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Glad to see another chapter of this. Also loved seeing Jono brought in as the new geek. Not sure if I like that he got brought in without a demonstration. I don't think Giles would have given The Speech unless he thought the kid either already knew something or was very open. But that's a very minor point.
Finally someone reads the riot act to Willow's parents. I guess they are slightly more likely to take notice than Xander's parents would be but it certainly took a bit of effort for Giles to get their attention even partially focused where it should be. I wonder if Xander could get around the "ghost wards" by possessing a vampire? Then he could listen in and direct the conversation if he needed to do so. If not I'm sure Giles will come up with something :)
Comments from author:
An earlier chapter had Whistler telling him he couldn't possess vampires.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [22 Aug 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Both of the Rosenbergs need to be bitch-slapped until I get tired of watching - which probably wouldn't take more than twenty-three to twenty-four hours, at a rough guess.
I like the way this chapter is wrapping up some of the less important details. Good job.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I considered making them more amenable to moving Willow but it just didn't feel right.
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [20 Aug 12] • Not Rated
I vote 'no' to a Willow sub story if only for the reason that it looks like it will be a Superman story and the man of steel is just too powerful for a Buffyverse story IMHO.
Now the question is whether the anti-ghost wards will knock Xander out if they're already merged. I assume they will prevent him from being called if she's already inside the boundary.
Comments from author:
If I do it, it will be quite a ways in the future. I hope to finish some of my current crop before watering and fertilizing any more. Besides, most BtVS crosses with Supes have him abide by a code of jurisdiction where he only becomes involved if asked. Leaving him to take care of the bigger threats. Besides Willow could end up only interacting with the secondary characters like her cousin.
At first I never really had any real desire to read this since I was never a huge fan of the Deadman character. Having read all of the posted chapter, I find myself reevaluating my thoughts on this story.
I still don't like Deadman, but I find this story really enjoyable.
I don't know why I didn't try it out since I'm a fan of your other work, but I'm hooked on it now.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [11 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
