This is great. I would love to see more or a sequel. It might be fun to have Buffy and Dawn claim Melida as family. As over protective as Melidia mother is she really cares and Buffy, Dawn and Melida could use a good mother figure. Heck all the scooby's could and her dad was a good guy too.
Review By [FireWolfe] • Date [5 Jun 10] • Not Rated
really liked this story. I would love to read Dawn/Buffy's explanations to Melinda and get her parents reactions to finding out the truth, not to mention Cuddy's to the DNA tests. Hope you can update soon
Review By [bonnie] • Date [10 Apr 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
The portrayal of Buffy is ... slightly OOC, in that up through "Chosen," Buffy was a control-freak, arrogant and bitchy. On the other hand, she was under a lot stress (extreme, unrelenting, and overwhelming are words that come to mind,) and a move to a different country and a few years to mature are perfectly reasonable reasons for her character to develop as you show her. I certainly *like* her much more than I did during the last quarter-season. This Buffy is grown up and sane. It's a real pleasure to read about her.
Good. Still need an explanation for what happened to switch them. I know it wound up working out extremely well for Melinda... Wait. She's e-mailing with Dawn right? Maybe they can have a peanut butter concoction contest, or Melinda can try combining Dan with peanut butter and Buffy overhears Dawn's reaction to the e-mail :D
Review By [Shieldage] • Date [10 Aug 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [10 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from RocksandGlass
Review:
This is a great story, but I think that this chapter isn't the best you can do. You're getting too technical with the writing, in my opinion; not in the grammar or the biology/science of it, but in the explanations of behavior. The conversation itself between House and Buffy was good (although Cuddy's presence was never explained/ she never really entered the scene, just appeared with lines) but it was slowed down and over done with all of Buffy's thoughts. I liked the inclusion of Buffy's thoughts, and I think it is great that so much thought is going into getting this right and correctly predicting outcomes and motivations, but I've generally found that these explanations are the work behind the writing rather than included in the final draft- they are in the writing, but with more subtlety and moderation. At the moment, it's like reading a joke where each element of it is explained, or a pun where the references are pointed out and explained, it's unnecessarily exposing the scaffolding of the piece. In short, I like Buffy's thoughts but think that there should be less of them and/or that they should be subtler. I like the story and I like what you've done with the content of this chapter, the delivery just needs some refining, in my opinion. Btw, great title.
Review By [RocksandGlass] • Date [9 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from VillageOrchid
Review:
I liked it. Looking forward to what happens next. Thanks for sharing and continuing.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [8 Aug 08] • Not Rated
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