you know, I just realized reading this that Buffy really slacked off with the Dawn thing. Dawn may have cheated, but that doesn't give a demon an excuse to cast a spell on her sister. He should've been slain.
Review By [JasonBarnett] • Date [21 Aug 11] • Not Rated
It's back, hooray! And there was some serious "D'awwww!" in there among the funny, and then zomg cliffhanger! Please feel free to update this more often, because I like it muchly and cliffhangers are evil. So there!
Review By [lunalurker] • Date [21 Aug 11] • Not Rated
I have to say actually like the scripted format (as well as the story itself). It allows for some verbal shortcuts in writing that are fun to read, plus it also allows the reader to visualize the story as a comic book or even TV show. Hopefully you can continue it.
Review By [tealruby] • Date [29 Aug 10] • Not Rated
I probably originally tried to read this before you reformatted is as I had it hidden. Really enjoyed reading it up to this point. I hope your muse lets you finish it at some point.
I generally enjoy all your stuff and I really like fem slash, preferably Buffy centered.
Comments from author:
Thanks a lot. I really like the story myself. What stalled me is the plot. I hate plot. LOL. But I just can't figure out what the Joker's plan is, and until I figure that out, the story is stuck.
I actually do have the beginning of "Issue Five" written, though.
Review By [TwoBlackDragons] • Date [25 Mar 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
It is true there are a lot of colon's (the ones we use in writing)in this story; they put me off at first.Where there is writing there is information being given to the reader and our easy job is to fill out the space given to us. Pat
While in your story, "ToH - Don't Talk With Your Hellmouth Full" the script style worked and lended itself to the dialogue but this story just falls flat. The script format is extremely difficult to follow and it actually reads as if you just didn't 'feel' like writing exposition or prose which isn't a good thing.
Comments from author:
Well, while I liked the idea of visualizing the different shots and things, it's no fun if no one else can. So you're the straw that finally broke my back. :-) It's still not prose, but I changed it to the style of that other fic, because I still want to keep it in a semi-script format, but I hope it's easier to read.
Well the new format took some getting used to, but it doesn't alter the fact that the story is excellent. I look forward to reading more about Buffy and Diana's relationship.
Love the tension between Bruce and Buffy.
Comments from author:
Much thanks. :-)
Review By [Tempi] • Date [16 Aug 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
The script style is odd at first, but after a couple of reads it's growing on me. It almost makes you read it more carefully to get what's going on. Looking foward to more here!
Comments from author:
I'm glad you liked it. Hope you enjoy "the more." ;-)
Review By [tealruby] • Date [2 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Hmmz... the script-style rather ruins it IMO. But otherwise ok.
Comments from author:
Sorry to hear that, Kai. :-( I'll probably clean up the format, and make it as aesthetically pleasing as this place allows a script format to be, but it is going to stay in that style.
Review By [UncleKai] • Date [1 Aug 08] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Ava
