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Review of chapter "Super Smash Bros. Brawl Sneak Peek" from angelus
Can't wait for the sequel I never played Super Smash Brothers but I used to play Super Mario alot not as much as Mega Man though I used to own all 6 Mega Man games. Anyway great job using characters from SMB2
Review By [angelus] • Date [22 Dec 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Secret Ending & New Beginning" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Shadow Queen? Oh. Paper Mario? Cool :)

Buffy has Birdo's sphere, so this should work out interestingly. She forgot the dream when she woke up, right? I guess Andrew will fill in that gap in her memory, or maybe Dawn talked about her adventure before she vanished...

Yeah, when people are defeated in normal Brawl they turn into trophies... I think, either that or they're trophies to begin with... Check wikipedia ;)

The "The next morning... opened an envelope engraved with... name in spidery black ink." repetition bit is overdone. How about:

The next morning Dawn opened an envelope engraved with her name in spidery black ink. When she read it, she vanished before her sister's eyes. Buffy frantically grabbed Dawn’s invite and read it, but nothing happened, other than that she became confused because it didn’t make sense.

[next bit]

It took Buffy only a few minutes to confirm that Xander, Willow, Dana and Giles had disappeared as well.

Okay, you're right. Buffy wasn't suspicious until her first question made Andrew nervous. Sorry I misread the scene :)
Comments from author:
Being a Drabble I decided to take Buffy asking Andrew for granted. But when I originally wrote that bit of dialogue I don't think Buffy even knew Andrew had done anything. She was just grilling him because of his nervous reaction. None of them know it was a dream or even that it happened except for Dana, Andrew knows because he caused it. When Buffy asked Andrew he told her everything, thus she recalled the dream. The others in the Videogame Dimension won't realize about the dream until a little later if Buffy manages to show up using the Birdo Crystal.

To be honest I never thought out some things because I was forcing myself to keep each chapter short, sweet and simple. The rough drafts were written to be only one side of a page, so I've got a page with Cheese Guy and Dana, a page with Xander and Dawn and so on and so forth.

As far as the envelope scene went. I was aiming for Paper Mario cut scene esque.Total random crazyness is a typical thing in Mario RPGs. Just look at Fawful from Mario & Luigi Superstar Saga. So it's total randomness and each of the scoobies who got an envelope vanished though Buffy only knows at this point about Dawn. Or at least knew until she drilled Andrew.

If I wrote a sequel it might be a full blown story or a series of longer drabbles detailing the battles in the Brawl Tournament the meeting of the Scoobies with the Mario Brothers and all Brawl participants. Although figuring out their battle moves might prove irksome. Anyway I'm glad you've enjoyed this series of drabbles, now I must find a way to take a step back from The Legend of Zelda Oracle of Ages/Seasons and get some work writing my fics. Heh, heh, heh.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [13 Aug 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Cherries & Starmen" from (Past Donor)LiastraLee
This is kind of cute, in a weird twisted way.
Comments from author:
Really? That's cool. Though I'm not sure if I was aiming for Cuwisted or Twiute. LOL
Review By [(Past Donor)LiastraLee] • Date [9 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Rage & Crystals" from (Current Donor)Shieldage
Ha! Well, could've been worse. Could've been a 1up ;)


I mean. Having a sphere that sends you to the next level, that's acceptable in the real world. Having a 1up means that you have to think about what might happen if it touches a vampire.

... Maybe that came out wrong... ;)
Comments from author:
How is a 1up worse then a glowing crystal globe and how does Birdo create those in her/his stomach anyway??? Yikes, bad place, bad place argh. Glad you're enjoying my effort at drabbles. Expect some crazy stuff to go down before the end.
Review By [(Current Donor)Shieldage] • Date [9 Aug 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Kissing & POWing" from ColdFuzzions
I laughed at this, on the subject on lack of reviews, it may be that it does not show up as a high priority for viewing? (just a in-expert oppinion)

Will it be a straight crossover with Villians from the game, or expand outwards to other games Mario visited? (Dr Mario Viruses, Donkey Kong Gorillas ((Him as a Hero or Villian as well?)), Mario Kart Chase Scenes, A run in with Smash Bros?)

It may be more interesting? If the Cheese Guy was used more perhaps?

Lol, just had the wierd idea the sorcerrer was another Game Villian, Ranging from Ganon (sp?) of the Link series to Eggplant Wizard (Captain N the GameMaster) to some from the more recent Games. But a older game may be better, as some 'Old Power' attempting a comeback from obscurity?

Just throwing out some ideas and thoughts.
Comments from author:
'Channeling Cryptic Whistler Response' All Shall be Revealed in Time. The end will most likely shock you and all my readers. Heh, heh, heh.
Review By [ColdFuzzions] • Date [7 Aug 08] • Not Rated
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