Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SpacedCadet
***STILL*** waiting for more !
Review By [SpacedCadet
] • Date [8 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from Vickzie
Aww that's so sad! Good story though.
Review By [Vickzie
] • Date [12 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from Blackett
Idem....on wanting more.
Review By [Blackett
] • Date [2 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from ClumsyElf
Great story!! Hope to see more soon!!
Review By [ClumsyElf
] • Date [29 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from serenityselena
interesting story ...
hope to read more ^_^
Review By [serenityselena
] • Date [16 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from deathgeonous
It's a little sad, and even sadder is tghe fact that it's incompleate. Ah well, thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Review By [deathgeonous
] • Date [5 Aug 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from aveave
This is great story. I hope you will countinue it amd post next chapter soon.
Review By [aveave
] • Date [25 Mar 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter three" from SpacedCadet
A ***GREAT*** start!
Please do more.
Review By [SpacedCadet
] • Date [22 Oct 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from Cleo
Great concept as a response to the challenge, I would love to see you take that story further!
Review By [Cleo
] • Date [25 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter three" from Wormbait
This is a very good and well fleshed out, believable beginning, Any hope you'll come back to it and finish it off?
Well done and thanks for sharing, I would love to see more.
Review By [Wormbait
] • Date [14 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from MistressRed
This is great so far. Any hope that you're going to update any time soon?
Review By [MistressRed
] • Date [14 Apr 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter three" from pezgirl
thanks for sharing
Review By [pezgirl
] • Date [25 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "chapter three" from manic
This is very good, and very sad. I empathize very much with all the characters. I greatly look forward to more.
Review By [manic
] • Date [20 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from vMures
First off, I am enjoying this story quite a bit. It is a fresh take on the "real family" theme. I like your reasoning for Sheila's reactions and treatment of Willow. I can think of several reasons why Janet wouldn't hire a PI to find her daughter, and only one of them is money. I would imagine that fear of rejection would be a large part of it as well. By the time Janet could afford to hire a PI to find her daughter, at least 10 years would have passed (med school takes a lot of time and money after all). By that time she would have no idea what Sheila and Ira had told Willow, if Willow knew she was adopted or not, etc. She would know that legally she has no rights when it comes to her, as she willingly gave her up for adoption. If Sheila and Ira told her that they didn't want her to see Willow, she would be even more heartbroken than she is now. Plus unless she could *prove* they were unfit parents, which isn't always an easy thing-especially in neglect cases-she wouldn't be able to help Willow at all. More than likely though she feels that Willow is better off with Sheila and Ira and doesn't want to upset her daughter's world, no matter how much she misses her.
Anyway, I am really enjoying this story and look forward to the next bit. I found one little nit-picky complaint, and it is one of American versus British English. It really isn't a big deal and I doubt most people would even notice it. In chapter two, when Sheila is discussing Willow's education and she says that Willow's "use of full stops and commas were abysmal," Americans don't use the term full stop. We would say her use of periods and commas were abysmal, or simply that her punctuation was abysmal. Like I said it is a nit-picky thing and not really a big deal. Just thought I would point it out. :)
Can't wait for the next bit.
ETA: You are quite welcome. I'm American, but just spent the past two years living in Jamaica, where they use British Standard English and Jamaican Patois. After two years of learning to use the British spellings and terms while writing professional letters, and such, I'm now having to watch what I type now that I'm back in the US. :) It has helped me write Giles in my story "The Road Not Taken," which I really need to work on. RL has been way to busy for far to long.
Comments from author:
thank you, that's a real help (:
*g* yep, i'm british so i tend to sound amercan/british through writing and speech...apparently anyway. i blame american TV for that ;)
i'll go change it
I'm glad you like the story
Review By [vMures
] • Date [17 Aug 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "chapter three" from JediKnight
Nice update, hope for more soon. When will Janet meet Willow?
Review By [JediKnight
] • Date [13 Aug 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]