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Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Chunkman
Review:
And it starts me reading the first fanfic I ever read again. It's just as good as I remember. I originally hated when I read this on fanfiction that they got together so fast but they both weren't really 100% when they met Clark was upset about Lana just as Buffy was with Spike. They were both vulnerable and turned to each other to move on.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Glad you enjoyed reading it again.
Review By [Chunkman] • Date [1 Sep 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from nataliaavo
Review:
Brilliant!!
Comments from author:
Thanks!
Review By [nataliaavo] • Date [13 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Dragonelf
Review:
You have done a good job with this story.

::Starts reading the next story in the series::

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I believe a leaf of grass is no less
than the journey-work of the stars.
- Walt Whitman
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Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [2 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Writing style could use some work- you’re not really expressing as much emotional depth as you could-, and I REALLY think you have them diving from ‘acquaintances’ to saying that they love each other far too quickly for it to be realistic (“So I Married An Alien in Vegas” did a far better job at gradually expressing their feelings... and why isn’t that story up on this site?), but I definitely can’t fault the dramatic twists you included; the First being responsible for Krypton’s destruction alone made for a VERY interesting concept...
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review. I take your points onboard but in my defence this was my very first story that i had ever wrote so flaws are inevitable i think. I like to think my writing has improved at least a little since then.

As for 'So I Married an Alien in Vegas'...long story short the Moderators felt it contained too similiar ideas from someone else's story and therefore i must have stolen said ideas which I swear i didn't. The similarities were a coincidence pure and simple. Great minds thinking alike and all that. Anyway i did not wish to make it into a long drawn out dispute so i deleted it from this site.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [2 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
Review:
Oh, my gosh, again totally love this and ooooh is this a taste of a Martha/Rupert romance, OOOOOOOH I don't think I've ever even considered or heard of such a pairing and would love I mean L++O++V++E to read that. :0 On to the next part of the series. I am so happy with glee that I'm finally reading this.
Comments from author:
Martha/Rupert romance...hmm maybe. It would sure shock the heck out of Clark wouldn't it. Tell you what i might consider putting it into the next part of my story which i am currently writing. Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [7 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
Review:
Okay I've been coming around this particular story several times now and wanted to read it but never got around to it, I am so very upset that I didn't get to this sooner. I LOVE IT a hundred times over. :))
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [7 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from BlackBettie
Review:
I have to say love! The instant I started reading this you've captured my attention and that's saying a lot! usually I can be kind of the hard critic when it comes to finding stories I actually enjoy! And you do a splendid, bang up job!

You have truly captured the essence of both series, and all characters therin! You write brilliantly! At many times I find myself both laughing and crying and feeling the emotions along with the characters just like I'm watching them on TV all over again! You have great imagery and as I said before but cannott stress enough, you reall captured both the BtVS and SV ESSENCE! It's so hard to write Fan Fiction and keep within the characters you're in essence borrowing from someone else! But you do a damn good job and I aplaud you! Good job!
Comments from author:
There are many things i could say in response to this but I'll stick with the simple and just say thank you very much.
Review By [BlackBettie] • Date [14 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight" from Lili
Review:
This is a great story, well written and I enjoyed it very much. I only started reading about Buffy & Clark recently. I just love it. I think those 2 characters go well together. Keep writing. It is worth it, well for me anyway.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much and i thought Clark and Buffy go well together also which is part of the reason I first started writing this story and its two sequels which i hope you will enjoy as well.
Review By [Lili] • Date [1 Apr 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Mari
Review:
Having Buffy and Clark meet is a good idea, and they'd definitely have some things in common.

Some suggestions? Consider changing your tense. Present tense is sometimes considered off-putting. If possible, you should also think about a beta reader; they'd be good at catching minor grammar slip-ups like your-you're, and missed punctuation.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I'll take your suggestions under consideration but i make no promises.
Review By [(Past Donor)Mari] • Date [20 Sep 08] • Not Rated
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