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Review of chapter "Peace" from DieselDriver
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I think what they need to invade Ceylon space is a ship like the "Skylark of Valeron" also title of the book by E.E."Doc" Smith. 100 kilometers in diameter, lots and lots of firepower and very very fast considering they stay in normal space. Modern computers and forms of drives along with Vorlon and Shadow weapons (it's big enough to mount and power hundreds of them) would make it a very formidable weapon.

I'm surprised you didn't include a pair of ship's names "Reuben James" and "Battleaxe".
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Persistence, Part 3" from DieselDriver
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This is a rather jaundiced view of the Starship Trooper's world and life. I find the idea that over half the population is unable to vote to be perfectly acceptable because EVERYONE in that society has the CHOICE whether to earn that right or not. That they choose not to earn that right isn't anyone's responsibility but their own. Like Rico was taught in his History and Moral Philosophy class, it works. I like the idea of earning a right to vote rather than it being "universal" as it is here, as long as like their society, ours would include the right for everyone and anyone to earn the right to vote.

edit: I got curious about Roger Young.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rodger_Wilton_Young
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War" from DieselDriver
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"when our military budget was more than half of the country’s total budget"

The ONLY time that I know of that this has been true in our universe/dimension is during WW2. Currently it runs about 4 to 5 percent. The greater bulk of our current budget is taken up by unconstitutional welfare type programs and foreign aid.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Persistence, Part 4" from DieselDriver
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I really liked the show "Space Above and Beyond". I'm surprised no one else has used it (to my knowledge anyway) in one of these crossovers. Now for the funny thing:

irregardless [ir-i-gahrd-lis]

Examples Word Origin

adverb, Nonstandard.
1. regardless.

The reason I think this is funny is because this is the first time I can remember it being used in any story I've read here. I got my butt chewed (figuratively of course) by an English teacher in my college days for using a word which, in her words, did not exist. I looked it up because that chewing out stuck with me all these decades. Funny to me to find that she was wrong. Teachers are never wrong... Are they? ROFL

Here's some additional information if anyone cares:

Usage note
Irregardless is considered nonstandard because of the two negative elements ir- and -less. It was probably formed on the analogy of such words as irrespective, irrelevant, and irreparable. Those who use it, including on occasion educated speakers, may do so from a desire to add emphasis. Irregardless first appeared in the early 20th century and was perhaps popularized by its use in a comic radio program of the 1930s.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Persistence, Part 2" from DieselDriver
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I think I view the federation as depicted in STTNG about the way it's viewed in this chapter. Further, I believe human nature being what it is, the people would tend toward sloth and gluttony, just as the folks who are on welfare tend to do here and now. They have to be forced to go look for work. They don't just take up artistry or study just for the sake of it, nor do they join the military if they don't need a job unless they are very unusual. The federation would fall apart before it even got going strong on Earth.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [15 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Persistence, Part 1" from DieselDriver
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I'd like to propose a new design for one of their weapons and maybe a new class of ship to carry it. Well, perhaps carry isn't the right word. Sort of akin to the A-10 Warthog in that the ship would be designed around the weapon. Said weapon to be fired ONLY in a vacuum since firing in an atmosphere might be a bad idea. Build a rail gun with a small wormhole generator that would transport the projectile back to the beginning of the rail enough times that the projectile would be traveling at 99% of the speed of light at which point the wormhole is removed and the projectile would be "fired" at the opponent. The ship would need to be fairly elongated and the gun situated lengthwise in the ship. The impact energy of even a 1 pound lump of depleted uranium at that speed would be devastating to anything I can imagine. I doubt a borg cube would survive. I doubt seriously if their shields could be modified to deflect it or stop it. Such a weapon would take awhile to charge up due to the energy involved but wowee!
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [14 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Patience" from DieselDriver
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“Such a procedure is possible with our technology. If a Tollan were found to be mentally unstable, for whatever reason, that person would undergo a mind and personality erasure and a new personality and skill set implanted.”

If you destroy the memories of a person, that person no longer exists and so has been executed. A matter of the manner of said execution rather than the result, at least as far as I'm concerned. In this instance and many others I'm quite in favor of such a result (not a punishment since the "person" is dead) for many criminals. Serial rapists and murderers chief among them. Quite a suitable result. The question left over is whether the aberration that caused the "misconduct" is psychological or physical. If physical it could (probably would) happen again and destruction of the body necessary unless the physical can be cured or repaired.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [13 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Potential" from DieselDriver
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"speed of Mach 3.5" works out to about 3850 FPS if my numbers are correct. We can do that with a few conventional shoulder mounted weapons now. My question is, what is the mass of the projectiles they are launching? How is the recoil absorbed on the person carrying the weapon? Obviously recoil would be absorbed by the ship or vehicle on such a mount. Have you ever watched video of a tank firing it's main gun?

I like Jack Ryan. Integrating his "verse" into the "SGC verse" and the "Buffy verse" and now the charming "verse" of the Halliwells is going to be very interesting if wow, mind bendingly complex.

It would have been ever so humorous if Marcus (?) had introduced himself then asked her name and when she replied he could have said "Charmed I'm sure".

Lastly, I love the length of the chapters. Lets me really sink into the story and follow it. Short chapters are a pain.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [13 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Ranger in New York City" from DieselDriver
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What happens to the slayer essence if the slayer is an immortal?
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [13 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Peace" from Netchka
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This was a very cool story. Are there more sequels coming? Hope so. The combination of didderent Universes in the one story really brings it together. If this was a movie on TV or on the big screen, it would be getting rave reviews from everyone and earning millions. Hope to read more soon. :>
Review By [Netchka] • Date [20 Jan 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Peace" from illyria
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i've read this story a few times and love it more every time . i would hope for a follow up story would be cool to see how the aliance deals with the threat of the wraith and ori .
Review By [illyria] • Date [26 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Potential" from maxthehobbit
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I'm not sure what to say. I had trouble keeping up with the story. I think maybe because I had no idea who or what you were using as a crossover. Guess I'm not as addicted to TV as I thought, or you were using shows that were made in the 80's-90's when I was out of the country and there isn't much US TV overseas except old 60's reruns like time tunnel and star trek. Because of that it just didn't hold my interest, but maybe to others it was a great story, certainly long enough.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [20 Aug 11] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Peace" from (Past Donor)TraceyC
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Wanted you to know that there's a minor formatting issue you should know about in the final chapter, Peace. Your entries for Xerxes and for Faith Lehane got combined as follows (separate parts are split with '[]'):

Private Diary Entry

Hector

“I thought I had missed the Gathering, when it turns out instead, that my fellow Immortals had formed a new nation. For the moment, my classes on modern military tactics are proceeding apace. I’ve also had a Watcher assigned to me who is busily interviewing me and recording my history. Apparently, they were unaware of my existence. I have a few more months of learning to do, but I’ve already been assured of a command level position with the Alliance. It seems the Alliance wants to utilize the talents of we Immortals. Something about having the benefit of long life and experience. These are interesting times [B. Just dropping a quick note to let you know I’m shipping out tomorrow. Deep space recon mission. Got a promotion to Captain, and command of a Ranger unit. He hasn’t asked me yet, but I have a feeling he will soon. But not to worry, I wouldn’t dream of getting married without you as my maid of honor. I’ll see you when I get back. F.]
Review By [(Past Donor)TraceyC] • Date [19 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Peace" from Frardowin
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I just forced my way through this story.

I have to say that the experience was worse than giving Bigfoot a blowjob.

You need to do some editing.


Edit: I am cursed with the inability to stop reading something after I have started reading it.
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Now that's a colorful image I didn't need in my head.

If it was that bad, why did you read all of it then? Why didn't you just give up?
Review By [Frardowin] • Date [18 Feb 10] • Rating [1 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Potential" from (Past Donor)JoeHundredaire
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I couldn't even make it halfway through the second chapter. Ninety percent of the 'story' so far has been dialog, making things spectacularly uninteresting. You need to do a lot less telling and a lot more showing.
Review By [(Past Donor)JoeHundredaire] • Date [12 Oct 09] • Rating [1 out of 10]
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