Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from nerfherder
I really enjoyed reading this and hope you can find the time to get back to it someday. Have a happy New Year!
Review By [nerfherder
] • Date [6 Jan 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from MadHobbit
good series, one thing that was never really covered in the TV series is that if it came down between Buffy and one of the others, Giles would have to go with Buffy.
Review By [MadHobbit
] • Date [4 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from Downery
One of the few good things to ever come out of that show and you keep Xander a virgin... why?
I thought the main reason people liked Xander was because he was an average guy. Isn't a pimp daddy but when a beautiful woman wants sex he doesn't run very fast.
Review By [Downery
] • Date [22 Apr 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from berkie
I like this! Instead of just one person being wronged and everyone else being mean, it shows the other side as well! Wonder if things will ever be completely alright again with everything that's being said though. Especially with Cordelia. Will Xander apologise to Giles? Or will he leave things as they are?
I wonder what Willow will think of everything once she's entirely up-to-date?
Why can't Xander say he's been training on his own? He doesn't have to say anything about working on nhis own, but it might help... If they don't know he's actually 'using' the training for things like patrolling, they have no reason to mind do they?
Makes me wonder how they'll react once they know Xander's Walker... And they have to find out eventually (though maybe not soon) otherwise it just wouldn't be fun :-P
Hope you'll continue this story!
Review By [berkie
] • Date [7 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Hanzo
♥ wonderful ♥
Review By [Hanzo
] • Date [31 Aug 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Rune
It is Giles who fails when he does not train the entire group. Giles is the adult. Giles is the one with the knowledge. Giles is the Watcher. Giles trained the Slayer.
Giles should have trained the others. Giles should have said "Train or Get Out."
Buffy is boring, chosen, yada yada. I don't read many Buffy-centric stories.
Willow as a witch is at least flawed with her magic addiction. She is more interesting.
Xander is a "normal", unpowered person. That he fights makes him a true hero. Xander-centric is my favorite type of story.
Please finish this.
Review By [Rune
] • Date [11 Aug 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from gaulty
hopes for more, hoping for a new chapter, by aug
Review By [gaulty
] • Date [11 Apr 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4" from AXanFan
I definitely have some criticism, but they are just based upon my personal preferences so I want to begin by saying that I like your writing style. I have had the misfortune to read some stories lately that have absolutely no flow -- even if you get all the characters right and have a great plot you still have to write the story in the right way.
Your writing is clear and easy to follow and I appreciate that.
Now for the semi-bad. At this point I have to say that I think that Mac and Tank are huge jerks. It is great that they see Xander trying to fight and offer to help train him, but they do not have a right to feed Xander's low sense of self-worth by implying that his life is worth less than his friends.
Mac is a coward for hitting Xander earlier -- Xander is a much less trained opponent at this point and was not even paying attention -- it makes me think of the old west stories where the good guys don't fight "dirty" and never "shoot someone in the back" -- also it was obvious by Xander's flinching that he has been mistreated in the past -- I'm thinking Xander would be better off getting his training from a more neutral source.
Also they are way too hard on Xander at this stage of his training. I realize he has been training for a while, but he is just a kid and he has come a long way. As his teachers they should point out where he went wrong or he will never learn, but they remind me of every jerk teacher or boss who never learned the art of constructive criticism in order for the person to learn from mistakes. It is scary that they would leave him unconscious for 12 hours and then kick him out after such harsh criticism -- implying that he does not really care about his friends.
I really want to like these guys and I am really happy that Xander is getting stronger physically and mentally, but I am thinking that he may need to learn what he can from these guys and then get away from them -- what his "friends" have done to him is wrong and even a bit dangerous, but I honestly think they did it out of ignorance and even immature emotions, but Mac and Tank are supposedly highly trained adults so that makes their actions malicious.
I think Xander needs to learn to be independent along with all of his new fighting skills -- not so much that he needs to be alone, but that he needs to be confident enough to stand up for himself and even walk away if need be.
Obviously, these are your characters and you get to write them as you see fit -- I am just very protective of Xander and I see even the more subtle negatives that effect him. I do hope you can continue to write -- you have a talent and I plan to read more of this story -- it is still a very interesting take on what happened -- I do hope the others will be in the story a little more as we go -- even with all of their flaws I like it best in the stories where they interact in some way.
Review By [AXanFan
] • Date [6 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Obsidian
Pretty interesting story so far. I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
I hope to continue to interest you as the story progresses. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Obsidian
] • Date [28 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from Hawklan
good to see you back on this story, I can`t wait to see how cordellia will react if x offers to train her.
Comments from author:
lol is it wrong for me to say that I'm just as interested? Sometimes my muse gets away from me... ;)
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [12 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from eriktheviking
A well written chapter, if rather depressing with how Xander's authority figures seem to be putting him down without giving him a way of correcting the problem. I agree no one person is totally right or wrong but a noncom should be used to how the young and less worldly don't see the big picture and how they have to lead them but Giles does seem to view Xander as a hindrance, imo.
PS Welcome back.
Review By [eriktheviking
] • Date [10 Aug 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from ChiVayne
A lot of what Tank said regarding Giles makes sense. Leaders in a battle situation do have to make hard decisions that will cost other people's lives, and that has to be difficult and painful. But I am less sure about "That he can’t give other people as much focus isn’t his fault, it’s the nature of things. " His concern about his main asset (and I don't mean to imply that Giles thought of Buffy as a mere asset) should have made him realize he needed the support troops to be better trained. That he did nothing speaks more to me of less than stellar command thinking than just having to focus on one person. A commander should be maximizing ALL of his available assets rather than just relying/focusing on one.
Review By [ChiVayne
] • Date [10 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from SadJack
Dude, thank you for updating. I have been waiting for this story for a while now. Please, please, keep it going.
Review By [SadJack
] • Date [10 Aug 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12" from oldgirllost
Thank you. This is one of my favorites and I had almost given up on another chapter. Thank you again.
About the differences of the various characters points of view-- that's real life.
We are all one of the six blind men trying to describe the elephant. Nobody sees the whole picture. Xander is taking on a heavy weight of responsibility but all the training in the world can't give him the weight of experience. With the pressure he is putting on himself instant perspective and wisdom would be a bit too much to ask, and more than a little unbelievable.
Thank you again
Review By [oldgirllost
] • Date [10 Aug 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 11" from SadJack
Dude, please finsh this story. I am already hooked.
Review By [SadJack
] • Date [9 Jul 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]