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Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from JJDudeman
Overall, pretty darn good handling of a lot of stuff. One huge missed opportunity that wouldn't have changed much was Angel's angry at Buffy & co. calling him the enemy, soon after she's sympathizing with him about Fred, but he never said "THAT'S the person I was begging you to save." Honestly, that would be the natural thing to do there. Would change little storyline wise, Buffy might wince or something (up to you), but it would feel more natural and be a LOT more satisfying.
Question: If Fred's soul was remade into Illyria's, isn't Fred still ruined forever? That's still so tragic, grr, no happiness for Fred?... I've always thought along those lines of energy can't be destroyed, but not as nicely as you've done there.
Lastly, Harmony. Perfect. So nicely done in all ways, from just wanting to fit in, to kissing Cordy. (Ok, also, the Cordy-Buffy interchange is excellent, too) Great job with Harmony, again, glad to see it taken in this direction so well.
Comments from author:

Yeah there are always things looking back i could add or do differently but mostly i'm happy with what i wrote.

In a way there is no happiness for Fred. That's just the way of the world sometimes.

Yeah, Harmony had her moments on both shows.

Thanks again for the review.
Review By [JJDudeman] • Date [27 Feb 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Dragonelf
You have done good job with this story and the previous story in the series.

I noticed some things in chapter 7 and 12 which sounded a bit odd.

Chapter 7
"That’s ok. He’ll just make one myself." Clark tells her.

I think you you might have meant to write "himself" and not "myself".

Chapter 12
Chloe goes up to Willow and kisses her cheek “I have to go. Ring you later?”

I think you you might have meant to write "Call you later?" and not "Ring you later?".

::Starts reading the next story in the series::

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I believe a leaf of grass is no less
than the journey-work of the stars.
- Walt Whitman
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Comments from author:
Oops! Sorry. Small errors creep in now and again.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [5 Nov 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from MarcusSLazarus
Might be a shame that Angel never got the chance to slay (Or tame) the dragon, but the fact that you brought Cordelia back while also giving Bizarro a chance to show
what he’s capable of definitely made up for that (Bizarro’s return after being dumped on Mars in the show just sucked; I actually felt SORRY for him after Lana killed him, despite the fact that he’s meant to be Clark’s ruthless double rather than the twisted pathetic duplicate of early Bizarros).

The fact that Lana actually believed that Clark was the ‘fake’ was actually rather pathetic, when you get down to it- all her talk about how much she ‘loves’ Clark and she can’t tell when he’s been replaced with a ‘clone’?-, but the twist with Oliver’s family having previously been members of the Watcher’s Council was definitely an interesting concept, and in general you’ve definitely got some interesting ideas established regarding future plots (Particularly with HARMONY now having a soul, even if I wouldn’t have minded Spike sticking around for future fights with Brainiac).

Plus, of course, Clark developing his hand-to-hand skills should be an interesting touch if further Kryptonians show up, to say nothing of what the new Fred/Illyria 'amalgamation' should be capable of in a fight....
Comments from author:
The dragon; i needed Clark to make a dramatic entrance.

Cordy: I loved Cordy and i hated the way the show ended her story. Ok i get you don't always get a happy ending but considering what she went through with Jasmine i thought her story needed to continue so she could at least have the possibility of getting a happy ending.

I thought i might as well copy Lana's inability to spot that 'Clark' was a clone from the show. I mean i never got why she never questioned his sudden change in attitude but then again i never got a lot of what the show did to Lana. I always thought that Smallville's version of Bizarro was interesting and much more dangerous than the version from the comics. I mean on the show he was ruthless and cunning combined with Clark's abilities made him a very dangerous adversary.

Oliver's family being part of the Watcher's council was in one way just to save having to explain all the supernatural stuff again and simply have it that Oliver knew all about this stuff.

You may not believe this but i actually liked Harmony more than Spike. There was always something about Spike that irked me so killing him was in one way for my own personal pleasure and in another just to show that in this world anyone can die. The same reason they killed Doyle back in Angel Season 1.

The whole Fred/Illyria thing was my way of explaining her unstable nature where by the end of the show she was showing emotions she wasn't suppose to possess.

Clark should know how to fight. This is probably a response to the STAS and JLU series where he was always seemingly getting beaten up by every two-bit villain. For god's sake he's Superman people!

Thanks for the review.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [7 May 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eleven" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
Wow, that's a lot to lay on the lanester all at once. I knew it Chloe/Willow sitting in a tree. LOL.
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [10 Feb 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
UH OH. Do I smell a Chloe/Willow pairing in the workings. :))
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [10 Feb 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from (Recent Donor)christytrekkie
I totally love you for this fic, I have to yell hooray someone finally gets that a soul cannot be destroyed. I love this fic and I am only on the third chap. I have to rec this. Love the interactions of all the characters and their reaction to Clark. Love that you brought Cordy back and made Angel live again without taking his powers. OOOh and I so hope that they can restore some of that hope and joy back into are lovely Lorne. Gosh love this fic. :))
Comments from author:
I guess it is a matter of faith about the soul and what can and cannot happen to it but i thought it explained Illyria's increasingly emotional behaviour that Fred's soul wasn't destroyed but retained within her.

Well i had to bring Cordy back really. While i did generally like the way Angel ended it did kind of irk me that he and Cordy never really had a chance to resolve anything about their relationship so i wasn't going to pass up a chance to do something about it.

Yeah poor Lorne. It was a very depressing ending for him in NFA.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Recent Donor)christytrekkie] • Date [7 Feb 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from BlackBettie
I actually finished reading this part of your series yesterday! I admire you and am in much awe of your dedication and devotion to your work! You have yet again completed a masterpiece and reeled me in! Ignore what others say! Just because of a few grammtical flaws, doesn't mean anything! Every work of art has few mistakes! Just keep doing what you're doing! It's brilliant!

Much love and praise!


Comments from author:
Thanks again. Yeah a few errors tend to creep in occasionally. All i can say is thank god for my spell check or it would be a lot worse.
Review By [BlackBettie] • Date [15 Jun 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from Cristina
great ending for a great story.
Review By [Cristina] • Date [8 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Sixteen" from (Current Donor)Tempi
Great story. I look forward to reading the next part.
Comments from author:
Thanks. I hope to get it up as soon I can. At the moment it is a work in progress and not ready yet.
Review By [(Current Donor)Tempi] • Date [15 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Cristina
Buffy and Clark are so cute.

Thank you for an update it really made my day.
Comments from author:
Wow not sure what to say to that. I'm glad you like my story and took the time to write a review. Thanks.
Review By [Cristina] • Date [11 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from londeaux
Great series. It would be interesting twist if Clark and Buffy learned that they weren't soulmates, but a certain smartmouth is certainly his. A possible third in the realtionship.
Review By [londeaux] • Date [10 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Current Donor)Tempi
Great chapter. I look forward to the next one.

Willow might have been too drained to teleport him, but why didn't Martian Manhunter fly Clark over to the sunny side of the Earth, so he could heal faster?
Comments from author:
Ok i suppose J'onn could have but A, he himself was hurt and B, for my purposes I needed Clark laid up for a little while. Thank you for your review.
Review By [(Current Donor)Tempi] • Date [19 Sep 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
Oh I forgot to ask, is the Blue kryptonite going to effect Buffy somehow? Or did we save it for another purpose I wonder?
Comments from author:
Wait and see about that.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [17 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
that seemed a little too easy, getting rid of the phantom. I wonder if we will be seeing more of him soon.

I also have doubts about Spike being really dead this time. but I guess I will have to wait to find out on both points. that was a really good chapter. I am looking forward to more.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [17 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from (Past Donor)FireDragon
ACK!!! Poor Buffy. Poor Clark. I really hope you won't keep us waiting too long for the next update. a cliffy like that could cause riots.
Review By [(Past Donor)FireDragon] • Date [12 Sep 08] • Not Rated
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