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Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from Tjin
Review:
Very interesting.
Comments from author:
Meh. This was from when I had more ideas then writing sense.

Really kind of overpowered only shares the name with the character kind of story as I waqsn't good enough at the time to write the physcological and emotional things I was trying to do.

Had a lot of big plans for it, but they all fizzled and died. Still remember the plot ideas though. But they're really cliche now that I think about them, and I'd fail at adding a unique twist if I tried to use them.

Thanks for the review though, its been a long time since I thought about this story, it was nice to be reminded.
Review By [Tjin] • Date [26 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from SCIfilover
Review:
I know that this review is late but still this story is awesome, i loved the way you managed to assign the btvs characters to warhammer 40k stations such as Willow and Oz to be priests and how a Grey Knight should act, excellent. However, despite it being good, their are a few problems such as your rushing of Xander's character change. It felt more like you go rid of Xander except for his body and put the Grey Knights personality in their with some Xander traits such as giving mercy to Buffy. You also have not clarified the relationship between BTVS Earth and the Warhammer 40k universe, is it Holy Terra's past, A parallel Earth whose warp is connected to the warp of WH40k warp or whatever?. Also, how do the demons of the Buffyverse know about GEOM. But i do agree on one very important fact, the so called demons of btvs, angel and warhammer like to talk trash about GEOM, but if he were to appear in front of them, they would void their bowels because he is the muthafuckin God-Emperor!!!!. Anyway, will their be a sequel?


Also please update the series 'HERO', i really enjoyed that series above all else. Good luck in all you future endeavors.
Comments from author:
The review might be late, but its still appreciated, and my comments even later.

Anyway, yeah the story had some problems. It was one of the first ones I tried to write, so I fell into some of the comon problems with Halloween story genre.

Never really decided what to do about the warp. I had this whole story line planned out with Rayne trying to sacrfice the entire planet to the warp to become a daemon lord, with Xander opposing him. More and more people get involved as the fight becomes public, eventually turning Earth into a minature empire, with Xander as the Emperor. Of course he would never dare assume that title, and would lead earth in a glorious assuslt apon the stars, eventually reconnecting with the WH40k verse, where the story would end.

And yes, the Buffy verse demons have nothing on WH40k demons, let alone the almight God-Emperor

No sequel planned, that story is basically done with unless I end up with unheard of amounts of free time, like 50hr days, which will never happen
Review By [SCIfilover] • Date [20 Nov 10] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from CameronYoung
Review:
Damn you. Damn you to Ch'thulu's tender mercies. Now I want to write a "Xander as High Ranking Space Marine and Willow as The Queen of Blades." and I don't know enough about WH 40K to write it right (any similar ideas as to what Buffy could go as? You know, if we op 2 of 'em might as well op the third). I hope you're happy now. On another note, the best responce to long winded flames is to marvel for a moment at how much free time they have then tell them that you're happy they feel that strongly about something.
Comments from author:
Lol, sorry for making the plot bunnies attack.

And for buffy, possbily the pre-Zerg Sarah?

As for the flames, well, I like answering them if I can.

Sorry for the slow reply and thank you for the review.
Review By [CameronYoung] • Date [1 Sep 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from Razial
Review:
Now this was an awesome story, the way you managed to assighn certian characrters to the chaos gods was very well done. I have never seen the two worlds combined so well. I would love to see you continue this arc, is there any chance of a sequel? The actions of Xander, Willow, Oz and Jenny is becoming followers of the emperor was also well scripted and very unique.

David
Comments from author:
Thanks.

I might continue it eventually, but for now its dead.
and yeah, each was meant to have their own role. Willow as an Inquisitor, Jenny as a techpriest, Buffy and Fait as Battle Sisters, and Oz would be...soemthing, hand't quite figured him out. I even had their back stories worked out.

Buffy would run to La where she'd encounter the interdimensional slavers and find that one of her scool mates had willingly let himself be taken captive to preahc about the Emperor to the other slaves and stage a rebellion, eventually martying himself, which would put her on the path.

Jenny would find the power Moloch left behind still floating around on the web and computers, and mistake it as machine spirits. and of course belief has a power of its own, so the power would eventually become mahcine spirits, which when combined with her technopaganism would have the Machine God Cult.

and Willow, well, her story was basically told already.
Review By [Razial] • Date [17 Jun 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from xandersgirl
Review:
Oh please continue this, it's brilliant!
Comments from author:
sorry, no real plans to continue it yet. I have an outline and ideas, but no real urge to type them up.
Review By [xandersgirl] • Date [28 May 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from evilredknight
Review:
Yawn, Oh look another Xander-Sue story.
I was hoping for something interesting, instead we got the same-old, same old.
Did you go down the checklist of Xander-Sue requirements or what?
Xander becomes way overpowered compared to the other heroes of the story. Check
Most of the women worship his new strength and skills. Check
Buffy shows up as either jealous or incompetent. Check
Xander puts Buffy in her place, and shows her how it realy should be done. Check

I get your take on the whole Angel/Buffy thing. I do.
The first time Angel showed up, I basically figured out what he was and what was going to happen. And yes, I rolled my eyes.
I don't like the Angel character. As far as I'm concerned he's a statutory raping asshole who took advantage of a young girls infatuation.

But while you hated what the show did compared to what to you must have seemed obvious - He's evil now so just kill him.
You forget it's at it's heart a human drama. Will Buffy find the strength to do what she must after all other options have been extinguished?
Most stories fail to show what have been one of her main reasons for not killing him right away.
Her guilt over causing this change from Angel to Angelus in the first place.
We know from canon that Buffy does find the strength to do what she has to.
In your's she's a weak stupid bubble-head run out of town by a REAL hero.

But guess what?
By getting rid of the human drama, your story is boring.
Of course a 12 foot tall power armored psychic is going to win that battle, but because it's so obvious why should we care?
We certainly don't care about Alexander the Grey Knight as a person.
He's a budding Big Bad in his own right.
Now that would have been an interesting story.
Ultra fanatical Space Marine comes to town with the avowed purpose of cleansing the world and creating a zealot driven world government.
where anyone who disagreed was a heretic and traitor.
With the idea being is his cure worse then the disease

And lets say Buffy did what you wanted her to do - kill Angelus as soon as she knew he was there.

I can just see it.

"Hey Buffy Angels soul is gone, and his demon is back in control."

"Oh? OK Willow I'll just go take care of that now."

"So Buffy is it done?"

"Ya, good fight, but I staked him in the end. Such a shame. He was such a hottie, and not bad in the sack. Or at least I think he was good. Hay Willow, If a guy lasts 3 minutes before he comes thats a long time right? Why are you laughing at me? What do you mean no! Well at least he had a big dick, cuz 3 inches is a big dick right? Why are you laughing so hard? Stop rolling on the floor! What do you mean pencil dick? Xander how big is your um...thing? HOW BIG?! Oh God, I can't believe I gave my cherry to that putz. Hay Willow, do you think you can resurrect him? I want to dust him again. Stupid vampire, can't trust any of them even if he did have a soul. So Giles what do we do now? What do you mean thats it? Angel ?! Angel, was our big bad?!"
(5 minutes pass)
"Hay Willow I'm bored, lets do something. I don't know. Your the smart one, you think of something."
(5 minutes pass again)
"Oh Willow! I got the perfect thing. You and I start a lesbian love affair so that when the next slayer gets called when Kendra dies, she's all jealous of or relationship cuz' she's got the hots for me and it drives her to join next years Big Bad. Why not Xander? Sorry Xander, after Angel, I'm swearing off guys for a while. And Willow's a total hottie. And people love super powered lesbians!"

The next 3 months of the 2nd season of Buffy the Vampire Slayer TV show is basically lesbian porn, because if you kill the Big Bad halfway thru the season there's not much left to do. (Highest rating ever though)

I think some interesting things could have been explored with this bunny, to bad you went for a straight up Xander-Sue
Comments from author:
I'm not sure if I should consider this my first real flame...but I have to say I consider it to be hilarious.

I'll be honest, its been months since I've even looked at this story, years since I've read it, and honestly I don't care about it enough right now to go back and read it just to perfectly answer your review, even if it amused me, so I'll just wing it with my spotty memories.

First off, maybe xander is a Sue and maybe not. Yes Xander is overpowered compared to the rest of the heores, but someone always has to be the most powerful. Second, it wasn't meant to stay that way, which ties into the plot I had planned and will probably never actually write as I've lost interest in the story.

I do know the show was a drama one, but does that honestly matter when its fanfiction? I do admire BTVS ability to combine drama and action, but I was crossing it with WH40K, the most drama in that is usually a person's fight to save their soul from chaos, not the star crossed lovers kind.

And yes, without the drama it may have been boring to you persoanlly, but I prefer action and fighting to drama. Drama is boring and I get enough of it in everyday life, where as alien invasions or demonic hordes are sadly rather rare.

Amusingly, you kind of guessed my future plot plans for where I was goign to take the story. Part of the reason I treated Buffy so harshly was becuase I wanted to partly break her down as I needed her to run to La where she would find those demons with the human slaves, and run into one of Willows converts there who willingly goes into that Hell to help the humans and preach. This would have been the start of her character rebuilding with more Warhammer traits, much like with Oz and Willow. In her case as a temple Assasin, focused on demonic threats. This would then tie in with Xander's main story of trying to chase down Rayne before he succeeds in throwing Earth into the Warp. along the way I had planned for Jenny Calender to find the remains of Moloch's power still floating around in the internet from when he was cut from it and hae her mistake it for a machine spirit, starting the tech priest cult. This would have eventually eneded with a huge battle as the Mayor tries to ascend into the Prince of a Thousand Faces, Ethan Rayne pulls a khornate Blood Thirster into the material plane, and Xander and his army of converts fight them to the death.
Alas, I lost interest so all I ahev are notes and an outline that will never see the light of day. So while I don't hav drama, I did intend to have plenty of action. what you read was meant to be a first chapter bt it stood well enough alone that I left it that way.

As for that last bit of review...WTF are you smoking? I'm not quite sure if that is supposed to be a commentary on my story or just your general idea of what you think would have happened if Angel had died. Either way, I have to ask where that thought came from cause it sure wasn't on my 'Top Ten Ways The Season could Have Gone if Angel Died.'

Anyway, thank yu for the rather amusing review and I have to say I am amazed you actually found the story and made it through the whole thing, I didn't have a beta reader back then.
Review By [evilredknight] • Date [18 Feb 10] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from LordSia
Review:
Bless'd be the Emperor, for He leads us through the Night,
Faith in Him is my Shield, my Sword, my Armour, my Steed,
Bless'd be the Emperor, for He protects us with His Might,
for Him and His cause we Struggle, we Toil, we Labour, we Bleed,
Bless'd Be!

An absolutely Epic rendition. Love it. If you won't continue, please give the word, make it a challenge, or just open it for others to add more chapters. It's to good to let it end there.

Thought for the day: Have Faith in the Emperor, and the Emperor shall have Faith in You.
Comments from author:
I do have plans to continue it, but as more of a series of connected oneshots then an actual story. However, I wish to finish one of my other stories before I go back it it.
Failing that, I will post a final chapter of my notes for where the plot was planned to go.
Review By [LordSia] • Date [7 Jan 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from Orchamus
Review:
AWESOMMEEE!
Comments from author:
Thanks
Review By [Orchamus] • Date [6 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from Vilkath
Review:
One the better 40k cross overs I have read, far to many of them have Xander's mind taken over by Chaos and then basically make him a worthless puppet in armor. That or just go incomplete right after Halloween. I loved that the faith of the emperor could spread, that forces of chaos were on earth though I think it was a bit much they were 40k gods of chaos. I would of expected rival gods or previously unheard of ones to be in Xander's universe/galaxy.

I think one my favorite parts is of course the Angel/Buffy aspect of this story, few authors have the guts to really put them down. I never understood how Buffy could side with Angel, a new boyfriend over her friends, family and random innocents of Sunnydale. Not mention she always acted like Angel was some great champion, one the world would miss. He has a soul, and he has potential to do good but until Sunnydale he did nothing but brood for about a century.. he's no Hero, just a potential one. One who also needs a pat on the back all the time and only helps if can look good in front of his girlfriend. Not to mention Angel isn't fighting the good fight just to do good and make up for his past, he's doing it for the promised reward of his humanity. In that my mind, fighting for a prize puts Angel firmly behind anyone who does it freely of their own choice.
Comments from author:
I'll admit I wrote a story like that after I read the Warhammer 40k book, "Storm of Iron." It was fun too.
Currently the story is incomplete, I have some ideas to run with it, including Techppriest Jenny and Inquisitor willow. First though i'd like to finish some of the series i have before going back to it.
As for the gods of chaos being on earth, well, the Warhammer Universe has enough worlds that Earth could easily be one more world colonized and lost during the Dark Age of Technology, never found during the Emperor's crusade. The fact that the solar system mimics that of Terra's is just a cruel joke on the part of the gods.

I'll be honest, I have to go reread my story to remeber what part your talking about, as I haven't really looked it over in a while. Still, you summed up my whole interpretation of the Angel/Buffy dynamic in the actual cannon universe, and that tends to reflect in my writing.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [9 Sep 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from prehensileclaw
Review:
I promise I am not a mindless fangirl. I just keep reading your stuff and it is all wonderful. I should have found this stuff sooner. I love warhammer lore and this was an excellent homage to it.
Comments from author:
Thank you.
I don't play the table top game, but I love to read the books.
Review By [prehensileclaw] • Date [22 Jun 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from Bobboky
Review:
this story is amazing.... maybe you could do a couple one shots about some of the face offs with other big bads...
Comments from author:
Eventually, someday..maybe...
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [17 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
Review:
I loved it. Needs a sequel, though. Maybe Xander can meet the local version of the God-Emporer and point him on his way.
Comments from author:
I don't currently have any plans for a sequel as I don't quite know where to take it, as I need to give Xander some kind of a challenege. Eventually I'll get around to it though.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [12 Apr 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from RogueNine
Review:
Wow, I can't believe I only found this now. Great work, I hope to see it continued sometime soon.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [RogueNine] • Date [2 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from (Past Donor)JamieT
Review:
Damn

An extremely good story, though i wish you would bulk it out a little

I imagine this is somewhat of a oneshot, but do please expand on it if you can. I'm sure i would not be the only one who would like to see this continued!
Comments from author:
Sorry about the delayed comment and thank you for the review.
I do plan to continue it eventually after I kill some more plot bunnies.
Review By [(Past Donor)JamieT] • Date [4 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Suffer not the Daemon to Live" from UncleJoe
Review:
Phew.....damm...this this is excellent stuff...depicted perfectly and i would just love to see a Grey Knight Alexander/ Alucard showdown...that would so damm cool especially if Paladin Alexander could turn up as well. Also I may not know the actually table top game very well but i love the books and i do have all three of the grey knight novels. but somfin i would love to see is a Xander/ Commisar Cain crossover if your familiar with that particular character
Comments from author:
Well, thats the plan for sometime in the future when college stops taking so much time.
As for the Commisar Cain idea, well, I've toyed around with it some, but I'm a real slow writer cause I end up redoing everything to try and make it perfect. However, I will attempt a oneshot for my Halloween collection of the crossover. No promises on when though.
Review By [UncleJoe] • Date [5 Sep 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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