Review of chapter "Of Cure and Dreams" from APhantasm
You have a plot hole.
In Keys to Pegasus in the chapter where John winds up 50,000 years in the future you have Dawn giving birth to a son.
In this chapter you now have Dawn being unable to conceive due to an injury she received before coming to Atlantis.
So how did she have a son in the alternate future John went to if she has always been unable to conceive?
Its a major plot hole, it can't be both ways. Unless the son in the alternate future was a miracle baby. She would have to be able conceive so that means the part of the plot for this chapter doesn't work.
Review By [APhantasm
] • Date [12 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from SamuraiSky
I have thoroughly enjoyed this series. I am looking forward to reading the next installment. Your description of each character and events really draws me into the story.
Review By [SamuraiSky
] • Date [28 Jun 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Mordare
Awesome story. I am looking forward to reading the rest of the series.
Review By [Mordare
] • Date [14 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from CaptainBoulanger
One quick quibble - you renamed the Kat-tail...
Review By [CaptainBoulanger
] • Date [28 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from RaeJoy
Love this series. Thanks.
Review By [RaeJoy
] • Date [30 Sep 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from maxthehobbit
The characters you created, especially Les and Kathy are brilliant and add so much to the story. It amazes me how you tied the two different time lines together without getting totally lost, and you didn't leave any loose ends, which can be a challenge at times. Great job on this story, just wish you would reread it before publishing it to weed out the grammar, typos etc. mistakes.
Thanks for sharing this great story.
Review By [maxthehobbit
] • Date [18 Jul 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from BillieBog
I just found this series and have been reading for a week. I loved the movie Continiuum and really loved your take on it. You write wonderfully, great plot, continuity, characterization. Thanks so much for sharing your work.
Review By [BillieBog
] • Date [3 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Of Plans and Nigglings" from Taryn
If this wasn't already complete I'd kick you right now. Damn you and your cliffhangers!
P.S. Awesome story/series
Review By [Taryn
] • Date [3 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from PhoenixRe
Well, this is was better than you previous one mostly because of the originality factor. I really liked the story you came up with, the domestic-somehow- life of the couple, little adventures here and there and the interweaving of various characters...
Review By [PhoenixRe
] • Date [4 Mar 10] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Vld
Okay, i have read both stories in a few days and will start the next one soon, and truthfully... i'm pretty much at a lack for words. I kept thinking theories about anything and everything during all Dawn's stay on Pegasus and all of her time in the altered timeline, some proven true, some discarded (i KNEW Kathy was the heroin of the Prophecy this time!!! YAY!)
You introduced some pretty cool characters (namely, Alicia and Les, and of course Lexi and Kathy) and even the less important ones you did something good with. Desiree, Jess, Cecilia, even Mandy, who barely made an appearance got some really good treatment.
I'm rather thankful that Alicia and Les didn't get to meet in the original timeline, because i think it would have been one of these Niagara Falls moments... i mean in terms of sadness, on both Dawn, Ronon and Les's part. The part with Connor was good, though. And i'm wondering which dead champion will make his appearance as a PTB messenger next.
Kay, guess i'm less lacking in words than i thought.
I'm not mentioning people from either shows because... well, you got them dead-on. Including the way they would react to things. Pretty much perfect.
I loved Dawn's explanation of Drusilla to Connor, reminded me of Connor's own explanation in "Freakazoid High" which is still at this day one of my Top Ten fanfcitions. And i think you just made it in as well.
Review By [Vld
] • Date [14 Aug 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from alexceasar
I love this. You have written the characters so beautifully and its just wonderful. Good job.
Review By [alexceasar
] • Date [15 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from lucidity
Another fantastic adventure completed. This was amazingly good, and I'm sorry to see it end, but you wrapped it up so well. Very impressive. Really good. Magnificent. And so on.
I love you and want to offer you my fortune in quarters, but my husband will get mad if I give away the laundry money. So ... no shiny gifts for you. Just a dose of encouragement and love.
Thanks for writing, and keep up the great work!
Review By [lucidity
] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from vladt
my deepest apologies. have read the first two sections to your fine tale without commenting. the voice of your characters is fantastic. the tale you tell is very, very good. thank you for the fine read/
Review By [vladt
] • Date [3 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Obsidian
WOW you sure know how to pull at heart strings. I loved this story. Had me laughing, crying (literally) and every emotion in between.
Review By [Obsidian
] • Date [20 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from moonstarsfu
This story is freaking fantastic!!!! I loved "Keys to Pegasus" and couldn't wait to start this one but finals got in the way. I finally got the time to read it the weekend, which I did in one go. This story is amazing. I just love the relationship between Dawn and Ronon. I'm so happy that Kathy and Les survived the time shift as I loved their characters. And I'm choosing to believe that now that Connor has some of the memories from the other time line, that he and Alicia got together after Dawn and Ronon left. Great job with this, it is definitely one of the best stories I have ever read (along with "Keys to Pegasus", of course *grins*) and I can't wait to start "Command Key"!!
Review By [moonstarsfu
] • Date [11 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]