While I am a great fan of the dark-hunters, and while I enjoy your plot line, I just cannot enjoy your story. Part of the problem is the spelling, but more important is the weird rushing of the story, total OOC for Dawn and Acheron, and, well, there are quite a few problems with the story. I would recommend to write slower and not speed through the story. Try and find a beta reader, and don't post immediately after writing something.

Chaja

I'm very confused.

I am still getting help with the editing this story.

You probably need a beta reader for this story, the spelling is rather problematical, I can still guess/understand what you mean, but the mistakes takes me right out of the story... Also your characterization of Dawn and the other could use a little work. For someone who hasn't read any of Sherrilyn Kenyon's work, it would be impossiple to understand who Wulf, Cassandra and Urian are. Also Dawn's reactions to her new situation (being in the dark-hunter universe) seems a bit disjointed. You have a really nice story idea, and the plot definitely has some potential, but it seems as though you are rushing the scenes a bit, in order to get the story going, and the characterizations suffer for it. Still, thanks for sharing your work, and enjoy writing.

Tals

I wanted to start off the story with Dawn trying to deny that anything wrong was happening in her life. She did live in the denial capital of the world: Sunnydale.

I will add background for Wulf, Cassandra, Chris and Urian. I have only had a beta for the last two chapters, for my spelling/grammar.

Thanks, so much for your review.

*laughing hysterically* Please keep this going, it's too funny!!!!

*laughing hysterically* Please keep this going, it's too funny!!!!

lols and Squees.

We has an ASH *frolics happily*

Ash will be in the next chapter, too. lol

LOLs

Unexpected. . . . but sort of shows the boys her vulnerable side.

Great fic

OKAY i'll I can say is HUH???? You seriouly mixed stuff up without having a why. I am very confused...

Later and Love
Bunney

I should never write at 2:00 am in the morning.

*laughing hysterically* Please keep going, this is hilarious!

typo *g* prey= pray.

I'm loving this fic *umms* although you keep spelling Wulf as Wolf

LOLs. I only just re-read that one, am now re-reading Acheron. Speaking of which *begs* whens our favorite boy going to turn up (older then dirt boy but boy none the less.)

*cackles* although it could be fun to have her remember both lives (who she is as well as who she was).

chaos

I have the book right infront of me. And, I still spelled Wulf wrong. ha ha.

I don't think there will be a need for Acheron, yet. Urian can protect Chris if he needs a babysitter.

You know I don't have the right to complain about somebody's else spelling and gramma, because mines not that good either, but yours terrible.

I wrote this chapter very late at night. I know, I should not have done that. Don't whip me!

Great story interesting premise bit of a slow start but looking forward to more chapters!

its good, but I felt that the chapter needed to be a bit longer.... I hope you post more soon.

*giggling* Please continue, this is going to be amusing!