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Review of chapter "Mate" from chajalive
Review:
While I am a great fan of the dark-hunters, and while I enjoy your plot line, I just cannot enjoy your story. Part of the problem is the spelling, but more important is the weird rushing of the story, total OOC for Dawn and Acheron, and, well, there are quite a few problems with the story. I would recommend to write slower and not speed through the story. Try and find a beta reader, and don't post immediately after writing something.

Chaja
Review By [chajalive] • Date [11 Dec 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Were-Hunter" from RemyDesire
Review:
I'm very confused.
Comments from author:
I am still getting help with the editing this story.
Review By [RemyDesire] • Date [28 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "whiskey and cigarettes" from tals
Review:
You probably need a beta reader for this story, the spelling is rather problematical, I can still guess/understand what you mean, but the mistakes takes me right out of the story... Also your characterization of Dawn and the other could use a little work. For someone who hasn't read any of Sherrilyn Kenyon's work, it would be impossiple to understand who Wulf, Cassandra and Urian are. Also Dawn's reactions to her new situation (being in the dark-hunter universe) seems a bit disjointed. You have a really nice story idea, and the plot definitely has some potential, but it seems as though you are rushing the scenes a bit, in order to get the story going, and the characterizations suffer for it. Still, thanks for sharing your work, and enjoy writing.

Tals
Comments from author:
I wanted to start off the story with Dawn trying to deny that anything wrong was happening in her life. She did live in the denial capital of the world: Sunnydale.

I will add background for Wulf, Cassandra, Chris and Urian. I have only had a beta for the last two chapters, for my spelling/grammar.

Thanks, so much for your review.
Review By [tals] • Date [22 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Crazy People" from Almadynis
Review:
*laughing hysterically* Please keep this going, it's too funny!!!!
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crazy People" from Almadynis
Review:
*laughing hysterically* Please keep this going, it's too funny!!!!
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [14 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Crazy People" from Chaoskitten
Review:
lols and Squees.

We has an ASH *frolics happily*
Comments from author:
Ash will be in the next chapter, too. lol
Review By [Chaoskitten] • Date [13 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "whiskey and cigarettes" from Chaoskitten
Review:
LOLs

Unexpected. . . . but sort of shows the boys her vulnerable side.
Review By [Chaoskitten] • Date [10 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Escape" from DawnDreamer
Review:
Great fic
Review By [DawnDreamer] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Escape" from Bunney
Review:
OKAY i'll I can say is HUH???? You seriouly mixed stuff up without having a why. I am very confused...

Later and Love
Bunney
Comments from author:
I should never write at 2:00 am in the morning.
Review By [Bunney] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Escape" from Almadynis
Review:
*laughing hysterically* Please keep going, this is hilarious!
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Escape" from Chaoskitten
Review:
typo *g* prey= pray.

I'm loving this fic *umms* although you keep spelling Wulf as Wolf

LOLs. I only just re-read that one, am now re-reading Acheron. Speaking of which *begs* whens our favorite boy going to turn up (older then dirt boy but boy none the less.)

*cackles* although it could be fun to have her remember both lives (who she is as well as who she was).

chaos
Comments from author:
I have the book right infront of me. And, I still spelled Wulf wrong. ha ha.

I don't think there will be a need for Acheron, yet. Urian can protect Chris if he needs a babysitter.
Review By [Chaoskitten] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Escape" from WhiteWolf
Review:
You know I don't have the right to complain about somebody's else spelling and gramma, because mines not that good either, but yours terrible.
Comments from author:
I wrote this chapter very late at night. I know, I should not have done that. Don't whip me!
Review By [WhiteWolf] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guest" from Cataclysmic
Review:
Great story interesting premise bit of a slow start but looking forward to more chapters!
Review By [Cataclysmic] • Date [8 Oct 08] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guest" from Nightscream
Review:
its good, but I felt that the chapter needed to be a bit longer.... I hope you post more soon.
Review By [Nightscream] • Date [7 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Minnesota" from Almadynis
Review:
*giggling* Please continue, this is going to be amusing!
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [7 Oct 08] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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