Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Fact Finding Mission" from bradsan
I really wished you continued this good story. I want to see how Angel would react to be a daddy. So please will you please continue and make some happy readers.
Review By [bradsan
] • Date [24 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Fact Finding Mission" from Vickzie
Brilliant story!! Please update some more.
Review By [Vickzie
] • Date [11 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: Fact Finding Mission" from AllenPitt
Good thing they have Gideon to help them out now... I wonder how much Chris really knows about Buffy/her kid etc.....
Makes sense that Willy wouldn't know anything, the Charmed 'world' is totally separate from the Sunnydale 'world'.
Does the mayor have any connection to the Charmed demonic-type world?
Review By [AllenPitt
] • Date [23 Jan 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: New Slayer In Town" from payday
I just read it all and I love it. I like how everything is progressing. I hope when they do find Buffy that they put her fears to rest about how they would react, well i don't have much hope for Xander. I like how close the charmed ones are and how she has piper to help her with Madison. Good change you made by having faith kill kakistos early on. I wonder what kind of bond Wyatt and Madison have, I'm sure Chris knows more about that then he told the others. PMS :)
Review By [payday
] • Date [12 Nov 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: What Buffy Needs To Do" from Dootzbugg
It's a very interesting story so far, I look forward to reading more. As much as I like Angel/Buffy, I would really like to see a Chris/Buffy pairing as I think that would world really well and I think that they're adorable together.
Review By [Dootzbugg
] • Date [2 Nov 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from ebony
Review By [ebony
] • Date [13 Sep 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from Zoe
My. This story is really really good! I can't wait for you to update.
Review By [Zoe
] • Date [3 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from immortalwizardelffan
Hmmmmmm methinks that Vanessa and Wyatt are the incarnations of Arthur and Guinevere? After all Wyatt is the wielder of Excaliber and the New Arthur, so that would make Vanessa his Guinevere.
Comments from author:
wow, never thought of that lol...guess so.
Review By [immortalwizardelffan
] • Date [13 Feb 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from Joseph
Aw I love this
Review By [Joseph
] • Date [5 Feb 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from spring
It's been a long long time since I have read any Charmed fic so I reread this one. I love it. I have to wonder is Angel sane, will he go looking for Buffy? I love how Wyatt got rid of all of the demans that were after Buffy's baby, it seems he's rather protective of her already. More soon please.
Review By [spring
] • Date [18 Jan 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from FlipSideofMadness
Interesting story you have going here. Can't wait to read more and find out how things plays out.
Review By [FlipSideofMadness
] • Date [15 Jan 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from BuffyHalliwell
It's great so far!, I want to read more, you got me totally hooked here :P
Good job! :)
Review By [BuffyHalliwell
] • Date [12 Jan 09] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from WidgetMarsh
Just wanted to say I'm enjoying your fic and to keep up the good work.
Review By [WidgetMarsh
] • Date [2 Jan 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from spk
I'm definitely interested. My only issue was Willow having the Claddaugh ring when in chapter 1 you said Buffy took her jewelry (the cross & ring from Angel) with her when she left? :)
Comments from author:
i did didn't i? crap. guess that's what i get for not remembering that little tidbit. sorry....um i can fix it!!!
Review By [spk
] • Date [31 Dec 08] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Newcomers" from Cutiepie
OK, I believe we have a problem with the Claddaugh ring. First, Buffy returns home and takes it with her, and then Willow finds it in Buffy's locker? Which is it? And if Willow does find it, why on earth would she take it to the mansion and leave it? It seems more likely that she would want to hold on to it until Buffy comes back. I know that you are trying to mirror what happened in canon, but it doesn't work out logically for me.
As for the baby's name, I have a personal bias against the name Madison for a girl (I hate it), but you are free to use it if you want. I would think that Buffy would be more likely to choose a name that means something to her. For instance, she might name her daughter after her favorite cousin, the one whose death was mentioned in the first-season hospital-boogieman episode? Started with a C, I think, but I can't remember right now. Celia, maybe? Or maybe something to connect Angel to the baby, like Angelica or Angelina, or even Lia (from Liam). So, if Madison means something to Buffy, please explain what/how/why. Last question about the baby's name: Hebrew? Are you implying that Buffy chose the name Vanessa because of the meaning of the name Nessa in Hebrew? Where did that come from? Yes, it is a kind of fun thing, but it doesn't match up with the character of Buffy. Willow might make that connection, being Jewish, but Buffy never showed any aptitude for or enjoyment of languages, so it is very bizarre that it would come up. It just being a happenstance is fine, but in that case, you don't need to make any mention of it at all (or else you should have another character in the story bring it up if you want it as part of the story).
The timing on Buffy's pregnancy is a bit . . . blurry? You say that she is 8 months pregnant during the demon attack, but Piper says that she will be having the baby in a few months, and then Buffy goes into labor. Is the baby preemie, or not? It kind of sounds like not, but otherwise Piper's comment makes no sense whatsoever, and Piper (being the one who has had a baby) would be the one to know best of all the timing of a pregnancy.
You had Buffy go into labor very quickly (labor doesn't start out feeling very painful, by the way. It starts as mild pressure. and slowly builds up to pain), new demons attack them, and then the baby is born before that fight has even ended. For a first child, labor being that short is . . . not very realistic. Or else the fight was going on for multiple hours, which seems even more unrealistic.
Anyway, this is an interesting premise, and I am going to start tracking it to see where you take things. I hope you can/will address some/all of the problems I have had so far. I only tend to critique this way the stories that I think have potential to be really entertaining, so don't take my comments as trying to tear your story apart.
Comments from author:
it's totally fine...i'm horrible with the small details so it opened my eyes a little bit. as for the name...that will be explained in later chapters. the quick delivery...well i didn't want to go into what darla went through with connor and i thought that since it's a supernatural delivery in many ways it adds to the strangeness.
Review By [Cutiepie
] • Date [31 Dec 08] • Not Rated