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Review of chapter "Chapter 16: To Steal a Titan" from Jon
Nice shoutout to Star Trek III there. May the wind be at your back!
Review By [Jon] • Date [19 Oct 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 14: Election Day Disasters" from Difdi
> It looks like a nuclear warhead ramping up for detonation

And how exactly would they know what that looks like? Earth nuclear weapons don't do that -- an Earth nuke is a shell of plastic explosives around a sphere of plutonium, the 'ramping up' has the same electronic signature as an alarm clock and lasts for about one ten-thousandth of a second, then the nuke explodes. Sensors that can detect radiological materials will detect an Earth nuke whether it's switched on or not.

Colonial nukes apparently do that extensive ramping up, but unless the crew of the Prometheus have seen one go through that arming process before, it might look odd but wouldn't say "nuke" to the scanner operator. Since radiological materials can always be detected by any sensor that can detect them at all, this strongly implies Colonial nukes aren't actually nuclear weapons as people from Earth would know them at all -- perhaps they supercharge Tylium or something.

> with the power of her mind, erected a field around the pedestal

An Alteran ZPM isn't a generator that can reach critical mass, it's a water balloon that contains energy. A LOT of energy. They call them ZPMs in the show because that's what they're used to calling them -- that was the initial theory on how they worked (zero point energy) and by the time they discovered how the things actually worked, everybody was used to calling them that so they kept doing it.

This puts Pierce on the level of an outright capital-G Goddess, you realize? Releasing the energy in a ZPM at once doesn't destroy a city or a planet, it destroys the entire star system, including blowing the star apart. Three of them going off at once just ensures there won't even be dust left after. If you were to take every nuke ever detonated by Earth humans and combine them, it would be less powerful than a single exploding ZPM. If you were to take every nuke ever detonated by the COLONIALS you probably wouldn't equal a single exploding ZPM.

If Pierce can contain that, then she's not a human with talents, she's an Ascended disguised as a human at the very least. And not just any Ascended, she'd be the strongest of them to ever live.

At that power level, Pierce against all of the Ori would result in the Ori getting their intangible asses kicked.
Review By [Difdi] • Date [24 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18: Return to Avalon" from slmncpm
*laughs* finally caught up. i love it. thank you! *hands you scones*
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [23 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18: Return to Avalon" from Zyanadryn
This is the best BSG SG1 story I've ever read!!!
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [23 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 16: To Steal a Titan" from HMaxMarius
=D Really liking this story. Can't wait to see the rest of it. I did notice a couple problems just with chapter 16.

You've been calling MacMillian 'William' all story... suddenly his first reference here is 'Richard'...

Also, I think you mean Lt. Jennifer Hailey.

Hailey Mills is a 60's Disney child star most famous for the original 'Parent Trap' movie.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [22 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18: Return to Avalon" from hamishog
So that's been straightened out. Thought that there was some time discrepancies there what with them getting rescued before they'd actually been captured. McMillan...that's what airlocks were made for.
A replicator running the cylons --- that lot's got to go.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [22 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 18: Return to Avalon" from LostDragon
Only reason I didn't give you a ten is for making us wait so long. When I got a update notice about this story from my account I was shocked, hell I thought you had quit writing or died. Also, like yourself I'm going to have to go back and reread the story but that's no so bad since I seem to remember liking it, ,,, I think? ???

Jokes aside great chapter hope we don't have to wait so long for more.
Comments from author:
Uh... thanks?

I actually had quit writing for the most part. Every now and then I'd start writing something, but then I'd abandon it. I just haven't had the urge to write like I used to. But while this chapter was mainly meant to be a commercial for my Arrow story, I was surprised how easily I was able to slip back into this universe. I banged this chapter out in a day. So hopefully I'll get another one out soon.
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [22 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of story "Finding Avalon" from SnakeFox
You never uploaded chapters 13-17 here, I switched to tracking it on when I realised!
Comments from author:
Heh. I had forgotten I never uploaded those chapters here, and I didn't think to check. The missing chapters are now available.
Review By [SnakeFox] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated • Edit Comment
Review of story "Finding Avalon" from hamishog
I will admit when you said that McMillan was the new head of IOA or U or whatever my first though was 'this is what friendly fire is for'. Ultimately he wasn't just a poor choice for command he was evidence that whoever was pulling the strings 'on the ground' as it were was a complete and total moron. Hawkeye was the key to opening up Avalon. It would have been wrong according to her personality but had I command my first act would have been to dip her in amber and put her in the safe. Or maybe honey. Mmmmm...honey. Sorry. But she's a freaking treasure and they put a man who has a personal grudge against her in command. That is stupidity on a level of trench warfare. Men like that give men a bad name and should be neutered. Keep the gene pool clean. Or maybe just for fun.
Once again, sorry.
And if Janet reborn has a soul then though it might take some time maybe she and Cassie can come to terms. And whatever happened to Jack's clone. Shouldn't he be old enough to come out into the universe and commit mayhem? Inquiring minds want to know.
Review By [hamishog] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Finding Avalon" from AlphaBeta
Your missing several chapters. But this one was good. And welcome back!
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Jon
I'm enjoying the characterization a lot, though the way it's setup seems like a curbstomp for the Cylons in the medium term. Hope you will continue this someday!
Review By [Jon] • Date [17 Apr 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from (Past Donor)exiled
“William MacMillan is now the head of the I.O.A.- and our immediate boss.”

I think MacMillan needs to meet with an unfortunate accident. I hope you get back to this story one day, you were doing a great job with it.

Thank you for writing it, sharing your talents, and hardwork, it has given me many hours of fun.
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [27 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Vickzie
Oh Suger that's not good! Please update more soon
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [30 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from myrddyn
ok i gotta say this is the BEST stargate/bsg x-over that i have ever read! i do wish that you'd update it as i am really looking forward to reading more! so carry on with the good work soon please :)
Review By [myrddyn] • Date [3 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: They're Coming" from (Past Donor)Skyefather
Ok as this is my first review of this story I just got to say well done. I'd love to see more about "Hawkeye" like I know you said her mom was an Ancient but what about her grandpa Ben? Plez that would be so cool if she maybe told about spending summers with him in Crabapple Cove, Maine. just a thought ...and let me just say this. to hell with what other people say! write this story the way you want. your doing a great job the way you are. the Characters are so real and their interaction is believable. I think everyone should remember that this is Fan-Fiction. and as such being as we receive no money from it that we can make up any story we want Pair anyone we want in anyway we want(I've been toying with the Idea of a Thor/Bael pairing but thats just my sick mine after too many Espresso). I say have fun and I'd love to see who you end up pairing Hawkeye with.
Keep writing and don't let them get you down

Review By [(Past Donor)Skyefather] • Date [16 Nov 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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