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Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Jon
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I'm enjoying the characterization a lot, though the way it's setup seems like a curbstomp for the Cylons in the medium term. Hope you will continue this someday!
Review By [Jon] • Date [17 Apr 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from (Past Donor)exiled
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“William MacMillan is now the head of the I.O.A.- and our immediate boss.”

I think MacMillan needs to meet with an unfortunate accident. I hope you get back to this story one day, you were doing a great job with it.

Thank you for writing it, sharing your talents, and hardwork, it has given me many hours of fun.
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [27 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Vickzie
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Oh Suger that's not good! Please update more soon
Review By [Vickzie] • Date [30 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from myrddyn
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ok i gotta say this is the BEST stargate/bsg x-over that i have ever read! i do wish that you'd update it as i am really looking forward to reading more! so carry on with the good work soon please :)
Review By [myrddyn] • Date [3 Sep 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One: They're Coming" from (Past Donor)Skyefather
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Ok as this is my first review of this story I just got to say well done. I'd love to see more about "Hawkeye" like I know you said her mom was an Ancient but what about her grandpa Ben? Plez that would be so cool if she maybe told about spending summers with him in Crabapple Cove, Maine. just a thought ...and let me just say this. to hell with what other people say! write this story the way you want. your doing a great job the way you are. the Characters are so real and their interaction is believable. I think everyone should remember that this is Fan-Fiction. and as such being as we receive no money from it that we can make up any story we want Pair anyone we want in anyway we want(I've been toying with the Idea of a Thor/Bael pairing but thats just my sick mine after too many Espresso). I say have fun and I'd love to see who you end up pairing Hawkeye with.
Keep writing and don't let them get you down

*Hugs&Kisses*
Review By [(Past Donor)Skyefather] • Date [16 Nov 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Risty
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Your story is brilliant. I have never actyually seen Battlestar but now I am going to steal my brothers dvd collection. Thanks!
Review By [Risty] • Date [6 Sep 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from CharmingStar
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excellent story... i cant wait to read more...
Review By [CharmingStar] • Date [11 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Morgomir
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Amazing story. Keep up the great work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [3 May 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Dragonelf
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::Gives the plot bunny some Waldorf Salad::

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The reverse side also has a reverse side.
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [3 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: Arrival" from BarbarossaRotbart
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The stargate part was good, except for some things:
- Avalon is really too big. we all know that Atlantis is the most important ancient city/ship in the Pegasus Galaxy and even the Asuran have not build a bigger city/ship (they have build their city around the ship).
- 'Hawkeye' Pierce. It is really too tempting too create a character that is more powerfull than the regular characters. And that is the problem. But I think that you have solved that good enough. BTW it seems that every character with the surname Pierce gets the nickname Hawkeye.
- Why aren't the Asgard and the Jaffa not interested in the ZPMs?
- Sam/Jack. It is totally overrated and has absolutely no impact on the story. It is unnecessary, because they are not your main characters. It would have been much better if you kept the relationships canon, and that would have meant that they choose not to act on their feelings and that there is a romance starting between Weir and Sheppard (which BTW ended sad in canon).
- Cadets on a prototype during its shakedown cruise and they are not on their cadet cruise? That's so unrealistic. Make them Second Lieutenants fresh out of academy. That would be much better.
Comments from author:
I'll respond to each point:

1. It's fanfiction. Things are going to change with each writers ideas.

2. I've had a lot of comments about Hawkeye. She's a case of 'either you like her, or you don't' it seems. And yes, I named her deliberately. I think I had just watched M*A*S*H when I began plotting this story.

3. They are interested, but they recognize that the Earth ships need them far more then they do at the moment. I believe I wrote that all ships will be outfitted eventually, but Earth ships get first crack.

4. Sam/Jack: You lost me when you said, in your message, that Sam had a 'relationship' with Rodney McKay and JANET FRASIER. She's developed a friendship and camaraderie of sorts with Rodney- any relationship was in HIS head (Grace Under Pressure, I believe). As for Janet- they were friends, nothing more was EVER hinted at. Yes, she did have other relationships over the course of the series, but they all failed, didn't they?

This is a Sam/Jack story, though that relationship doesn't have a lot to do with the story- it's just there.

5. Yes, I know it's unrealistic. I felt the same way, but I needed certain characters and it was equally unrealistic for them to just suddenly be officers.

Thanks again for the review!
Review By [BarbarossaRotbart] • Date [2 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from BarbarossaRotbart
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The last four chapters were good enough.
Review By [BarbarossaRotbart] • Date [2 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: They're Coming" from BarbarossaRotbart
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Good idea for s crossover, but there is just one thing I really hate in this story. Why did you have to include that totally overrated Sam/Jack romance that BTW was only supported for a short time by the series and is completely out of character for both Sam and Jack.
Comments from author:
First- I thank you for your review. As for the Sam/Jack question- it's been supported since Season 1, and has been hinted at throughout the entire run of SG-1 ('Grace', anyone?) minus the last season, to be fair, and that was probably only due to RDAs' limited involvement. Also, if I remember correctly, when Sam takes over Atlantis she brings a framed picture of Jack, implying that they have possible begun a relationship since his retirement. There was never any blatant relationship while he was active, though, because those are the regs and Stargate was heavily sponsored and endorsed by the Air Force.

Of course, that's just my interpretation.

Thanks again for the review!
Review By [BarbarossaRotbart] • Date [2 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from Alora
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I was so happy to see that this story had an update. It is one of the stories I check for a new chapter. I do love this cross, and seeing Jack as part of it made my day. Especially the interaction between him, Daniel and Carter. Just classic. There were a few grammatical errors, but nothing major. I wonder how Laura, Adama, Tigh and Starbuck are going to react to the Stargate and the Stargate Network. Not to mention the Wraith, Goa'uld, Jaffa, and all the other aliens. As well as how the fleet is going to take the news of where Humans evolved and the fact that Earth no longer worships the Gods that they do. Should be interesting. And a new head of IOA should also mix things up.

Keep writing!! Interesting tale.
Review By [Alora] • Date [1 May 09] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 12: A New Dawn" from RevDorothyL
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What a way to poop on an otherwise lovely day: the bad guy gets to fail upward and become an even bigger pain in everyone's butt!

Good thing the U.S. president likes Jack so much, is all I can say.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [1 May 09] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: Of Religion and Cylons" from cflat
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Nice banner. I hope you add chapters on ff.net sometime soon; I want to see how they get out of that situation!

You know, when I was re-reading this chapter, I noticed something...

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“Though some of the Colonials need medical care soon.” Teal’c added.
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In the previous chapters, the Colonials did not say where they were from so then Teal'c could not have known to call them Colonials.
Review By [cflat] • Date [1 May 09] • Not Rated
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