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Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Gideon
Review:
She should have cleaned up the head as well as the body! Sloppy I tell you, sloppy! And I can think of many ways her 'bit on the side' with Colby could go wrong, what if he sees her picture when Don is investigating her. Awkward!
Comments from author:
she was in a lot of pain from the burns, so her not thinking straight about that is understandable. And Don just gave Charlie the paperwork on his background check of her...no need for a photo....she's not under investigation in the Slayer case...yet.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [16 Jul 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Two" from Mcspender
Review:
I'm sorry, it's quite a good story and all, and you're quite a good writer, but... I can't find a single point of sympathy for your OC in this fic.
Maybe it's the title of the fic, sounds very... santimonious in my opinion, and the thing about protecting inmortals and vampires? Sound pretty flimsy and kinda mary-sueish to me.
But that's just my opinion =).
Anyway, cool chapter, see ya =).
Comments from author:
well, part of the reason why you might have problems with Alissa is that you're jumping into her story mid-series...need to read the rest of the series to get more of a hold of who and what she is...She's not a Mary Sue, by any means...she just has more problems than she can let on, at least in the 21st century. As for the facial recog software- it really is being worked on.
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [13 Mar 10] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from leelaa
Review:
Damn good so far. But it's been so so SO LONG since an update. I've been checking in on this story for ages, in hopes there might be an update this time or the next time or... It's too good to be abandoned, & I'm scared that you seem to have utterly done just that. Please don't do that. Coax the muses back out of hiding and update soon. Please.
Comments from author:
no, not, haven't forgotten...have the notebook with me when I went on this trip..just haven't gotten around to posting more...working on that now :)
Review By [leelaa] • Date [13 Mar 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dragonelf
Review:
This looks like a promising start and I am already looking forward to read whatever the plot bunny decides to throw at you.

::Gives the plot bunny some chocolate carrot cake and a writer's block smashing mallet::

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If you are planning for a year, sow rice;
if you are planning for a decade, plant trees;
if you are planning for a lifetime, educate people.
- Chinese Proverb
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Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [29 Sep 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PATM
Review:
Looks promising and will read eagerly when you update soon. Having a need to mess with the
Gov'mint is next to suicidal good luck to her.
Review By [PATM] • Date [28 Sep 08] • Not Rated
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