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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordSia
Review:
Nice. Pity you haven't followed it up.
Comments from author:
Sorry, This was always meant to be a one shot... any following story would be very dark as Xander tries to get over Tara, the Initiative and the blood on his hands.

-Tjin
Review By [LordSia] • Date [16 Nov 10] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Vilkath
Review:
I like this story, mostly because the ending was rather satisfying. Far to many these 'the initiative experimented on Xander' fics end up with him not killing any of those responsible. Most common in Marvel type cross overs where Xander is either a mutant or they think he is a mutant.

It's always disappointing to see Xander and god knows how many other people go through nameless horrors under Walsh and such.. then Buffy come in last minute 'save everyone' and demand he not kill those involved. Specially those fics where Riley, one the men in charge, has to be forgiven.

So I liked this fic because while Xander getting totured and experimented on sucks.. at least he fought back with equal force and didn't just roll over and ignore it. Though he still has the higher ups who funded the project and such to deal with.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it, the story is a bit darker than i am usually willing to do, but i watched the movie and the plot bunnies started to gnaw on me.

Thanks for the great Review.

-Tjin
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [10 Oct 09] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Morgomir
Review:
I liked it more than the actual Max Payne movie. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [25 Feb 09] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from JediKnight
Review:
Interesting story, a little too short though.
Do you know when you might update either "Xander and the Snake" and/or "Iron Gear"?
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [13 Nov 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Damn, I was hoping for a Xander/Tara story.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [21 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Elleria
Review:
Wow. I've gotta watch Max Payne, allready wanted to see it now I do even more.
Review By [Elleria] • Date [21 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from eriktheviking
Review:
I didn't know the Max Payne story before reading this, but it was a well written chapter. However, I'm not sure if there is enough conclusion for it to be left as it is.

Thanks
Comments from author:
I'm not entirely sure if this is the final conclusion or not, hopefully the plotbunnies will help out by gnawing on my leg until i write something else out.

i'm glad you enjoyed the fic.

-Tjin
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from missinglink
Review:
Solid one shot. Really like the framing of it and the flow. Would be interesting to see where it goes once Walsh is dead. Haven't seen the movie so don't know if direction is shown there, but would this Xander just go back to Sunnydale or not due to how he may feel he has changed? Also if he were to go back would Buffy be seeing Riley by that point and what a blowup that could lead to.

Like most one shots, this too could just stay a one and done or be apart of a larger story. Wouldn't be sad to see more, but that like most things are due to how pesky those plot bunnies make themselves.

Again, thanks for the interesting plot. Too bad about Tera though. Would be neat if one were to continue to find a creative way to bring her back to him as a guardian angel or some kind of watch over role to help him atone.
Comments from author:
as this is set between seasons 3/4 it's doubtful if Buffy has actually met Riley by this point, it would be an interesting plot hook if she was dating him.

Xander would most likely return to SD but something like this would scar the 'Happy go Lucky' young man for life and the story would be markedly darker then the original series.

if Continued Tara would continue to 'Haunt' Xander in memory or (Being Sunnydale) Reality much as Max's Wife and child did in the game... but again the entire thing would be a LOT Darker...

I'm glad you enjoyed the fic.

-Tjin
Review By [missinglink] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Jarvey
Review:
Woah... I finished playing Max Payne 2....30 seconds before reading this!
Comments from author:
Well... i hope you enjoyed it... the game or the fic, whichever...

-Tjin
Review By [Jarvey] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Bobboky
Review:
excellent
Comments from author:
Hope you enjoyed the fic.

-Tjin
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from LordCorwin
Review:
Wow .... uh ... WOW! .... *small breaths* .... WOOOOOOOOOW!
Comments from author:
By George i do believe they enjoyed it... well, at least i hope they did.

-Tjin
Review By [LordCorwin] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CPTSkip
Review:
Wee doggies! Now this is a nasty little story. Will there be more? I kept thinking Willow would be going to go all Darth Willow on the Initiative, but she never had the chance to meet Tara in your time-line. Of course she and Buffy are not going to be happy campers when they find out what the Initiative did to Xander. I like a story that gives me lots of things to think about. Nicely done.
Comments from author:
If continued (No promises.) This would most likely end up being a very very Dark fic, with Xander trying to get over being 'Haunted' by the memory of Tara, getting over the addiction to Valkyrie and dealing with the memory of killing so many people... and while i like writing out a bit of a dark horse every now and then... i don't think i can manage this one.

but again no promises...

I'm glad you enjoyed the fic.

-Tjin
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from IAMZIPPY
Review:
to bad it's just a one shot
Comments from author:
that's all it worked out as... of course my plot bunnies have a habit of staging a strike until i work on something i thought done and buried soo.... you never know.

i hope you enjoyed the story.

-Tjin
Review By [IAMZIPPY] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Greywizard
Review:
Haven't seen the movie yet, so I have no idea how closely the story may or may not parallel it, but it falls completely and totally withing what I see as Maggie's sociopathic obsession wit creating a perfect soldier.

It's just a shame Xander can only kill her once.

Good work.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you enjoyed it, as for the movie... it was an interesting action flick with a bit of Drama mixed in... worth it to shell out four fifty for two hours of entertainment that spawned this.

-Tjin
Review By [Greywizard] • Date [19 Oct 08] • Not Rated
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