Well, apart from the "forbiddened," (forbidden would have been fine) "whinnying" (whining) and "And it looked hunger" (hungry) thing this isn't that bad, though I'd like to know where you were heading with this.

Please continue this.

There are too few Starcraft xovers around, and this has the potential to be good.

Not bad though does bring Buffy down to a darker level if willing toss a friend into hell for something simple as a lie, a well meaning one at that. Add to it Buffy and angel couldn't really be together without making him 'happy' again...

I honestly always felt that incident was the start of the downward spiral of Buffy's character. She let countless innocents die to Angelus when refused to kill him. Add to that after his big 'sent to hell bit' she left Sunnydale and her family, friends etc undefended as she played pity party in LA.

If this story ever does get carried on I really do hope Xander comes back to kill torture and maim Buffy for her crimes.. perhaps some kind eternal torment? Throwing your lover into a hell dimension he opened up to save the world is one thing.. tossing your friend in gleefully is another.

Are you ever going to update this story? It sounds like it could be vary good.

the story has amazing potential

Very nice beginning. I agree with the beta, you need to expand out the first chapter. The part with buffy is fine but the journey in the starcraft world needs to be expanded. Loving it!!! keep up the good work

I'm pretty sure a Hydralisk can survive a single grenade.


Edit Response: Given that they can live through getting shot in the face with a bolt of plasma capable of melting through solid steel... Besides; They can live through Reaper Frag. Grendades in Beta.

A normal grenade, yes I would agree. But Xander shoved a high-explosive fragment grenade down a Hydralisk's throat. I think nothing would survive that.

Very nice i would like to see this story expanded!!!!
I really want to see what happens to Xander

so far so good need more than just a tease please.

Interesting beginning. I look forward to seeing where you go with it.

Who told Buffy that Xander had lied?

Be consistent on the gender you assign to the Creator. I have trouble with the idea that PTB could hide their universe.

ooh that was interesting even though I didn't know the other genre that you wrote about. please more are they gonna send Xander back to thouroughly kick the slayers ass hmmmm.